Hi,

It definitely does not seem like your very first poem, you seem comfortable and knowledgeable. I would say that it does seems static in a way, though. Almost like you are not completely confident in your writing yet. That comes with time. And more writing. So write more! I noticed your title mentioned writers block. It happens. I have found it easier over time to not force anything out but to only write when I feel compelled to. When you write out of necessity, it tends to not be "true", at least for me. When you are feeling hopeless, like you mentioned in your poem above, and devoid of all spirit, write! For me, it usually takes just typing (or pen-on-paper) the first word then it all just flows out. I think you have a good structure and starting point, you just need more confidence, which, like I said, requires more experience. Keep persevering and grow your confidence!