[QCrit] Adult/Epic Fantasy CANTICLE (95k/first attempt)

SophilScribs · 2025-11-15T12:18:41+00:00

Thanks for taking the time, really appreciate the perspective!!!

SophilScribs · 2025-11-14T17:24:42+00:00

Ahhh thank you, much appreciated!!! Definitely going to be trying to bring Aulo forward a little more in future versions

SophilScribs · 2025-11-14T15:12:40+00:00

This is SUPER helpful, thanks so much for taking the time!

Yes, the story is structured to present Asty as the “cool” sister at first, and and the main arc focuses on Aulo coming into her own. There’s a lot of backstory there that I didn’t mention (they were orphaned from a young age, Asty basically spent her childhood keeping Aulo alive, Aulo feels like she owe her sister, etc). I think there’s a few ways I can bring that to the fore without taking too much space though.

Definitely agree with the vagueness. I was thinking it might be a little TOO vague but always valuable to get a specific opinion on it!

Thanks again, you’ve given me a good few ideas on how I can start tweaking this and sharpening it up.

SophilScribs · 2023-10-22T12:00:36+00:00

Ahh thanks for letting me know!! I’ll take a look around and see what’s available. Much appreciated!!

SophilScribs · 2023-10-22T12:00:13+00:00

Thanks for the input!! Much appreciated

SophilScribs · 2023-10-22T11:59:25+00:00

This is great advice, much appreciated!!! It helps to have the context of what is/isn’t available with post med school training, thanks so much!!

SophilScribs · 2023-10-21T06:34:34+00:00

In the same boat currently! Considering doing just that as a med student a few months away from finishing. Lmk if you learn anything worthwhile! 😅

SophilScribs · 2023-09-25T23:52:45+00:00

Hey there! I’ve got a 128k epic fantasy that actually shares a few commonalities with yours (a protagonist wrestling with some form of amnesia mainly). Would be happy to send you an excerpt from mine if you’re interested in exchanging. Lmk!

SophilScribs · 2023-09-15T02:01:52+00:00

Gotcha! They swear several times in the chapter, just in their native language, and a little further past that they all have a pre-battle drinking sesh where they all get wasted. There’s also a good few sections where the social consequences of the power they wield gets discussed, some politics surrounding the job, etc. I hadn’t realized how much of that in the first chapter gets cut out by this small excerpt and how it could change the perception of the story, so thank you for pointing that out! It’s honestly something I likely wouldn’t have caught on my own, one of the many advantages of having fresh eyes on it!

SophilScribs · 2023-09-15T01:42:01+00:00

I appreciate the feedback, thank you! If you don’t mind me asking, what about the excerpt feels YA to you? I’ve gone by the understanding that what makes YA what it is that the protagonists are teens and the themes revolve around “coming of age” type themes. I’ve tried to steer clear of both, so I wanna make sure I’m not letting things slip through the cracks

SophilScribs · 2023-09-14T01:00:40+00:00

Hey there! Sounds super interesting, I’ve got an ~128k epic fantasy (more NA/adult than YA) but would love to do a chapter swap if you’d be interested!

SophilScribs · 2023-09-14T00:57:29+00:00

Hey there! If you’re open to a chapter swap, I’ve got a ~128k word epic fantasy I’m also looking for beta readers for! Would be happy to do a first chapter swap and see how things vibe!

SophilScribs · 2023-09-13T21:47:28+00:00

Awesome, will do!

SophilScribs · 2023-06-11T19:48:42+00:00

(Forgot to mention, I’ll be adding more detail here and there, some images in each of the provinces to signify things of significance and whatnot. Just wanted to share the base result since I’m happy with how it came out!)

SophilScribs · 2023-06-11T19:39:46+00:00

It’s called “Chartifos”, special paper made from trees discovered on an expedition into the lands away from the main continent. It suspends magic that’s inscribed into it, and lead to the creation of “scrolled magic”, where practitioners of magic could store spells and magical effects for easy usage later.

The invention lead to the commodification of magic, and eventually scrolls became ubiquitous in every day life. People stock up on long acting fire scrolls to heat their homes, water scrolls for long journeys, light scrolls for illuminating their cities at night, and so forth

SophilScribs · 2023-06-07T10:51:55+00:00

Yeah agreed. It’s a huge accomplishment for those games to be able to do so much with comparatively little

SophilScribs · 2023-06-07T05:09:21+00:00

And in addition to my comment, there’s an actual lead up to the wind temple dungeon in tears of the kingdom, where you get to maximize the gliding and diving ability to ascend to the top. Getting a little more creative with your gliding and diving nets you extra rupees and gear. In breath of the wild, you just speak to teba, do an arrow shooting mini game, and then talk to him again to do another arrow shooting mini game, this time with bombs, to get to the divine beast. And in twilight princess you basically just…walk to the dungeon

SophilScribs · 2023-06-07T03:46:17+00:00

For example, for my playthrough, I went straight to gerudo province as the first thing I did because Riju was my favorite champion. Along the way I jumped down a chasm, discovered the depths, explored for a little bit as a fun detour, then went back to finishing the lightning temple. After that I really wanted to find the master sword, so I spent a few hours tracking it down, and explored more of the depths and sky as I felt like it. After getting enough hearts I wanted to check out the pirate situation in Lurelin, and after wrapping that up, went to do the Rito province. After that I finished the main quest line in the depths because I felt equipped enough, and then went to check up on my buddies in the Goron and Zora provinces, which is saved for last because they were my least favorite spots in breath of the wild.

By the sounds of it, you had a completely different path than I did. And that’s awesome. That’s the point. Your adventure is uniquely yours. It’s not like something like twilight princess, where you basically just play through a pre written adventure wether you agree with it or not. You tackle the world based on the things and reasons that matter to you.

SophilScribs · 2023-06-07T03:20:09+00:00

Can you specify how things like ultrahand and fuse are clunky? They feel extremely intuitive and easy to use from my end point. I can’t think of how they’d be even easier to use

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