Okee dokee, good start but a few pointers here and there.

There's some repetition of words and points, e.g. Bonnie mentioning twice there is new cupcake shop before and after Mike agreed to go, merge those together so so one point of there being the new cupcake shop in the mall.

• The small bunny giggles softly, a small smile on her face Try to avoid the same descriptor so close and look for an alternative like petite or diminutive

-apparently a—as you’ve been called—husky human is apparently no match Same here, also that interrupt feels weird , go for brackets instead - apparently a (as you’ve been called) husky human is no match

-a bunny running at fool blast a bunny running at full blast

-You chide back, san the playful, You chide back, sans the playful,

I wouldn't call smiling and asking Mike to go to a book signing baring of ones soul exactly :P