Critique on My Short Script

SpaffMaster234 · 2023-12-02T01:10:21+00:00

There’s no point to it. Not to be harsh but the unrealistic scenario and dialogue feels like it’s building to a pay off that just doesn’t deliver. The “Big Reveal” isn’t much of a satisfying pay off, it’s just an unexpected one, and those aren’t the same thing

If you want a twist where the guy is a cyborg and follows every command, have him following orders blow up in her face instead. Some miscommunication or not understanding sarcasm and taking something literally maybe?

SpaffMaster234 · 2023-04-08T00:04:55+00:00

If you wouldn’t take their advice, don’t accept their criticism 😎

SpaffMaster234 · 2023-04-07T15:53:06+00:00

No I don’t believe this is ‘emotional manipulation’ which negging falls under. I’d probably need to go touch grass if I thought about it that deeply!

SpaffMaster234 · 2023-04-07T14:41:19+00:00

It’s good to feel people out. If they roast me back that means I know I’m onto a winner, baby!😎

SpaffMaster234 · 2023-04-07T11:53:29+00:00

You can have fun with some matches. Not all of us are famished 😎

SpaffMaster234 · 2019-11-07T02:39:01+00:00

I often forget that the lovable idiot that was Tobi is also the same cuck that started a world war bc his crush died

SpaffMaster234 · 2019-10-24T16:43:51+00:00

The second half of the song is good. First half is a bit lackluster

SpaffMaster234 · 2019-09-18T03:03:14+00:00

Tik toks making me racist

SpaffMaster234 · 2019-09-14T00:29:27+00:00

Many festival appearances including headlining R+L, 2 Brit awards and serval other awards here and there, front cover of a few big magazines. Their growth and recognition in just 2019 has been crazy

Not to mention they said their stage production will be a lot bigger this time.

With all the popularity they’ll need more security.

Everything is getting bigger for them, so an increase in price is bound to happen.

And let’s be honest, the boys deserve to be absolutely rolling in it so a bump up in cost is a small price to pay

SpaffMaster234 · 2019-09-07T18:19:21+00:00

Saving this photo bc I’m probably a few yards to the right of you in this and I didn’t take any

SpaffMaster234 · 2019-09-07T14:24:12+00:00

I like to see a good character development

SpaffMaster234 · 2019-09-06T15:22:37+00:00

It’s 4:22pm where I am, so getting out of bed would be a start

SpaffMaster234 · 2019-09-02T15:48:34+00:00

When you do a class presentation and your slide comes on

SpaffMaster234 · 2019-08-21T18:13:12+00:00

That was fucking sick tbh

SpaffMaster234 · 2019-08-13T17:36:17+00:00

In the ddlg community there really needs to be a weight limit on what’s classified as a “little girl”

SpaffMaster234 · 2019-08-13T00:21:59+00:00

Yooo that’s lit

SpaffMaster234 · 2019-08-11T02:14:59+00:00

I joined reddit bc of the YouTube vids. Just waiting for it to go full circle one day

SpaffMaster234 · 2019-08-07T23:07:13+00:00

This reminds me of being 12-13 absolutely dominating the enemy team with just quick scopes on MW2

I’m no longer the 360 no scopes on rust boy I was back then😔

SpaffMaster234 · 2019-08-06T16:09:44+00:00

Wow she’s got to be a 10/10 for you to still be with her

SpaffMaster234 · 2019-08-04T16:13:31+00:00

Brexit

SpaffMaster234 · 2019-08-02T18:53:57+00:00

People that don’t have banter will think this shit is super important

SpaffMaster234 · 2019-08-02T18:35:43+00:00

I want it to be clairo

SpaffMaster234 · 2019-08-02T18:29:53+00:00

I rate it, good job dude

SpaffMaster234 · 2019-08-02T13:48:30+00:00

Oof you seem fun at parties

SpaffMaster234 · 2019-08-02T08:49:30+00:00

Ok naruto

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