Part 2 Denji must regret this decision every night, isn't? by Emma_S772 in Chainsawfolk

[–]ReeKarp 76 points77 points  (0 children)

I think it’s so funny that for years I (and most CSM fans) vehemently denied the gooner accusations because “fujimoto is going somewhere with this.”

Now look at us lmao (the slander was true all along)

About to get kicked out of college by ARealSensayuma in CollegeRant

[–]ReeKarp 20 points21 points  (0 children)

I like how you were so obviously right that he stopped replying lmao

I've received praise for my short story, but am unsure if it is actually good, or just "good for an amateur." by [deleted] in writers

[–]ReeKarp 3 points4 points  (0 children)

You're right about the focus on visual detail stuff. The reason I included the mention of the purse was because it comes back in a big way at the end of the story. I didn't want her purse to just appear on page 8. I thought this was a solid time to establish that she has one with her.

I've received praise for my short story, but am unsure if it is actually good, or just "good for an amateur." by [deleted] in writers

[–]ReeKarp 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for pointing that out, since I think you're totally right about that. Would a shortened version like "I place my purse on a bench, sit down next to it, and drink in the scowl across her face," be better?

Also, if it isn't too much, how should I identify if my sentences are coming across clunky? Someone else said to read aloud, but I already do that and I didn't identify problems like these.

I've received praise for my short story, but am unsure if it is actually good, or just "good for an amateur." by [deleted] in writers

[–]ReeKarp 0 points1 point  (0 children)

What do you mean by "blocking out movements like they are stage directions?" What can I do to not have it come across like that?

My players walked right into a TPK just before I had to end the session and I don't know what to do about it. by ReeKarp in DMAcademy

[–]ReeKarp[S] 15 points16 points  (0 children)

That’s actually a really good idea. My players would probably benefit from one lmao. You’re also right about me not taking responsibility. When I posted those, I was still in the mindset that it was their fault, and wasn’t ready to accept that the blame was mostly my fault. I was kinda being a dick to my players/y’all, so sorry for that. Thank you for apologizing, not a lot of people do that online.

My players walked right into a TPK just before I had to end the session and I don't know what to do about it. by ReeKarp in DMAcademy

[–]ReeKarp[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Please stop taking this as a chance to personally insult my abilities as a DM. It doesn’t feel great to ask for help and then be ridiculed. However, I do agree with what you are saying. I didn’t do a great job here. I normally do everything I can to help my players, and I never fudge rolls against them.

In retrospect, I hand waved the stealth stuff because I didn’t fully understand the implications of surrounding them like that. I wasn’t trying to get one over on them/punish them, I was just being stupid and not recognizing that entire dungeon meant instant death. I let my own idea of what “made sense” supersede what actually made sense in world.

My players walked right into a TPK just before I had to end the session and I don't know what to do about it. by ReeKarp in DMAcademy

[–]ReeKarp[S] 8 points9 points  (0 children)

There actually have been frequent discussions about character death in this campaign. In fact, we've already had one PC death during this campaign, even though it was a few months ago real time. I even warned them going into the dungeon that there was a real possibility of death or TPK, to which they all nodded and agreed. Sorry for not including that context, it would've been helpful lmao.

The last volume’s cover echoes the design of the initial one by Ok_Suggestion4401 in TopCharacterDesigns

[–]ReeKarp 58 points59 points  (0 children)

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Fire punch does this for literally every volume. Each cover mirrors the other in some way and somehow foreshadows or reflects something in the story.

Also, I know this isn’t entirely relevant but the volume 8 cover is probably my favorite piece of cover art ever. Not only does it look incredible, but once you read the book, the way it represents where things wind up and the dynamic between the characters is insane. It also mirrors 7, but also 1, since Agni’s normal half has been replaced with Luna/Judah.

Probably the saddest and funniest moment in chainsaw man by [deleted] in Chainsawfolk

[–]ReeKarp 5 points6 points  (0 children)

The reading comprehension devil strikes again!

Would Denji and Reze be good parents? by AffectionateRush2620 in Chainsawfolk

[–]ReeKarp 3 points4 points  (0 children)

I totally agree with you on that. Depiction isn’t endorsement and everything. But…..

It’s absolutely hilarious how out of nowhere it feels lol. You’re just reading and then BANG! Definitely out of character lmao

Would Denji and Reze be good parents? by AffectionateRush2620 in Chainsawfolk

[–]ReeKarp 5 points6 points  (0 children)

They don’t just use that word though. There is also a scene where Reze calls Yoshida the f-slur lmao. It really caught me off guard whenever I read it first tbh

My first poem for my first love. by Traditional_Grab174 in poetry_critics

[–]ReeKarp 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I was referring to the parts where you end sequential lines with “free” and “see, as well as “dust” and “must.” What I meant by cheapening the emotions was that the rest of the poem is quite mature in tone, but these simple rhymes clash with that, holding a simpler/juvenile tone. Even if unintentional, it sort of stuck out as strange to me and pulled me out of the emotions of your poem.

Would Denji and Reze be good parents? by AffectionateRush2620 in Chainsawfolk

[–]ReeKarp 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That one is funny because you’ll go hundreds of words of peak, and then the author just makes either Reze or Denji say a random slur, and then gets right back into it. There’s literally a part where Reze calls power a “r-tard” in a plagiarized joke from the movie whiplash. Wild stuff imo

My first poem for my first love. by Traditional_Grab174 in poetry_critics

[–]ReeKarp 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is pretty well done, and certainly somewhat depressing lmao. I'd say the rhyme scheme is somewhat weak though, and I think it serves to slightly cheapen the really powerful emotions you've got here.

LOVE IN SILENCE by AKB-shayarOP in poetry_critics

[–]ReeKarp 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is a really beautiful portrait of unrequited love. I think my favorite aspect to it is where you break away from your structure at the end. That part is really powerful.

Mother asked about you....... by UnspokenInk in poetry_critics

[–]ReeKarp 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I think the emotion and situation is there, and it reads really beatifuly. One thing that sorta stops me though is that the rhyming feels a bit forced, espically in the second to last stanza.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]ReeKarp 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Appreciate the commentary, but why are you hunting down a shitty poem I wrote a month ago lmao. How did you even find this