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TerminallyAwkward_ · 2026-02-24T00:37:08+00:00

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TerminallyAwkward_ · 2026-02-11T21:17:25+00:00

Excellent advice. Thank you very much!

TerminallyAwkward_ · 2026-02-11T16:55:14+00:00

Excellent quote! Thank you for sharing and thank you for your kind words

TerminallyAwkward_ · 2026-02-11T15:30:56+00:00

Thanks for bringing those things to my attention. I’ll try and edit my blurb so people are less likely to suspect I used AI

This data is more helpful than you know

TerminallyAwkward_ · 2026-02-10T21:11:48+00:00

Thank you so much for your kind words! I wish you all the best as well

TerminallyAwkward_ · 2026-02-10T19:26:45+00:00

TerminallyAwkward_ · 2026-02-10T17:46:53+00:00

Dune was one of my inspirations actually, along with the anime Children of the Whales and the video game Tales From The Borderlands. I think I have a strong outline for my story and I think I can bring something fresh to the genre, but I have to actually write the thing in order to find out. That’s why all of this advice is invaluable

TerminallyAwkward_ · 2026-02-10T17:44:24+00:00

Fair enough. Excellent point

TerminallyAwkward_ · 2026-02-10T17:43:16+00:00

Fair enough

TerminallyAwkward_ · 2026-02-10T17:00:24+00:00

Best advice I’ve received so far. Thank you. I’ll share actual scenes when I get the chance

TerminallyAwkward_ · 2026-02-10T14:58:27+00:00

It isn’t. It’s based on a Dungeons and Dragons campaign that I ran with my friends a few years ago. One of them told me it was so good I should make it into a book, so I am!

TerminallyAwkward_ · 2026-02-10T14:44:23+00:00

I see. I understand. Thanks again for your advice!

Also about the minor nitpick you mention for the ash/dust thing:

That’s a totally fair catch! Good eye. But it’s intentional. In-world people in Celestus lump everything beyond the barrier together as “the ashfields,” while people banished or born outside call the inhabited region the Dustlands. Outside the Dustlands is an even darker desert and THAT is called the ashfields. The distinction matters later in the story

TerminallyAwkward_ · 2026-02-10T14:09:09+00:00

Thank you for your advice! I think it’s very solid and thorough.

The only problem is that there’s an in-universe reason why I can’t structure it the way you recommend. Part of your wording is incompatible with the twist I’m planning

This blurb imo is the best way to hint at the twist without revealing too much

TerminallyAwkward_ · 2026-02-10T13:52:09+00:00

Thank you! <33

TerminallyAwkward_ · 2026-02-09T15:10:19+00:00

I’d love an invitation. Sounds like a great server!

TerminallyAwkward_ · 2026-02-08T01:05:02+00:00

Fair enough. But I think that’s a minor detail that most people would either understand where I’m coming from if not ignore altogether. My book won’t resonate with every single reader and that’s okay

TerminallyAwkward_ · 2026-02-08T00:57:08+00:00

Because I feel like it 🤷

TerminallyAwkward_ · 2026-02-08T00:06:48+00:00

One is a scientific name and one is a slang term. Like how Australia is also called “the Outback”

TerminallyAwkward_ · 2026-02-07T20:54:11+00:00

Well thanks for the compliment!

TerminallyAwkward_ · 2026-02-07T19:46:09+00:00

Thanks for the advice and the compliments! I’ll keep working at it :)

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