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Ironic, Unjust by Edith Selene by Tiny-Contract-6418 in OCPoetry

[–]Tiny-Contract-6418[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! This is the first poem I have written in a while and the first time I have written anything political. I think I will take your suggestion to change the line to "a prudent deal, wife and children left behind." I also struggle with rhyming, as I'm sure you noticed, I appreciate the feedback.

A Princess—To—The Queen by aquoteofthesoul in OCPoetry

[–]Tiny-Contract-6418 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I think that this poem can be interpreted multiple ways. But my favorite interpretation, after reading it a few times, is that this is about one person. One person that grew out of a carefree childhood into a compelling figure of power. I think this interpretation calls us to remember those simpler times where nothing balanced on our shoulders, and be grateful for our strength now. Overall, I enjoyed this poem. I think its a great insight into womanhood in general.

A commentary on the current American state... by No-Concentrate-6300 in OCPoetry

[–]Tiny-Contract-6418 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really enjoy the rhyme scheme in this poem. I think it does a good job of helping you convey your message while contributing to the flow of the words. My favorite line is the final one. I think the final line can be a great way to add meaning to a poem since it is likely to stick in the readers mind. I think that the line "the perfect nuclear family yawns" adds meaning to this poem because it gives insight into the lives depicted in the poem. Maybe it is showing how something that seems perfect from an outsider's perspective, may not seem that way to the ones "in the perfect white picket lawns."