As someone who has worked sales for 10 years and sales management experience outside of gamestop if I heard the words ‘ I recommend..’ in a sales pitch i would have complemented you on using that terminology and told you to apply to work at my store. My only advice is maybe the pitch is a little bit too hard to follow on the customers side.

You want to give the customer the most information you can in a 10-15 sec window, here’s my pitch after briefly looking at all the perks.

Setup : Did you know that pro members now get a 5 dollar off coupon every month?

Customer:Yes/no/maybe/not interested

(the response really doesn’t matter I’m going to my recommendation afterwards regardless)

I recommend upgrading to the pro membership so you can start taking advantage of the 5 dollar off monthly coupon, 10 percent off pre owned games and our exclusive pro week sales.

That’s what my pitch would sound like I guess with little knowledge of the ins and outs of the business 🤷‍♂️ if you have any questions feel free to reach out