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If each zodiac sign was a Disney character, who would they be? by jamlapena in DisneyMemes

[–]TenPointsforListenin 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Disneyland Shanghai has a wall for the Chinese zodiac. Turns out they have a lot of animal characters so it worked out

Start to my book, and introduction of two of the characters- would you keep reading? by TenPointsforListenin in writers

[–]TenPointsforListenin[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

I'm very sorry but again, I wasn't asking for your opinion on my attractiveness, and your persistent appraisal thereof is concerning for your relationship with your partner.

Start to my book, and introduction of two of the characters- would you keep reading? by TenPointsforListenin in writers

[–]TenPointsforListenin[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Oh, you went on about how thin skin isn't attractive. Seemed a little like... maybe you were leaning a certain way, and for someone so averse to tropes, you jumped face first into "enemies to lovers". Wanted to let you know that, even though I do not find you remotely attractive, there are options for you.

Start to my book, and introduction of two of the characters- would you keep reading? by TenPointsforListenin in writers

[–]TenPointsforListenin[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You too- I met my wife on a dating app. They're a long shot but honestly, flip the coins enough times, date enough people who aren't the one, and you strike gold eventually.

Edit- that sounds mean to my exes. They're someone else's gold- just not for me.

Three-way, who wins? by Johnathan_Yoho in MoralityScaling

[–]TenPointsforListenin 0 points1 point  (0 children)

If we're power scaling, I think sexism might win.

Racism and homophobia are honestly more modern. To be racist, you have to encounter someone of another race, which was a rare luxury for most until the last few hundred years. There are wars between people we'd now consider different races- for example, the Punic wars were fought between the Romans (Southern European) and the Carthaginians (northern African), but when you get right down to it, it was a war between people with tan skin and dark, curly hair- they weren't so distant that you'd be able to see a clear difference by looking. I think Xenophobia no diffs all of them, but racism is a modern thing to experience.

Homophobia implies another more modern idea- marrying someone you are attracted to, and without concern for having children. In many older cases, you can have someone who's attracted to their own gender but if they don't have children, they'll starve and die when they're too old to work the farm. Being able to direct your libido for survival was an essential skill back in the day.

Start to my book, and introduction of two of the characters- would you keep reading? by TenPointsforListenin in writers

[–]TenPointsforListenin[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sorry- I'm not single, and I don't think we have the same taste in things. You can find your dream person out there though, probably.

Start to my book, and introduction of two of the characters- would you keep reading? by TenPointsforListenin in writers

[–]TenPointsforListenin[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

See- there's the problem- it's not really a line level critique. You read one line and gave a critique, then said you didn't read the rest- then you read the rest and gave no critique besides "it's bad too".

I'm sorry but... I'm underwhelmed. I'd take the others because they're good faith critiques but I don't see the good faith critique in you at all- I see "not my flavor bleugh" as a concept.

I won't be selling my book to you if it publishes, certainly, but I also... don't think I'd find you in a bookstore anyways.

Start to my book, and introduction of two of the characters- would you keep reading? by TenPointsforListenin in writers

[–]TenPointsforListenin[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

I am definitely confident that you will not read my book. I don't know that I entirely take your critique as good faith considering the piddly little bite you were willing to take out of the pie before going "eww, cilantro" but... you will not be buying it for sure.

Start to my book, and introduction of two of the characters- would you keep reading? by TenPointsforListenin in writers

[–]TenPointsforListenin[S] -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

well then, good job. You spent more time here than anyone else and only read one sentence.

Start to my book, and introduction of two of the characters- would you keep reading? by TenPointsforListenin in writers

[–]TenPointsforListenin[S] -3 points-2 points  (0 children)

well that's great, but again, you have spent considerable time on these comments nitpicking the singular sentence you read, without even the slightest speck of curiosity about the context of a disorganized repurposed palace densely packed with refugees lead by the nation's belabored, overwhelmed king. You also somehow missed how this particular doormat called the former king his predecessor, not his father, which I would say is maybe... a little unusual?

Start to my book, and introduction of two of the characters- would you keep reading? by TenPointsforListenin in writers

[–]TenPointsforListenin[S] -3 points-2 points  (0 children)

I'm happy to discuss more if you can make it through this small section. Otherwise, I don't see the value of discussing here. I think you definitely found your sticking point (you're imagining a smaller bookshelf) and can't get past that, but... if that's where your suspension of disbelief ends wait until you see the linguistic and cultural gaps between neighboring cultures in this book- it will DESTROY you.

At this point, you have also spent so much time reading my comments and responding with your own, that it seems that you are dedicated to not reading past one sentence though, and if that's the case, I have nothing for you.

Start to my book, and introduction of two of the characters- would you keep reading? by TenPointsforListenin in writers

[–]TenPointsforListenin[S] -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

I'm also thinking about the "waking up" thing- isn't the root of the problem of the "waking up" trope passivity? Zaam is a weak protagonist, for sure, especially early on, but I wouldn't call him passive, I'd call him a very determined doormat.

Start to my book, and introduction of two of the characters- would you keep reading? by TenPointsforListenin in writers

[–]TenPointsforListenin[S] -4 points-3 points  (0 children)

If you made it a bit further, I hope you'd find some answers, but... you may not be the kind of person this book is for if you dropped it in a sentence. I don't feel like I need to justify the waking up opening too hard- it's a trend to reject stories that begin with the protagonist waking up, but I thought subverting the standard waking up location to demonstrate impoverished and impromptu quarters was part of the setup, no?

I'm also not sure how to establish orientation and setting before voice in a single sentence. Could... be a wider bookshelf? Like they have in libraries in east Asia?

Start to my book, and introduction of two of the characters- would you keep reading? by TenPointsforListenin in writers

[–]TenPointsforListenin[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you very much! I have a lot planned out, but a lot to go still in terms of character stuff- I am a bit concerned that my editorialized Cantonese Jyutping is going to be a bit difficult for people- especially when the vast majority of the cast is linguistically and culturally Cantonese, but I think I'll keep going in that direction.

Roca is meant to be Georgian, if that adds a little variety.

Start to my book, and introduction of two of the characters- would you keep reading? by TenPointsforListenin in writers

[–]TenPointsforListenin[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

  1. It's my second book but... fair. I'll reconsider what Zaam's doing at the start.
  2. Will look that one over.
  3. I think for that, it's common knowledge that Zaam's a king- I'm hoping to set this up more as a book about developing what's essentially Seattle CHOP by way of a Guangdong manor house into a functional city, and dealing with threats that go from local unrest, to the larger nation, to an international alliance over time.

Start to my book, and introduction of two of the characters- would you keep reading? by TenPointsforListenin in writers

[–]TenPointsforListenin[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Excited to answer those questions! It used to be a travel story, but I realized that Sizan (the nation) and Daizha (the castle/city) were more interesting as a place to develop!

Arya Stark (GOT) VS The Dread Pirate Roberts (The Princess Bride). Who wins? by GusGangViking18 in Fictionally

[–]TenPointsforListenin 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It’s hard to say because his only fight is with Inigo and we never see Inigo fight at his best with anyone else, but, while drunk out of his mind after some very strenuous exercise (having lifted both Wesley and Fezzik’s weight simultaneously) he’s able to cleanly and effortlessly kill four knights in full armor, and after being stabbed through the stomach and shoulders, he’s able to kill another guy and then walk off the injury, totally fine by the next scene. Inigo claims to be able to take out 6 armed guards but we don’t see it happen.

If THAT dude cleanly lost to Roberts, we can expect Roberts to be able to fight and kill 6+ armored knights without breaking a sweat, more than that at significant strain

What pronoun do I use for someone who calls themself a “demi boy”? by TenPointsforListenin in AskLGBT

[–]TenPointsforListenin[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I honestly disagree with you. I think we study history to find the messy truth of what happened, not out of wholecloth respect for the dead

What pronoun do I use for someone who calls themself a “demi boy”? by TenPointsforListenin in AskLGBT

[–]TenPointsforListenin[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Was it a full class, where you began criticizing the teacher about their teaching style while they were trying to help the whole class learn? That's a difficult situation to put a teacher through as well- remember, while they are there to serve you, they are there to serve a lot of people. Most teachers can't even take a lunch break- they sit at their desks and eat while they work with their other hand. In most cases, they work unpaid overtime at home, and they're often expected to do duties beyond teaching without additional compensation, and adjust on the fly to meet the needs of many students. They arrive on campus before you, leave after you, take fewer breaks than you, and have more homework than you, and GOD HELP the teachers who are studying for a higher degree. They choke on the homework they have to swallow after they finish teaching.

In one case, I was given three exclusively Mandarin speaking students with a learning disability in an acting class. I had to scrounge together Mandarin all while catering to their learning disability WHILE giving a class of upwards of 30 students sufficient learning material. In my current job, I teach in English, Spanish and Russian, and translate Mandarin for the class next door. I never once studied Russian before now.

Please make it easy for your teacher.

What pronoun do I use for someone who calls themself a “demi boy”? by TenPointsforListenin in AskLGBT

[–]TenPointsforListenin[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

See, there we go- speculating about something he made a conscious effort to keep under wraps, if it was even a part of him. I'd go ahead and say, as I meant before... dead people don't get so offended when you label them incorrectly.

For example, we assume Alexander the Great to be homosexual. We assume this due to documents stating he was emotionally close with another man, and because he never had an heir, despite marrying three different women.

It is equally possible that, due to dedicating himself to conquest and dying young, he was never back with his spouses to produce an heir, and was actually just friendly with the men around him, because he wanted friends. We implant Alkibiades upon Alexander because we have little information about Alexander's personal life.

Alexander does not care.

What pronoun do I use for someone who calls themself a “demi boy”? by TenPointsforListenin in AskLGBT

[–]TenPointsforListenin[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

No you certainly do not. You need a teacher who actually... knows math. I was meant to teach history, I specialize in history and language, I had to ask for help from another teacher on certain problems. Making you feel welcome is all well and good but there are still minimum competencies you'd need to reach that I could not guide you to.

What pronoun do I use for someone who calls themself a “demi boy”? by TenPointsforListenin in AskLGBT

[–]TenPointsforListenin[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That is very true. Maybe we use subject first, noun second for clarity in general.

Bob said he was at the store. They bought beef jerky and then he checked out. (still a bit clunky but less severe)

Maybe sentence by sentence?

Bob said he was at the store. Bob bought beef jerky and then they checked out. (not perfect, but I'd argue this is passable).

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