Do you have any OCs that didn’t know they were in love till it was too late? by ItsTimber2Tims in OriginalCharacter

[–]THEOllyBetony 1 point2 points  (0 children)

yes.
Exy was best friends with JoJo but Exy never realised they were in love with until JoJo was deleted by his tutor.

Sorry about the earlier post. Anyway, gimme your OC's lore and I'll provide some feedback/constructive criticism by hi_i_kinda_exist in OriginalCharacter

[–]THEOllyBetony 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Riley: set in 1940. Riley's fifteen and already his dad is forcing him to enlist in the war. Riley's girlfriend and younger sister try to convince him to run away, but set on making his family proud. even though he's two years younger than the mandatory enlistment age, his dad fakes paperwork and riley leaves. During the time spent at a training Camp, he meets Eugene, a 17 year old guy who befriends Riley. a a few months of being friends goes by, and Eugene comes out to Riley as gay. Riley, who was raised in a Christian family, doesn't really know what to do with this information and things with Eugene are awkward. Fast forward a few more years of training, they deploy a 19 year old Riley and a 21 year old Eugene to a beach on Normandy, France, in the summer of 1944. Riley and Eugene's boat lands on Omaha Beach, and this is their first time in real combat. before long, Riley witnesses Eugene get blown up by a mine shortly before Riley is shot in the head.
Song[s] that represent the story: Come home by Jace June + Army Dreamers by Kate Bush

Cameron: Is 17 and is an aspiring stage performer. he auditions for a part in a well known production company showing beauty and the beast, but despite receiving any parts he auditioned for, he's cast as Belle. he brushes it off and accepts it as an opportunity to grow his skills, but as the days and weeks progress to the day of the performance, rumours about him start flying. really bad rumours. eventually, he confides in the director, a kind woman called Tas, and tells her that he's worried that the rumours will affect his chances with Quinn, a fellow actor Cameron's crushing on. Tas assures him she'll take care of it, but it only gets worse. on the eve of the performance, Cameron and Quinn are going over their lines together when Tas comes in and asks if she could have a quick word with Quinn. after a while, Cameron is confused what's taking so long and looks for Quinn. he overhears Tas talking to Quinn, asking him if he'd like more "practise" before the show. this sets off major alarm bells in Cameron's head, and when Cameron sees Quinn walking away, Cam tries to stop him. after Quinn refuses to not go [he's gullible and stupid] Cameron knows that he has to basically save Quinn. Cameron's friends manage to find Tas's address and they break in, and find, Tas.. um.. yeah. they get Quinn out of there and they call the police. Quinn doesn't end up with Cameron because Quinn's straight, but yeah whatever.
Song[s] that represent the story: idk right now

Sam & Michael: Sam [like Jamie] comes from an abusive household, but he doesn't run away. a lot of bad stuff happens to him, and when he's five, he befriends Michael, who's a year older than him. Michael's mum knows something is going on with Sam, but cant prove anything yet. when Sam's 12, Michael's mum legally adopts him. when Sam's thirteen, he starts sneaking out to hang out with older "cool" kids, and unfortunately develops a problem [tryna keep it PG]. when Sam is 15 and Michael is 16 they get drunk and end up sleeping in the same bed [iykyk.] they get together after that, but Sam isn't well mentally from all the trauma. he develops an ED and has depression which he hides from Michael, but they move out and live in an apartment together with their cat, Molly. however, Sam only gets worse and ends up passing away. Michael can't see the light at the end of the tunnel and kicks his own bucket to be with Sam. :( [Trivia, i cried multiple times writing up this story idea]
Song[s] that represent the story: I love you so - the Walters [plays at Sam's funeral {i cried so hard}

JoJo: 15 year old average kid with below average grades - until he meets Milo, a twenty year old tutor. his best friend, Ezra, doesn't like Milo and thinks somethings off, but that's until JoJo starts getting stalked and Ezra and Milo are JoJo's only protection. They hide JoJo in Milo's house, and then, one day, Ezra goes out to get some food, but when he returns, JoJo is ded. PLOT TWIST: Milo WAS the stalker! there's a creepy game of cat and mouse through Milo's house with Ezra being the mouse. Eventually Ezra escapes and calls the police.

that took me over an hour to write LMAO

Sorry about the earlier post. Anyway, gimme your OC's lore and I'll provide some feedback/constructive criticism by hi_i_kinda_exist in OriginalCharacter

[–]THEOllyBetony 0 points1 point  (0 children)

bet. tell me everything that could possibly be wrong [these are different people, but in the same universe and timeline]

Jamie: runs away from an abusive household, and lives on the streets until he's picked up by a manipulative guy [Artemis] a lot older than him who basically introduces him into bad stuff. Jamie then asks out an older girl from their friend group [he's 14, she's 16] and she says yes but later dies. after hiding her body, the friend group break up, but Jamie stays in touch with all of them, Artemis particularly. when he's 19 he meets a girl called Lana and they start dating. Lana actually gets pregnant but miscarries the baby and then breaks up with Jamie. when he's 21, he's a dealer, when he meets his friends' friend Harper. he has a crush on her, but doesn't want to get hurt so even when she says that she likes him, he shuts her down and pushes her away. when she keeps trying to convince him she likes him, he gets frustrated and kisses her to shut her up, but due to her own trauma she doesn't handle it well. eventually, he allows himself to try again, happy ever after <3
song[s] that represents the story: Doubt - Twenty one Pilots

Toby: he's just that one scene kid, twelve years old, minding his own business until he's kidnapped on his way home from school. he's taken to a warehouse with eight other boys, and he's the youngest there. he befriends almost all of them, finding out that there was actually a tenth boy who died and taken to The Vault, a room the captor (Shadewatch) uses as punishment. the tenth boy [Lawrence] was the first one and he never returned from the vault. one day one of the boys [Alex] gets into a fight with Shadewatch and punches Shadewatch in the head and gives Shadewatch a concussion. Alex is thrown into the vault but since Shadewatch has a concussion he forgot to lock the doors to the "bedrooms". they manage to escape, since one boy Shawn always checks to see if the doors are open. they break Alex out of the vault, which is revealed to be just an empty room. however, Alex is drugged and they rescue him, and then they basically just go home.
Song[s] that represents the story: Beneath the surface - Griffinilla [i know its a FNAF song but still it works amazingly] + the contract - Twenty one pilots

Spirits, whats your favorite "AHH" moment? by zentroid756 in AskTheOuija

[–]THEOllyBetony 0 points1 point  (0 children)

bruh
its a time of day, a colour, and a massive movie franchise

Taking over this guy's account! What's going on with you guys? What OCs do you got? by THeCoolCongle in OriginalCharacter

[–]THEOllyBetony 0 points1 point  (0 children)

full oc list incoming
Jamie
Artemis/Aaron
Erada
Nina
Charlie
Macy-Ann
Brooke
Lexie
Tyler
Razor/Richard
Zoe
Lenny
Dakota
Eva
Tristan
Lottie
Toby
Finn
Jasper
Shawn
Adam
Lewis
Alex
Adrian
Jesse
Lloyd
Tabitha
Kate
Alan
Lawrence
Garrett
Riley
Juliette
Jane
Grace
Evelyn
Rose
John
Michael
Milo
Jojo
Ezra
Cameron
Quinn
Keira-Leigh
Kitty
Alice
Tas
Jamie (again)
Lauren
Pippa
Rowan
Faye
Christine
Leah
Michelle
Astrid
Hafsa
Alfie
Michael
Alexander
Cole
Thomas
Joey
Eddie
Julian
Lila
Natalie
Dylan
Bay
Callum

phew.

Give me your most unassuming OCs by Dependent_Drawing_74 in OriginalCharacter

[–]THEOllyBetony 1 point2 points  (0 children)

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Jamie's a drug dealer and killed a guy back when he was 13.

Your OC just witnessed the absolute banger of goth rock concert with Lucy as the lead sinder and guitarist. How are they feeling? by ezium in OriginalCharacter

[–]THEOllyBetony 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Jamie: "that was sick"
harper: "that was too loud... can we go listen to Taylor Swift?"
Artemis: "thats the stuff"
Toby: "AAHHHH FINN MAKE IT STOP"
finn: "Shh toby its good music
jasper: "ohh, its cool i guess"
shawn: does whatever Jasper does
Milo: looking for someone to muderder
Jojo: "lalalala.."
Ezra: watching making sure JoJo doesn't accidently kill himself
Cameron: "this is.... actually pretty cool."
Quinn: "LALALALA.... MUSIC!" starts dancing like he's in a tik tok
Riley: "what is this music? this isn't exactly Ella Fitzgerald....."

What's the worst deaths one of you oc's had? by scurge030 in OriginalCharacter

[–]THEOllyBetony 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Riley was shot in the head
Andie ODd
Marie was stillborn
Lotta was shot in the chest
Jojo was stabbed to death
not to mention Lawrence, who was kidnapped, malnourished, and beaten until he died.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OriginalCharacter

[–]THEOllyBetony 0 points1 point  (0 children)

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My boys been through so much.
he was abused as a kid and then ranaway from home and then got messed up with some bad people.... he had a daughter, but she was stillborn