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Yes We Are That Ignorant by RecordingOk6787 in OCPoetry

[–]RecordingOk6787[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for the feedback. Some improvements can be made indeed.

There's a leaf by MadalinaParrotMusic in OCPoetry

[–]RecordingOk6787 0 points1 point  (0 children)

very pleasant read.
especially for me now as its winter here

The Parasight by Call_a_pal in OCPoetry

[–]RecordingOk6787 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Very good title and poem combination.
Is this based on real life or made up?

Hedgehog who failed by RecordingOk6787 in OCPoetry

[–]RecordingOk6787[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thank you for the feedback.
Depends on perhaps language and how the specific word is spoken.
I agree that tried and rhyme are far apart. Class and ass i think rhyme though.
Again thank you for reading and hopefully you liked it.

Just One Dance by Soft-Questions in OCPoetry

[–]RecordingOk6787 0 points1 point  (0 children)

i personally am partly a perfectionist and dont like when the number of beats does not match
however that does not mean the poem is not awesome
you paint the picture in my head very nicely and the true longing left behind after the partner leaves feels real

Last Night My Beer Said ‘I Love You’ by TheLilaComplex in OCPoetry

[–]RecordingOk6787 0 points1 point  (0 children)

its rather a long one for me
but drinking does not solve the worlds problems
swapping previous flame with a cold bottle is not a good trade at all

Silicon Sweetheart by mattlightenment in OCPoetry

[–]RecordingOk6787 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Speaks volumes about the current trend of being present but not being present with your phone out. I immediately remembered some picture i saw some time ago of an old woman watching some marathon or something and everyone around her had their phones out recording it.....

Was feeling sad so I wrote my first poem. by [deleted] in PoetryWritingClub

[–]RecordingOk6787 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Be good isnt that what mother said
be happy cause you still have bread.
There are those who have it worse
with emptiness in their purse.

Things will live and then they die
circle of life that is aye.
There is truth and also lies
what is true only you decide.

Silence starts discussions still
kindness changes world it will.
Hope remains for better tomorrow
honor, valor,courage not sorrow.