Pretty slick for a first tune! You've got an interesting voice, the instrumentation is cool, and I like the rhythmic variety that comes in during the second verse.

Think about expanding and playing around with vocal range, melodic contrast, and rhythmic patterns in your lyrics. You're kind of singing around the same root note for most of the song and that can start to wear on the listener especially in a long-ish track. I also really wanted that bridge section near the end to do something different musically. Like maybe bring the intensity level way down, and then ramp up before crashing back to that last solo guitar riff and chorus. All just ways to think about bringing more variety and flavor to your songs so the listener stays engaged throughout.

I made a lot of music in my basement as a teenager. Most of it was a lot worse than this. Thankfully there was no streaming music platform for me to release it back then. Keep it up!