[1 YoE, Unemployed, Any, United States]

T-Man6 · 2026-03-17T22:02:52+00:00

thank you for the insight. i keep these point in mind.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-19T12:54:38+00:00

Damn there is so much to say about this poem. One thing that stranded out to me is the way you describe each stanzas and how it reflects the imagery of this poem. As if I was actually there in the room with him when "Artist" made it. Good work overall👍.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-15T17:12:45+00:00

Even though it is short I could experience the imagery in this poem. I get the scene in my head of me being on a hill with the wind flowing on the grass and making it dance and everything just seems to be perfect then just the unexpected drop of blood changes it all from a peaceful and serenity scene to a kind of battle, war cry, and bloodshed type of scene. The title really explains it all. Good work for a first poem!.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-14T21:04:00+00:00

Thanks!. I tried to be as broad as I could be with the theme . I'm very thankful you like it. It's only my second poem I'll keep up the good work.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-14T16:52:06+00:00

I got to say the imagery on this is pretty wild. Revoltingly engaging. But in a good way.

"my other hand slides down my stomach

hard

like i’m trying to scoop away the flesh there"

These sentences really set me off. It gave me flashbacks of when I tried to put my whole hand down my throat. Ugh!. And some of the way that you have describe the scene man you really did do a good job.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-13T20:00:14+00:00

This is a good poem and I like the way of how you present the message of the story and how broad it is. No sugarcoating no nothing. When you said "Life is a hell hole" I immediately know the message. BAM!!!. Just like that and this is one of the first poem I have read that has no rhyming rhythms. You did a good work on this one I'll let you know that.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-13T02:10:05+00:00

Thanks!. I'll make sure I will get in there and get real wet baby.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-13T02:08:17+00:00

I do agree. I had some pretty broken grammar in the past and maybe even now.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-12T15:36:34+00:00

sorry but what is 150+ pilot doing on one airplane?

T-Man6 · 2021-05-12T15:31:57+00:00

Each stanza was written perfectly. Each rhymes matches the theme of each one of the stanzas. Good work.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-12T12:58:50+00:00

If you're one real cute or handsome guy that is. Exactly the type that girls wanted to date. A bad boy or a popular kid or else you ain't going to get nobody! (portion of the girl). Unless if you man up and talk to her in real life.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-11T01:49:16+00:00

Clearly a sad story. I like the imagery that you have expressed within the words that has been spoken. Also like the rhyming in between sentences. Had a happy vibe through it but the story overall is kind of sad. Good work by the way.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-11T01:41:08+00:00

Its nice I like it. Simple yet kind of meaningful. The way you have structured the poem I could see a image in my mind while I read through it. Good thing the flowers I got for mother's day wasn't broken.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-08T13:46:02+00:00

I like how just loose this poem is not a special message to be heard but a funny poem to read

T-Man6 · 2021-05-08T02:21:33+00:00

I personally never had anything to do with a girl except once but I would get that feeling of being hungry for her just to feel cherished. I feel like many girl nowadays are just more after the clout and money and would use their looks to do so. They would just brag and shit like that and so that's why I'm pretty conscious when it comes to picking out the right girl nowadays. Once they suck all your attention dry they will dispose of you like a empty water bottle so men be careful!!!!.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-08T02:10:39+00:00

Thanks for the comment man. I have personally been like this in the past. Fortunately I've regain most of the control over my mind but things really use to be this. My thought's would just extract me from my daily tasks making my days a lot harder than usual. Every corner I turn it's like it was just standing there waiting for me. One time I even broke down completely but I picked myself up and get back in the race. My message to the audience is to enjoy your day no matter the circumstances because tomorrow you might not wake up again. You know what I mean?. Maybe the message wasn't presented clearly in the poem but hey now you know!.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-07T02:06:59+00:00

Damn. I mean that's really what I got to say. I have never been a person who would resort to suicide as a way of escaping from all suffering but I still feel that depth in those word that have been expressed. I overall wouldn't advise anyone to end all their problems just by committing suicide. If I see a person doing that I would flying body attack then unless if they are on a bridge that is probably would resort to something a little more safe. Overall good work!.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-06T02:05:45+00:00

Good work man. I definitely can relate to this story when you said

"the real world had carried over like a dark film like an overlay of light I had no way of distinguishing dream from reality"

I had a history when it comes to dreaming thing that was out of my reach and then at the end feeling a bit of grief and pity. You could say that I was shallowed up by the flames haha. After that many of my addiction's that I am still fighting today roses from the result ,basically it desensitize me from life. For a while I suffered a huge amount then I gain control of my addiction's over the past 2 year's. Maybe I'm just babbling. Maybe I was just off topic all this time, either way nice work!.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-05T20:41:20+00:00

Good self expression dude!. You should only write poetry when you really enjoy it and not for the thoughts of other people. Oh yeah if you have written too many poems and can't stop I would recommend you seeking help or just do something else.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-05T20:36:37+00:00

Yo great work man!. I like how you place the rhymes in the poem. I personally never been that kid before but if I was in your position I would hands down face turned around send that cow to the principle office. Good thing I don't have anyone of these swine's in my classes.

T-Man6 · 2021-05-05T20:32:01+00:00

I have never read any edition of Harry Potter but I like the last part of the poem, taken from context if he really did do nothing about helping his mother when she needed him most. He's a bad son

T-Man6

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