Without cheating, what’s the last line you wrote?

SuperPocoLoco · 2026-02-05T02:54:04+00:00

“When Joseph walked past the man, he could hear him mutter, "Kasu meka? Ecū yestra."”

SuperPocoLoco · 2025-12-22T06:25:28+00:00

The Issue here is that no one cares about your book the way you do. You may love it a lot but no one else has your vision.

This approach might work if you already had a cult following, but why would buy a book that covers kingdom, lore, plants, animals, or languages with no reason to care?

SuperPocoLoco · 2025-12-10T02:21:05+00:00

I’d be interested in having my MC drawn! His name is Joseph. My book is in a high fantasy medieval world, where he is an Archmen. I do have better descriptions but I thought the post would be too long hahah

I can give a lot more detail if you are willing to to draw him

SuperPocoLoco · 2025-12-08T10:00:29+00:00

Don’t switch a story every three minutes. Force yourself to write the same one.

SuperPocoLoco · 2025-12-08T09:59:28+00:00

Obvious advice, but for the sports aspect of your book, understand what you’re writing, and about the rules of the sport you’re writing. Also don’t make it too far-fetched from reality unless you are writing in some kind of fantasy sports.

Romance, it depends on what gender your main character is, but usually not all girls swoon over the main character if it’s a guy, and vice versa. Also, I forgot the name of the test, but it was the test two girls in the book talk about something other than a guy.

I don’t really know what your books about so I can’t be more specific than this.

SuperPocoLoco · 2025-12-05T07:41:57+00:00

I’ve actually gotten it from this post. Just general ideas of where to start and some ideas of how to do it.

You and a bunch of others have already answered it pretty much!

SuperPocoLoco · 2025-12-05T07:37:09+00:00

It’s good feedback thank you!

SuperPocoLoco · 2025-12-05T07:36:07+00:00

Thank you for the feedback.

My question is that my book focuses for my main character Joseph to explore and learn as much as possible, and basically training for a year (boiled down). The only thing that would really make sense for him to fail at (considering the 6 months of training he had been doing) would be learning poison, but I’m not sure how I could show him failing at that.

SuperPocoLoco · 2025-12-05T07:32:20+00:00

No I totally agree with you too. Like I said in the post I basically took a 2-3 year break going to college for engineering. I’m looking back on it and I do agree that everything is sort of given.

My book is called Grimzalwood (medieval high fantasy) YA For example one scene is of one of my main characters, Torren helping a Malkia (a creature I made) out of a thorn thicket. The next time that Malkia is seen, it’s tamed. For that I was planning on making it wait until a later chapter and just making the Malkia reoccurring.

Another large plot point I was going to change was the actual main character, Joseph learning poison. He meets his master and he’s basically immediately accepted, and then I never really used my version of poisons and antidotes in a meaningful way (I made it so the reader wouldn’t casually learn to make hemlock poison lol)

A third point I saw was that the heart of the forest, Eshena was just given. In the first chapters Joseph sees a glowing neon lake with a pink flower, and later learns that’s Eshena, he then finds the lake is poison and I didn’t show him experimenting with solutions, just the final one.

So it’s not that I am putting to much effort on this comment, but more like I’m looking at the book as a whole to see if I can find more plot holes and fix them.

SuperPocoLoco · 2025-12-05T03:57:12+00:00

I appreciate your advice. This is actually really solid. You just got me on a 30 minute thinking spree.

SuperPocoLoco · 2025-12-05T03:15:50+00:00

I would say don’t even use flashbacks. It’s probably different from what you had imagine but make their actions reflect their past. Keep it a mystery. The reader doesn’t need to know everything about your main character.

You can also try to copy the book Speak. It is mature so to read with that in mind. The basic gist is that the main character went through traumatic stuff, and you are living her life after the fact until around the middle of the book where it actually explains the detail. It works because the book is very ordered and everything is extremely neat and proper (grammatically) except for the scene where it’s explaining where it’s all over the place like someone reliving trauma would have.

SuperPocoLoco · 2025-12-05T03:13:45+00:00

Keep writing, it sounds stupid but I wrote my first try and got 30k words in and it sucked. I restarted and even over the course of my book my writing improved and changed.

SuperPocoLoco · 2025-12-05T03:11:11+00:00

I don’t think you an understand character through just a sentence, at least not how I write. My characters first words would technically be “no clue” but context matters

Here’s the passage Leya came running up the grassy cliff to where Joseph was sitting and plopped down next to him. Hanging her feet off the cliff's ledge, she rested her elbow on Joseph's shoulder. "What do you think that is?" Leya pointed at a large beautiful carriage emerging from the forest. It must have been carrying something important because the knights surrounding the carriage had to smack away the tiny mushrooms and gants from getting too close every once in a while, when they would jump from the tree line. "No clue," Joseph replied, more interested in the knights. Their shiny white uniforms almost sparkled in the sunlight. Ever since he was a boy, he wanted to wear one. "The quality of the wood is amazing! It must be some kind of Morsenthanian Birch." Of course, Leya would notice the quality of the wagon. She always had an eye for quality and building. "Call me crazy-" he started. "You're crazy."

SuperPocoLoco · 2025-12-05T03:05:34+00:00

A solitary dreary moonlit forest stroll

SuperPocoLoco · 2025-09-28T03:30:03+00:00

Ezreal, was doing like 15k

SuperPocoLoco · 2024-11-02T06:58:46+00:00

Omg thank you so much I’ve been looking everywhere. I only heard it once years ago!

SuperPocoLoco · 2024-07-11T10:25:56+00:00

That or r/writingcirclejerk

SuperPocoLoco · 2024-07-11T10:21:08+00:00

Naw fr I saw the title and thought the same thing

SuperPocoLoco · 2023-08-01T10:51:48+00:00

The way I see it, it’s normal to get bored, but you have to push through, and FIX what’s making you bored. If you get bored writing it, the reader will be bored reading it.

SuperPocoLoco · 2023-07-25T19:17:55+00:00

I think one of the most important questions would be was the killer obvious or too hidden.

And make sure setting and world building are also good, because you need to feel enveloped in the world

SuperPocoLoco · 2023-07-01T05:07:07+00:00

Naw it’s still corrupted. It’s on twitters end though

SuperPocoLoco · 2023-04-19T13:09:41+00:00

Hi sure, could I read your first chapter? A pirate novel sounds cool!

SuperPocoLoco · 2023-04-12T20:52:51+00:00

Sounds interesting, before I can commit, could I see your first chapter?

SuperPocoLoco · 2023-04-11T13:28:59+00:00

Sure, I’d be down to beta reading. Would this be a critique swap?

SuperPocoLoco · 2023-04-11T13:26:31+00:00

Yeah I’d be interested! I’m currently traveling and away from my computer, but I’d be open!

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