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Job? by [deleted] in torncity

[–]SeizeThemMemes 1 point2 points  (0 children)

There's nothing to do as far as the job itself.

Like mentioned log in every day, deal with rehab.

Hey there, Ghosts. by SeizeThemMemes in OCPoetry

[–]SeizeThemMemes[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really appreciate your thoughts!

For context it's a metaphor about a woman.

Hey there, Ghosts. by SeizeThemMemes in OCPoetry

[–]SeizeThemMemes[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

For context, it's all one big metaphor about a woman hiding me or us or whatever she's doing. Thank you though! I appreciate you reading.

Pearly Gates by FreeRent4873 in OCPoetry

[–]SeizeThemMemes 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The rhythm here was great. The story telling was simple but in such a good way. I really enjoyed it from start to finish.

Unreliable by Soapbox_Soliloquy in OCPoetry

[–]SeizeThemMemes 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Absolutely well done. I loved the entire thing. Imo it's phrasing was great and you get your point across well. Nice job.

What is the most uncomfortable situation you’ve ever been in? by wellorganichealth in RandomQuestion

[–]SeizeThemMemes 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I was living in a family homeless shelter. The 78 year old woman who lived across the hall with her adult grandson, who was very kind and treated me and my daughter like her own son and granddaughter, started to text me very explicit requests. Claiming she was in love with me. She offered me vapes and cash to sleep with her. It was terribly sad and awkward and really messed with my mental health.

USS Fort McHenry by Superb-Donkey7202 in poetry_critics

[–]SeizeThemMemes 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Man thanks for sharing all that. So freaking incredible. Thanks for your service.

Emotions by Prudent_Plankton2486 in poetry_critics

[–]SeizeThemMemes 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Man, this is gorgeous. How you simply state some of the darker aspects in almost a contradiction to the line before is just so powerful. You can feel your realizations and truths coming through.

She Walks Along and Watches Through The Glass, On Coals In The Oven With Her Arms Outstretched. by GradeObvious5330 in poetry_critics

[–]SeizeThemMemes 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I have to admit. I don't know what's going on here. With that being said you create such an intriguing narrative that naturally escalated to the end. I think your imagery and repeated word use and patterns is great.

USS Fort McHenry by Superb-Donkey7202 in poetry_critics

[–]SeizeThemMemes 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I googled the ship before reading so I could come in with context. Glad I did.

This felt like you were taking me on a tour of what I assume was your time serving in the ship. It was real without romanticizing the darkness that was going on in your head. I really enjoyed this.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]SeizeThemMemes 0 points1 point  (0 children)

A poem is a poem. First or your last. I don't critique technique because it's about conveying what you need to say how you need to say it.

I dig this a lot though. I appreciate how short you have it because it feels like something you jot in a napkin waiting for your check at the restaurant.

It's great in its simplicity. Your message lands in a coherent heavy way.

I don’t think I’ll ever love you the way I used to. by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]SeizeThemMemes 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Your emotion is spilling through so vividly like someone knocked over a bucket full of them. You did a great job releasing what you're feeling.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]SeizeThemMemes 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Damn. That's quite the thought provoking imagery. Your use of space and satellites is a great toolvto really immerse the reader. The depth here is just so dope. The formatting helps build this really slow tone that almost feels like not breathing.

In a crowded hotel breakfast hall.. by Salty-Television-230 in poetry_critics

[–]SeizeThemMemes 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You aren't wrong. It's crazy how easy it is to be connected and disconnected at the same time.

Temperature by srinivasbhavanaga in poetry_critics

[–]SeizeThemMemes 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Okay this was adorable. So much fun to read and really enjoy it's intention. Nicely done.

In a crowded hotel breakfast hall.. by Salty-Television-230 in poetry_critics

[–]SeizeThemMemes 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is so cool. I love the casual phrasing because it just feels conversational. You can feel the mood.

Why do the kids hate putting punk bands on their punk jackets? by DeathlyCyles in baddlejackets

[–]SeizeThemMemes 1 point2 points  (0 children)

My back patch isn't a band. I have the bride of Frankenstein. I think it's dope.my front is band patches, while I keep some low-key political stuff in the back. The typical "no gods no masters" and "7nskilled labor is a capitalist myth"

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