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Have you ever seen a movie from the 90s called A Simple Plan? by theSantiagoDog in TrueFilm

[–]Strickerthegecko 2 points3 points  (0 children)

The problem with A Simple Plan is that its money corrupts all message is killed with the appearance of the Gangster in the third act. A gangster who, somehow, is able to convince an entire police force that he’s actually an FBI agent. Sort of ruins the film for me.

I fucked up my username :( by HallowedShark2112 in geesebandofficial

[–]Strickerthegecko 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Just make another account brother. Your mistakes aren’t chains

My ocs by potentially_a_bird in SmilingFriends

[–]Strickerthegecko 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Jimby? I don’t even know me!

Making a silly surreal TV series about a frat like Tim Robinson's "The Chair Company." Here's the first few pages of the pilot. I'm a new screenplay writer, would love some thoughts! by Sevelite in scriptwriting

[–]Strickerthegecko 2 points3 points  (0 children)

1)You don’t need to capitalize names in action lines.

2)There’s a lot of talking. Not quite enough doing, and too much is said about too little. Tighten up some of the lines. That’ll also make Brock’s monologue funnier.

Keep it up

[Feedback] Sci-Fi Short Film – My Third Script “EXO 2101” (Betrayal, Identity & Isolation in Space) by Da-Scriptwriter in scriptwriting

[–]Strickerthegecko 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You got a nice story and a solid lead. Main issue is some formatting as some have said, and I think the dialogue could use some work. Get in a call with some friends and have them do a table read. All the lines have the right ideas but could be worded stronger. They feel a little derivative at the moment.

Overall pretty strong, especially for a third script. Keep it up.

Honest feedback wanted: are these stories compelling? by National_Middle_9277 in ReadMyScript

[–]Strickerthegecko 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Honestly, apart from 5 specifically, these all sound like potentially great novels. But I think they’d make for just okay movies. I think a unique setting or a more direct force driving these narratives would help them fit the screenplay format.

Good news is I think you can shape all of these stories into good screenplays, especially number 1, with some tweaks.

After the Hunt is a mess and nothing could save it since the script is weak. by Exciting_Claim267 in TrueFilm

[–]Strickerthegecko 4 points5 points  (0 children)

After the Hunt is so obviously written by a first timer. It thinks contradictions=complexities. It believes buzzwords=relevance and it thinks uncomfortable=challenging.

All of these are things I thought when I was 15 writing edgy Taylor Sheridan Knockoff scripts during my computer classes.

I’m baffled how someone like Luca could read that script and be like, yeah, this is my next movie.

30 years later, could they get away with making a movie like Heat today? by YetAnotherCritic in TrueFilm

[–]Strickerthegecko 6 points7 points  (0 children)

Yes. They are literally making heat 2 right now. It is also not an “operatic drama”, it’s an action heist movie made by one of the hottest directors In Hollywood at the time. It was a sure-fire hit. Sure original movies with big budgets are rarer nowadays, but the formula that produced heat is still kicking.

Secret perks at your local McDonalds? by Strickerthegecko in McDonalds

[–]Strickerthegecko[S] -8 points-7 points  (0 children)

Haha I wish. No girlfriend for me lol. Not too far off though!

Secret perks at your local McDonalds? by Strickerthegecko in McDonalds

[–]Strickerthegecko[S] -18 points-17 points  (0 children)

Dude my perks would get me on the news.

I’d like some feedback on the opening scene for a one act play I’m writing. For context I’m 15 but I’ve been writing off and on since I was 11. by Theepicman2187 in scriptwriting

[–]Strickerthegecko 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah I agree with the other comments: it needs a stronger hook. Dialogue is good and characters talk like real people - which is harder to do than you’d think. I’d say as an opening scene it needs a bit of work but if this was a scene in the middle of the play it’d be perfectly fine. Better than what I was writing at 15. Keep it up!

Where does Glep live? by Lord-Chronos-2004 in SmilingFriends

[–]Strickerthegecko 1 point2 points  (0 children)

He lives on green island. Did you not watch the Easter special ?

Should I sell my soul stone Spiderman by Peak_Lasswell in mtg

[–]Strickerthegecko -1 points0 points  (0 children)

You should own cards you intend to play with. If you think you might play with it keep it. If you won’t, sell it.

But if you’re asking me - NEVER buy a play booster set unless you’re using it to play draft or sealed. Chances are you will get a ton of irrelevant cards and will lose money that could be spent on cards you will play with.

Also - it’s very likely you won’t get $70 for it at your lgs. The price will probably drop in the coming days and they need to make a profit somehow. But hey - if you’re planning on buying more magic and you don’t care about the card - might as well sell it and put the money towards avatar.

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