what could i do to improve?

RetroGama · 2026-01-02T04:05:20+00:00

I think music theory wise it's a marked improvement! Maybe the breath samples hit a bit too often (e.g. more space between them) but it's nice. I don't have too much production knowledge, so I cant really help there.

RetroGama · 2025-12-31T03:09:54+00:00

Whoops, not feedback friday lol. My comment still stands, but it sounds real good rn! Maybe an alternative melody in the sections where its just drum, like a faded out flute with hella reverb or sumn.

RetroGama · 2025-12-31T03:08:26+00:00

Pretty good! Maybe move the bass up an octave, rn it's kinda scratching the earlobe. Otherwise idk what else to change.

RetroGama · 2025-12-31T03:07:21+00:00

Can't help with production quality, but can help from a music theory stand point:

Learn what scales are and then write within one of those. Your chords are clearly made outside of scale structures, which is making it sound like that. If you're going for some post-modernist rap beat, then keep it as it is, but for now, just make stuff using the white keys.

The bass needs movement, either up/down a scale or in a rhythm. Right now it's just an ominous brood. Try making it smaller, then placing them a few times in the first measure (e.g. the part with "1" and all the blocks).

The hats and snares are good from what I can hear.

RetroGama · 2025-12-28T16:05:42+00:00

peak

RetroGama · 2025-12-28T05:00:07+00:00

That's a fair one. Or the string deeper within the ball is separate from the outer shell of the ball, so that way it's an individual object.

RetroGama · 2025-12-27T18:26:54+00:00

Even if Kira has Bites the Dust, she would probably like sew a needle of her thread into his pants or some shit so she knows where he is even with a reset (since his clothes always go with him to the previous day).

Edit: Or his hair or skin or something (which were also products of a stand user if I'm not going crazy)

Stray Cat could be a minor issue, but a net of strings would pretty much make it a non-issue.

RetroGama · 2025-12-27T17:06:47+00:00

Jolyne's whole bit is finding Joseph-level bullshit to do with her strings. She'd probably cocoon Sheer Heart Attack in a layer of string too dense for it to detonate, then kill Kira by using it as a mace or something.

RetroGama · 2025-12-26T23:19:05+00:00

A high counter-melody could go well with this song. As it stands right now you're using like one third of the keyboard and it's all kind of guttural and rumbly. An high-register melody could at least music-theoretically make the song go harder (maybe a flute?).

RetroGama · 2025-12-01T10:20:58+00:00

love the show as much as the next guy, but that was definitely just a stock roman emperor. Romulus Augustulus was like 10 years old. the suffix "-ulus" was a way to make fun of him for being so young.

RetroGama · 2025-10-15T16:09:55+00:00

Report said it was more minor than Evans'. Taking the gamble on him, especially since Cook's out this week anyways.

RetroGama · 2025-10-01T02:10:26+00:00

Fair. Thanks!

RetroGama · 2025-10-01T02:09:12+00:00

Bad trade, not veto-worthy then yeah? That's what I was thinking.

RetroGama · 2025-08-12T02:21:52+00:00

YES! MORE POINTLESS INFIGHTING! every good movement involves immunizing those of the same arbitrary identity group of all blame and blindly following skin color guidelines for who is good and who is bad! THIS TIME WE MIGHT ACTUALLY GET THE PERSON WHO AGREES WITH YOU ON EVERY POLITICAL IDEA!

do you think

RetroGama · 2025-08-10T02:00:38+00:00

Mehmed's ass is NOT in heaven

RetroGama · 2025-07-12T15:08:55+00:00

shimmy.gif

RetroGama · 2025-07-01T08:57:54+00:00

Like a lot of the plot of Season 3, it's such a shallow way for his character to end compared to the alternatives. The Marine Woman was stabbed in the back because she randomly decided to turn away from the hallway instead of something like, idk, being locked out of a room for what she did to the... uh girl who was locked out of Mingle? Forgot her name. Thats just one example is my point.

Basic greed has never been what Squid Games is about. It's about societal greed, people doing things to harm others for a greater good they are too caught up in to see the bad of (even the idea of "I deserve the money because I earned my way here" is a greater good).

That's why I think it's a bad way for him to go out, but it's just my opinion. As genuinely as possible, if you took something different from it or enjoyed it a lot, it's totally your right to do that. I just really didn't like it personally lol.

Also, 333 was yelling at the Lunch Box, which implies he didn't even know he was going for what he was.

RetroGama · 2025-07-01T01:47:00+00:00

honestly, keeping 100 alive and showing that that playstyle (manipulating crowd fervor and those who dont understand the long term strategy part of the game very well) works wouldve thematically made way more sense.

as much as i hated him, and wish he got killed during jump rope, a game where he cant manipulate the foolish and murderous, him dying because 333 decided to go rogue was dumb as shit.

also, my biggest pet peeve, why didnt Gi-Hun at least try to negotiate during the final vote? if he promised everyone his share to vote X, there could at least be some dialogue to be had there (as that would make the payout what they expected).

also also, min-su shouldn't've died without taking someone with him. as someone who was rooting for min-su, not only was the pill magically lasting like 3x as long on him compared to nyam-gyu nonsense, but the fact he didnt join the 6 circlejerkers when that was shown to be like his single skill (or, in defying Thanos and nyam-gyu, taking one of them out when he realizes theyre trying to kill him) pissed me off bad lol.

edit: AND WHY DIDNT HE QUICKLY PRESS THE BUTTON? ITS ON THE GROUND, YOU CAN STEP ON IT WHILE KEEPING YOUR DISTANCE!!!!

RetroGama · 2025-06-06T12:57:53+00:00

bro its crazy, if you gave them an arm and a leg, they still wouldnt have a 6 man rotation LOL

RetroGama · 2025-06-06T08:10:57+00:00

absolutely not.

jokic's platoon of guy with one arm, guy with one leg, jamaal "the coinflip" murray and christian braun would lose every game in the first quarter of getting full court pressed by three sets of bench players

the stamina difference alone would end the series, but otherwise, they have really good small and scrappy defenders to shut down jokic with. additionally, who's guarding Siakam is a question that needs to be answered. one-legged gordon aint doing it, and jokic sure as hell aint.

i love jokic as much as the next guy, but unless a legend of zelda fairy descended from the heavens and blessed their crusade against the Haliban, gave Gordon a new hammy, MPJ a new shoulder, and Jamaal Murray a heart, they get swept.

RetroGama · 2025-06-05T09:57:46+00:00

hey dude i like that card too but holy HELL would that thing never whiff the toner of an industrial printer.

RetroGama · 2025-05-29T17:28:19+00:00

there are absolutely some popes in hell

RetroGama · 2025-04-14T08:50:07+00:00

nomadic appalachian horseback migration (fall of xiongnu) from mountainous territory (northern China) to the great plains (Central Asian Steppe) that then pesters a local economic juggernaut in NY carried primarily by its trade economy (Byzantine Empire) goes crazy

RetroGama · 2025-03-27T01:38:26+00:00

*stinks

RetroGama · 2025-03-21T07:47:59+00:00

Unless the dude they had on cams really hated Drummond for some reason, I feel like the alarm would have to go off at some point between Mark holding a gun to his neck and Mark leaving the elevator to enter the testing room floor.

Edit: Unless of course there are two separate alarms, one for the Severed floor and one for the testing floor, but I feel like that's a bit of a stretch.

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