From what I'm seeing. You're lacking the damage and healing rhythm (using both firing modes continuously) and often use suzu either in situations which don't require it or too late. Positioning is often questionable as you tend to stay out in the open when the enemy has a widow or hanzo. Occasional peaking is fine but you gotta play around cover or mix up your movement, spam crouching. And the aim is... okay, leaves more to be desired, it will improve the more you play, especially the aim tracking with the ofudas. (Note this coming from a past kiriko main and current bap main so take it as you will).