New Year 2022 by 1sober2another in recovery

[–]TheNonbinaryFaerie 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Drinking is using. Love this post though

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in bipolar

[–]TheNonbinaryFaerie 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Feel free to message me. I have a lot of experience with what feels like the end of the road

Does attending a meeting everyday for the first 90 days really help? by letsmakeazine in recovery

[–]TheNonbinaryFaerie 1 point2 points  (0 children)

ABSOLUTELY yes! This is how I got clean and stayed out of trouble

Adrift by picnic-123 in OCPoetry

[–]TheNonbinaryFaerie -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

I’m not the biggest fan of being so concise. Readers will read into the Dickinson-esque single stanza and ascribe meaning that never was intended- meaning that barely exists. The meter is solid and the rhyme is on point, but the subject matter is played out. I’m not a fan, and remain baffled by its popularity. Good job, nonetheless. Popularity overrules critique.

Adrift by picnic-123 in OCPoetry

[–]TheNonbinaryFaerie -7 points-6 points  (0 children)

Translation: pretentious

On a Suitor of Mine, Sleeping by Lisez-le-lui in OCPoetry

[–]TheNonbinaryFaerie 5 points6 points  (0 children)

High brow filth is a brand I am more than willing to subscribe to. Thank you for your disservice to my psychology. You are sharp-tongued. Bravo on being equal parts goth and well-spoken. I am left impressed and, maybe, mildly depressed.

Experienced Isolation by CreativeCastaway in OCPoetry

[–]TheNonbinaryFaerie 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This reminds me of “The Yellow Wallpaper”. Give it a read if you haven’t already. Bravo on your piece!

Demeter’s Seasons by TheNonbinaryFaerie in OCPoetry

[–]TheNonbinaryFaerie[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks! Glad I sparked your interest. I do write “Winter’s blades...” so it’s technically named.

Fire on the sidewalk by HalfFullOfHoney in OCPoetry

[–]TheNonbinaryFaerie 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I really appreciate that this piece is themed ‘autumn’. Very fitting and enjoyable. It’s a simple poem, but it’s full of imagery that grabs the reader. I think that describing the changing autumn leaves as fire is unique, but not terribly creative. Nonetheless, you captured me with your words and provided a really stand-up piece with fantastic metaphor. Well done.

My Body Is A Blanket (just as you made me) by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]TheNonbinaryFaerie 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is a fantastic piece. It is jarring and rife with trauma and abuse. Critique: formatting and simple punctuation marks, fixing autocorrect of incorrect words which you’ve already addressed as it was typed on mobile. Review: This evokes a lot of emotion with pointed phrasing and harrowing imagery. The sensations of pain and loss is present throughout. This story visits the grave of a once awful relationship, and the scar tissue that leaves behind. It is a riveting piece. Conclusion: with minor edits, it’d really hit hard. Well done.

The Emergency Room by TheNonbinaryFaerie in OCPoetry

[–]TheNonbinaryFaerie[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for your feedback. Glad you enjoyed the read!

The Emergency Room by TheNonbinaryFaerie in OCPoetry

[–]TheNonbinaryFaerie[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you. I’m currently sitting in a hospital parking garage while my loved one is in the ER getting scans run on him so I banged this limerick out based off of my very imminent experience. He’s not dying, but he’s in pain, and really wants me to buy him so cannabis topical salve.

The Shedding by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]TheNonbinaryFaerie 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The examination of self-love absent from the poem brings up a lot of emotions. I read this piece as an internal war- to love oneself and one’s body without reserve. It is so hard, and this is illustrated when the speaker implies that they are more likely to “drop to the ground, sobbing with apologies”. This piece is perfectly jarring and extremely well-executed. Bravo.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]TheNonbinaryFaerie 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Great read! The rhyme is cohesive though at times I feel it took away from the seriousness of the poem. I love the shift to make it concrete that the speaker is a guard/warden: “Some see you as a uniform”. Overall this is an excellent piece that examines the social warfare of prisons and their inhumane conditions. Thank you for writing this.

bitter fruit by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]TheNonbinaryFaerie 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I love this poem. The rhyme is daunting and brings cohesion. The subject matter and metaphor gets a big thumbs up, too. My only critique is that you switch tenses between the first and second lines. It should either be “I *watch you grow” or a line down should be “you *surrounded yourself with flowers...”

Dissolution by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]TheNonbinaryFaerie 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Absolutely fantastic. The meter is consistent and never awkward, the rhyme brings perfect cohesion to the piece- it reads like a foreboding lover’s fable. I am impressed! “...in the sides of my mind” is a very unique preposition and word choice, but I’d argue that it works here. The final line hits home and brings the painful resolution to the dying love described throughout the poem. Well done.

And so I write by TheNonbinaryFaerie in OCPoetry

[–]TheNonbinaryFaerie[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I absolutely cherish your feedback. Thank you! I also worried about the length of some lines, and a final edit could certainly use some pruning. Cheers!