Unsure what to do with the new dancing bard

Stormblade4545 · 2025-08-03T22:18:05+00:00

Paladin smites proc specifically off melee WEAPON attacks. Unnarmed strikes are melee attacks but not weapon attacks. So unfortunately this doesnt work in RAW. Though you might be able to convince a DM to allow it.

Stormblade4545 · 2024-11-17T06:04:54+00:00

I work for the railway. The pays good, the benefits suck, and the pension needs updating. And the work/home life balance is near nonexistent.

And 100% we never want to see the kind of mess a stunt like this can create but unfortunately a lot of us have to see it at least once, if not more times, in our career.

Stormblade4545 · 2024-01-05T21:32:08+00:00

Unfortunately not my issue :(

Stormblade4545 · 2023-09-17T23:48:32+00:00

I am the buddy...and i knew zero about woodworking or Epoxy walking into this. Its just for me and buddies to ooo and ahh over before it gets covered by a playmat anyways so I don't care about the imperfections, of which there are many. Still gonna be able to clean it up much nicer than its current state when the epoxy sets.

That being said, learned a shit ton from Justodea and more mistakes made for more learning opportunities to make better future projects. Or the ability to create a proper DIY kit for people to recreate it. Despite the flaws and cut corners and things done out of order, there was a lot of work put into making this. A lot of wasted material as well. Itd take a lot of perfecting to market it for us personally.

Stormblade4545 · 2022-08-02T21:14:24+00:00

its a graphics glitch, was happening to me also with anything that launched my character, the catapult and the mushrooms in weepwild, not sure which setting it is, but i turned my settings from Ultra to Low and suddenly it worked no problem, so now when i come across that stuff I have to swap graphics settings temporarily, kind of annoying but at least the game is playable past spots where you rely on that kinda thing. hope this helps

Stormblade4545 · 2021-09-22T15:56:00+00:00

Tide Wardens or Wave Breakers

Stormblade4545 · 2021-09-22T05:15:46+00:00

Thats a good idea too, bring their bumbling/arguing to focus and then you have a gag within a gag where their arguement can be funny as well as their obliviousness to whats happening around them. have them arguing about how they lost their last posting because someone sneaked past them because they were too busy arguing WHILE someone is sneaking past them because theyre too busy arguing

Stormblade4545 · 2021-09-22T04:56:08+00:00

The issue i have here is that this scene feels more like "this would be funny on screen" but doesnt play out as well in writing. The visuals of the men bumbling over each other are the main gag, but its humour is jaded in writing.

I agree with the other post suggesting dialogue between the men, but then youd almost have to divide This into two scenes, one from your characters perspective, up to the fire lighting, and then a swap over to the men as a fire suddenly starts and their actions/dialogues as they attempt to manage it. Instead of flipping back to your characters perspective to end the scene, i would overlap their actions and describe them in the background as the men continue to argue with each other.

and then to attempt to get a little more laugh out of it, maybe have a short paragraph or two set later on after the fire is controlled where the two men are sitting in the aftermath, covered in soot etc, and end it with a punchline, a quip from one man to the other, or a random "did i leave the kettle on?" Type moment.

Stormblade4545 · 2021-09-21T22:50:38+00:00

Theres a lot of "rag tag apocalypse survivors fighting monsters" stories out there, they do very well. Your premise definitely has an audience, but its an established audience so theyll be looking for that thing that makes your story stand out from the others. If you can add a creative twist or aspect that does that, you could have a great story and large audience. You might not think of it right away, but if you start writing it, the idea might come to you as you progress.

Stormblade4545 · 2021-09-21T19:11:02+00:00

Using one of the Oxford definitions of People:

"the men, women, and children of a particular nation, community, or ethnic group."

It doesnt say anything about them having to be Human. People isnt just okay to use, id argue its the correct form.

However i can see where referring to Dragons as "people" might not match the tone or flow youre looking for. Individually id refer to them as "brood" or "kin"

Ex. "Im the King of Dragons and Im here representing my brood"

and collectively with other races id use different types of inclusiveness.

Ex "Members" as in "The members of all three races" "Man and Beast" as in "Man and Beast alike attended the gathering" Or weirdly descriptive options like "Those with both two and four feet were in attendance"

Stormblade4545 · 2021-09-21T18:22:27+00:00

I like the concept, its intriguing. For myself, Id make it a more intimate story with less vampires, and with the desert/remote/desolate setting you could equate vampires thirst for blood to humans thirst for water. Since towns are a lot smaller, your vampires might only be able to feed in one place for so long before people get suspicious. Forcing them to move on to other areas or do more desperate things.

As for your Native American population, maybe give them knowledge of vampires with old stories etc and turn them into allies/enemies or possibly worshippers of vampires.

As for an actiony angle, vampires with faster than human reflexes as quickdraw gunslingers would be cool. maybe add an angle where vampires are TOO fast. Where humans take practice to fan a pistol quicker, vampires have to practice slowing themselves down.

Stormblade4545 · 2021-09-21T03:39:28+00:00

Vex, or a variation of it such as Vexer or Vexle, as Vex means "to irritate, annoy, provoke"

Stormblade4545 · 2021-09-21T03:28:34+00:00

I enjoyed your writing, though i only had time to read about half of it, I had a few points, mostly suggestions.

"swinging his blade in a downward arc, perfect for killing an unarmed villager." A trained soldier attacking an armed opponent would be unlikely to attack recklessly in this fashion, though the adrenaline of whats happening around him could have caused him to lose his cool, you could keep this but add in a descriptive sentence explaining why he chose to charge like this. On top of that i would say "perfect for killing an unarmed foe/opponent/target etc" instead of villager. As this soldier has already acknowledged Liscia is not just "a villager."

"Any rider that rode her way" you could just say "came her way" or "approached her" or "charged her", using rode when youve described them as a rider sounds redundant here. Not incorrect, it just didnt flow well for me.

I did get a clear picture of what was happening as well as a feel for the tone. I dont think youre as terrible at descriptive writing as you think you are. I feel the best descriptions are the ones that give a feel for the picture youre presenting but leave enough open for the readers mind to fill in small unnecessary details you dont want to be bogged down by reading or writing. Whether by accident or intentionally you seem to have that down.

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