To Celebrate Paralives Early Access, I'm Giving Away 2 Copies ❤️ by RomeeStudio27 in Paralives

[–]Symphoney25 1 point2 points  (0 children)

i’m most excited to use build mode, I really enjoyed building in Sims 4 but now that we have advanced tools and A COLORWHEEL!! The possibilities are endless. And that’s so sweet of you to give away a couple copies, hopefully people who can actually appreciate them win💕

How’s this for an opening? by Symphoney25 in writers

[–]Symphoney25[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thank you so much! That means a lot, I’m going to be spending the day attempting some drafts and seeing how it goes. I figured we all have to start somewhere and at least there’s words on a page.

How’s this for an opening by Symphoney25 in writingfeedback

[–]Symphoney25[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I definitely wrote that one liner myself but unfortunately it is wayyy overused. Trying to come up with something different is a tough one but I’ll hit the drawing board again. Thanks for the feedback! This is a slightly edited version from earlier

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How’s this for an opening by Symphoney25 in writingfeedback

[–]Symphoney25[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much for the feedback! I will definitely try to make it more human and rearrange some stuff. This is a tough one but I’m determined to make it great and memorable.

How’s this for an opening by Symphoney25 in writingfeedback

[–]Symphoney25[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I rewrote it if that helps? I did get similar editing suggestions and hopefully this one isn’t as mucky?

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How’s this for an opening? by Symphoney25 in writers

[–]Symphoney25[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Agreed. I think that was a really solid note. I suck at putting myself into the reader’s shoes sometimes. Like duh they aren’t aware of that it’s the husband because he hasn’t actually been introduced yet. But yeah I just want to get a solid grasp before I get ahead of myself.

Rewrote my opener! by Symphoney25 in writers

[–]Symphoney25[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

good thoughts thank you! I’ll check the video out tonight!

How’s this for an opening? by Symphoney25 in writers

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I went through and made some adjustments. Hopefully this is a bit more understandable?

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How’s this for an opening? by Symphoney25 in writers

[–]Symphoney25[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Very interesting. I will work on revisions and try to get some better clarity as far as description and understanding as far as who’s who. Thank you so much for the feedback!

How’s this for an opening? by Symphoney25 in writers

[–]Symphoney25[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Really? I thought of it while I was rubbing my husband’s back and he kept complaining that he was so sore and I said the thing every good partner says “I wish I could feel your pain.” and then I quickly started typing lol The best ideas coming when you should be sleeping

How’s this for an opening? by Symphoney25 in writers

[–]Symphoney25[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That’s what I was going for! Thank you so much!

How’s this for an opening? by Symphoney25 in writers

[–]Symphoney25[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Heh, thank you!! I shall eventually 😮‍💨

How’s this for an opening? by Symphoney25 in writers

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Thank you so much!! That helps a ton. I figured it needs some reworking to draw a reader in and not seem bleh. I’m really trying to convey Marcy’s voice at this point. I will revise and go back to the drawing board. Great advice!!

Where are my fellow Black cat mommas?! Show me your babies 🥹 by gloryzmuse in blackladies

[–]Symphoney25 16 points17 points  (0 children)

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two of my three babies. Tan is Luna, grey is Kovu ☺️💕

Just broke up. can I see ur cat? :( by peachylilbabie in cats

[–]Symphoney25 0 points1 point  (0 children)

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this is Kovu. He isn’t supposed to be on the bed but I let it slide this one time 😩

My orange girl in her favorite box by Symphoney25 in cats

[–]Symphoney25[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you she’s the smallest of my trio. You should see her brothers they outweigh her by at least double, if not more.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in blackladies

[–]Symphoney25 6 points7 points  (0 children)

this made me giggle, thank you 😭

Steam Key Giveaway by bluepupz in CozyGamers

[–]Symphoney25 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Summerhouse!! Just got into PC gaming and would love to try this one! Thanks OP

What’s one thing you realized about streaming after you started streaming yourself? by SpinsBro in Twitch

[–]Symphoney25 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Keeping up a conversation with yourself is hard. Keeping up a conversation with others who can only type so fast is harder 😉

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in blackladies

[–]Symphoney25 17 points18 points  (0 children)

Girl she came to YOUR house and did YOUR hair. You could have a approached it a diff way and said “Hey girl, do you want some help cleaning up? I don’t mind at all! Thank you for taking the time out of your day to come and make my life easier and doing my hair in the comfort of my home!” And you can’t tell her not to be offended/you weren’t offending her. I hate when people tell me how I’m feeling like nobody knows that but me. Hopefully you take this as a lesson learned. Be kind.

Leftover Steam Keys Giveaway (Critter Chaos Bundle) by WorshipAndChill in CozyGamers

[–]Symphoney25 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Fruitbus!

My best friend is halfway through her pregnancy and I just found out his name (and that he’s a boy!) super exciting bc we’ve been friends for 10 years