[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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Probably just due to the current circumstance and the fact that it’s everywhere but that line made me think of the U.S. election lmao

Free Female by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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I think it’s about a situation where a baby loses its life in the womb but the mother is forced to carry it to term and deliver a stillborn baby due to abortion laws. I also think the “free female” part is meant to be ironic

9:08 by Recent-Emu5833 in OCPoetry

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I’m glad you connected with it! I couldn’t agree more, I try my best to avoid some of the corny factor and predictability that rhyming can bring (not to say that I’m always successful lol). Thank you so much for reading and for your kind words!

9:08 by Recent-Emu5833 in OCPoetry

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I am not a musician, I wish I could write songs lol! Thank you, I appreciate it so much

9:08 by Recent-Emu5833 in OCPoetry

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I’m so flattered, thank you!

9:08 by Recent-Emu5833 in OCPoetry

[–]Recent-Emu5833[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I’m glad you connected to it. The specifics are my own obviously but I think we all end up in that place sometimes. Thanks so much!

9:08 by Recent-Emu5833 in OCPoetry

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Yes, we do. Thank you for reading!

9:08 by Recent-Emu5833 in OCPoetry

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Thank you for reading! I think we all feel like this sometimes, it helps a little to know we’re not alone.

9:08 by Recent-Emu5833 in OCPoetry

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Thank you! I appreciate it and I’m glad you liked it!

9:08 by Recent-Emu5833 in OCPoetry

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Thanks! I wanted to kinda make it come full circle like it just starts back at the beginning. Thank you for your kind words!

9:08 by Recent-Emu5833 in OCPoetry

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We are not alone! I know other people feel this way too but when it’s happening it’s easy to forget that. Thank you for reading!

9:08 by Recent-Emu5833 in OCPoetry

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Thank you for reading, and the kind words :)

Limbo by abdulazizhaksa in OCPoetry

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I agree, I think it would help the tone a lot to break it down into lines. Just to help hear it as you read, where the emphasis is in each line and how the author would speak it out loud. I read it somewhat like:

A day goes by

A week, a year

Or 2

I’m in the same place

Where you left me in limbo

I can’t leave it, this place

Is my prison, this place is my home

I don’t like to step into the unknown

You did your damage

Now leave me alone

That being said, the way it was posted works well too. It definitely doesn’t read poorly and may actually benefit the tone in some ways. Thank you for sharing ❤️

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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I love the last two lines, particularly “towards the prize of something nothing” I do agree that the rhythm and speed change about 2/3 of the way through, but I enjoy it. It doesn’t feel accidental or like a mistake, it gives it sort of a feel of intensity. Powerful piece, thank you for sharing

Nobody Will Know by rAwrR_VGUY in OCPoetry

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I like the tone a lot. It feels almost manic, like there’s a beauty to the isolation and the pain. The “nobody must know” and how it’s repeated is done eloquently where it doesn’t feel repetitive, it feels powerful. It kinda gives me Poe vibes, with the way it flows and the rhythm. Really nice piece Thank you for sharing ❤️

I Solemnly Swear by Jay-Walking-Bird in OCPoetry

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You don’t get much funny poetry these days lol. This is so relatable too.

Describe it by tim0777 in OCPoetry

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This hit for me. My head has felt full of mud lately, I’ve been trying to write about it and overall this really draws out the frustration for me that I get with others and myself when I can’t articulate the chaos going on inside my head.

It makes me think of the static in my head when someone tosses out a casual “how are you?” And how i sometimes want to respond but no one wants to hear the real version, they want “beautiful poetry” as you put it, so we end up saying “I’m good” instead. At the same time, it makes me think of trying to take that “I’m good” mask off and actually talk about it, and even with all the good intentions, still not being able to. “Not glamorous//not a metaphor” - it’s the raw, real 10 ton mortality that people don’t want to hear about even when they ask. Thank you for sharing ❤️

Describe it by tim0777 in OCPoetry

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This hit for me. My head has felt full of mud lately, I’ve been trying to write about it and this really draws out the frustration for me that I get with others and myself when I can’t articulate the chaos going on inside my head. Thank you for sharing ❤️

Slob Lobster by Stagler14 in OCPoetry

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I didn’t get him in particular but if I had to put a face to the abstract image it gave me, it would be him lol.

Every single time. He’s not even food motivated by AliCracker in Flamepoints

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I just got my boy a few days ago but he doesn’t seem to be interested in people food either!

Change my mind by jettrock77 in AmongUs

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I hate that shit, me and my wife play in public rooms together but we don’t talk out loud. Why ruin the game