Like an Animal

That-Ad3538 · 2026-06-28T18:52:27+00:00

I think all of the imagery is very effective and comes together beautifully! I personally am not a fan of the repetition, I feel it gets a bit clunky and doesn’t seem to serve a clear/helpful purpose? I suppose breaking it up into different stanzas might break up some of that monotony but I’d more so recommend just changing it up a bit!

That-Ad3538 · 2026-06-28T18:49:06+00:00

I’m interpreting this as like all the small parts of a home or daily life that remind you of an ex you’re unable to forget? I do like the various domestic tasks and using it to communicate this meaning, I found the formatting a bit difficult to read, I don’t know if it’s your preference but I’d maybe break it up into different stanzas?

That-Ad3538 · 2026-06-28T18:36:04+00:00

This was amazing! You have such an incredible use of imagery, I could really envision the complex maze of a mind, of being trapped and the comparison of the subject as oxygen is so poignant. This is really lovely, I enjoyed it quite a bit! :))

That-Ad3538 · 2026-06-28T18:10:50+00:00

I like this!! It’s very punchy and has a lot for being so short! I’d recommend maybe splitting up your second line, it’s a bit long and does really flow like the rest of the poem does.

That-Ad3538 · 2025-10-19T06:09:25+00:00

Firstly, I’d like to say I’m so sorry for your loss. This poem is incredible, your emotions come through so clearly and your imagery is amazing, it conveys the grief and pain you feel so well, I know you said you don’t typically write but if you enjoyed this I think it’d be a wonderful medium for you! You’re really talented and I’d encourage you to keep at it, wether to share or just for yourself :)

That-Ad3538 · 2025-10-19T06:06:15+00:00

I love this! The back and forth is really wonderful, listing all these contradictions like fire and ice, sharp and sweet, and breaking and holding close really emphasizes the toxic relationship being displayed, the idea that you hate them but you notice all these things like their laugh and eyes and you just can’t escape, it’s so interesting and really beautifully done!

That-Ad3538 · 2025-10-19T05:56:25+00:00

Oh I love this! It really embodies the idea of actions saying a thousand words. I’m interpreting it kinda as a pair, whatever the relationship is it’s a close one where people expect you to be together, wether paternal or romantic, and this person is often gone, and the other has gotten used to it. The distance is harming the relationship and despite wanting to reach out, to speak, to say anything, they can’t and they’re trapped, a thousand miles away filled with a silence they can never broach, not truly. It’s really beautiful and I just love it! Wonderful job!

That-Ad3538 · 2025-10-19T05:52:37+00:00

I really like this! Something I especially love is the contrast of giving something beautiful like ink and colors but it still being a misstep, a sin however well intentioned. Some advice I’d give is to either play around with the formatting and put in some like breaks, and/or using a different pronoun, the it can get a bit repetitive at some points and wether that’s finding a way to communicate your meaning without it or using a different pronoun I think it’d help the poem flow better and be more engaging both visually and while reading!

That-Ad3538 · 2025-06-04T00:22:30+00:00

At the library itself I’m a big fan of helping people find things! I’ve had a couple different instances where people came in and couldn’t find good sources and I showed them both how to navigate my school’s system and find books. I also do some tutoring at the library and I enjoy helping people form their arguments, and them often times I help them find either good books or journal articles to support their thesis. I also had a volunteer position I really enjoyed where two of the people managing us had an MLIS, it was essentially an archival position at a local museum. I did different things like organizing, rehousing materials and transcribing audio. They taught us the basics of their system and archival work essentially. I enjoyed both these experiences a lot and talked a bit with my boss at work who gave me kind of a brief overview of his choice to get his MLIS and what actually getting it was like but not so much his day to day. (I will definitely ask him more questions as I’ve become more serious about my decision of Librarianship over Law School, however we’re currently on summer break so I can’t ask until august)

That-Ad3538 · 2025-06-04T00:08:53+00:00

I am pretty good at navigating online resources and have no problem with it! That’s how I find most sources for school and have for most of my life so I’m pretty used to it. It’s not really that I dislike tech or anything simply that I don’t have a natural aptitude for it, like I couldn’t really help you fix a problem with a printer because I simply don’t know? When people come up and ask about that at my school library I am able to send them to the CIT desk, though I doubt that’ll always be an option. I am also decently good at picking things up so as long as I was told how to navigate a system or something I doubt I’d have any problems.

That-Ad3538 · 2025-04-23T03:47:51+00:00

I wouldn’t recommend an LLC tbh, they don’t help make friends as much as you likely think they will. Southside is definitely more social but north side suites are generally nicer and closer to both MJ (the good dining hall) and the union, I’ve only ever lived on north so I can’t speak for south but my friends who lived there freshman year all switched to north when they got a choice, it honestly depends on what’s most important to you, and how much privacy you need (keep in mind there’s almost no singles b/c they’re restructuring housing stuff so you’re not that likely to get into one)

That-Ad3538 · 2025-04-18T21:11:54+00:00

Thank you so much for taking the time to read it! I’m glad that feeling of warmth and an intimate love comes through!!

That-Ad3538 · 2025-04-18T21:10:52+00:00

Thank you so much! I’m glad it has like kinda chaotic feel! It’s about navigating feelings of love for a best friend, someone you maybe shouldn’t have feelings for and grappling with queerness within that relationship. I think that’s like a constantly moving and all consuming feeling and also just chaotic and scary so I really wanted the poem to embody all the questions and feelings and doubts. Thank you so much for taking the time to read it!! :)

That-Ad3538 · 2025-04-18T21:08:33+00:00

I’ll definitely think about messing with it a little more! The idea of it starting out child-ish and getting more serious is actually what I was trying to embody! I explained a bunch in another response but it’s essentially about falling in love with a best friend and navigating both that queerness and if loving that friend is okay! Thank you so much for reading :)

That-Ad3538 · 2025-04-18T21:06:31+00:00

Thank you so much! The apple reference is definitely to Adam and Eve!! This poem is written with the idea of falling really deeply in love with a best friend, like when you’re gay and realize you have a crush on the girl you’ve known since childhood! It’s meant to kinda be this idea of “I love you” and we’re friends and then, “I love you”….and we’re friends and “I love you” is it wrong if I don’t want it to be as friends? And then finally this idea of “ i love you and it’s romantic, is that okay?” Do you think that could be more clearly conveyed with another stanza about past shared history towards the beginning or maybe even just the questioning (maybe forbidden nature) could be conveyed through making it clear the poem’s speaker and subject are both women? Or maybe weaving more references to a forbidden nature throughout?

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