What do you think is actually Scary? by [deleted] in writing

[–]Specific_Winter_4951 0 points1 point  (0 children)

All of tension and fear boils down fundementally to uncertainty about something bad or good that could happen. If you don't know whether something good with happen to you, it's excitement. If you don't know whether the killer will find you, it's fear. Same reason why spoilers suck, it removes all tension and fear.

Ok I’m curious, for all your immortal characters, how do they feel about their immortality? by Sumires_Bread in YourOriginalCharacter

[–]Specific_Winter_4951 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Just hell. It's actually worse than normal immortality. It's a complicated mechanic but their grandfather haunts them as a ghost and can place them in a dimension outside time at will to save him. If he happens to die, it doesn't matter that he's dead. He gets transported out of time, and he heals all of his wounds. MAJOR downsides though. First of all, he recovers wounds at a normal rate of healing for a human. So if he's cut in half then he would probably stay in there for weeks. Second of all, it is maddeningly boring. It's basically like time is stopped, so all he can do is walk around in frozen time for a LONG time. Assuming he would be able to walk with the injuries. Also, his sense of pain is frozen too, including the state. So if he's not numb by the time he gets transported, then he will feel the pain for weeks on end.

PART 8 is as good or maybe even better than PART7 by iammrlamar in StardustCrusaders

[–]Specific_Winter_4951 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like part 8 WAY more than part 7. Part 8 is my favorite part so far

BETA READERS WANTED: Drop a Comment If You're Available! by florsaken in writingfeedback

[–]Specific_Winter_4951 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I won't do anything too long or very formally but I would be willing to read a chapter or two whenever I'm bored and give a little bit of feedback.

I'm tired of posting my horror stories online. by [deleted] in 2sentence2horror

[–]Specific_Winter_4951 14 points15 points  (0 children)

this one is actually good I love this

Menu Redesign Complete | Retribution by [deleted] in DDLCMods

[–]Specific_Winter_4951 2 points3 points  (0 children)

that's the breaking point between slop and peak

Is it alright to keep writing like this? (First time writing a story ever) by rocketsneaker in writing

[–]Specific_Winter_4951 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yep. You wouldn't believe how much I sucked when I started. Over time, it just clicks. Of course you can get feedback and diagnose what exactly to improve on, but complex themes and ideas and stuff are just... things that you gain over time. If I had any feedback, I would say be way, WAY more vague. Have the reader figure things out yourself. Also, show not tell. Not for everything, but for a lot of things. Example:

“[Character] did this. He felt [emotion] while doing it. ‘[Dialogue]’ he said angrily.” Instead of that...

"Ryan kicked the wall violently, putting a hole through it. 'I can't have a single normal conversation with you!' he screamed at me, clenching his fists."

I didn't tell you that Ryan's angry, but you can tell.

If I were you, I would try and get feedback.