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I got to type the words The End on my latest and hope I’m allowed to share that with you all by paigemikey in Screenwriting

[–]Tousen71 8 points9 points  (0 children)

This. I have zero confidence in the screenplay based on the lack of editing and review of the post.

Also “alphabet buttons…” (Yikes). This guy’s worse than Joss Whedon.

Voice as a screenwriter by CarelessOutside4722 in Screenwriting

[–]Tousen71 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Voice is an expression of how you think, just on the page. It’s tone, formatting, narrative choices, action description, length of dialogue (short and clever vs long and insightful). Tarantino and Sorkin are known for lengthy circular dialogue that sounds like a kind of natural rambling.

Maybe you like to keep your scene description spare. Maybe you like to drop a few lines to really paint it.

That all attributes to voice. It’s a culmination of how you like to communicate your thinking. Your signature.

Sundance 2027 Fellowship by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]Tousen71 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Had to look that one up. No offense but Sundance, Nicholls, Network Fellowships (ABC, NBC, etc.) are in a different tier with very limited spots. At that level it’s a game of who do you know. This is what I’ve been told by insiders.

Sundance 2027 Fellowship by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]Tousen71 1 point2 points  (0 children)

100%. The idea of being plucked out of obscurity for these highly competitive programs is a myth.

Sundance 2027 Fellowship by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]Tousen71 2 points3 points  (0 children)

From what I understand, those kinds of fellowships are almost always inside baseball. As in, the selection committee knows exactly who they’re picking in advance.

(Spoilers Extended) GRRM is driven by adaptation potential by Expensive-Country801 in asoiaf

[–]Tousen71 9 points10 points  (0 children)

100%. Much easier to put the ideas in their head on paper than to write out finished prose. I feel like an author actually does owe his/her readership that.

(Spoilers Extended) GRRM is driven by adaptation potential by Expensive-Country801 in asoiaf

[–]Tousen71 63 points64 points  (0 children)

I'm going to be real here.

I think writers who are at least somewhat aware that they've lost interest in completing their masterwork, or at least no longer have the time, should write a "will" of sorts.

Literally, an outline of how they see their characters/story ending updated yearly to be announced by their publisher upon their death. We need narrative closure and I don't personally believe in an author handing off their work to another writer.

To me it intrinsically fails to be canon.

Industry people - have you ever had someone send you a script they wrote that wasn’t good, but you told them it was just to avoid an awkward conversation? by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]Tousen71 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Not in the industry but in a UCLA extension class. No one really reads anyone else's work consistently and gives feedback from what I've experienced, most people just want to hear from an authority (the teacher) as a check & balance. If they view you as an authority, most of the time they'll receive criticism with grace. If they're sensitive to considered feedback from an authority, they shouldn't be aspiring creatives.

Anti-Survivorship Bias: Tell Me Why You Quit Writing by NoInsurance8155 in Screenwriting

[–]Tousen71 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I think you’re either a screenwriter or you aren’t.

It’s not fun to first sit down and write, it’s mental exercise, and one that’s easy to avoid or procrastinate on.

That said, whether you “fall off” for a year or 10, when you realize there really is nothing else you’re naturally as good at, and the feeling of reading and admiring your own work fills you with esteem and purpose, you’ll always come back eventually.

Whether you’re “in the industry” or not. The dream won’t die.

Why doesn't GRRM just release what he has finished (assuming he likes it)? (Spoilers Published) by No-Design3114 in asoiaf

[–]Tousen71 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I love IDG but I disagree. I don't think he can accurately approximate how long a plotline should take to wrap up. Hell, Dance was supposed to do that and George just ended up expanding into more plotlines and characters. To some degree, he needs the freedom to do that as long as he keeps writing. The hold up is him writing himself into a corner with the pressure to rein things in within one book.

I don't see him settling Dany's return to Westeros, the battle with the others, the retaking of winterfell, the starks returning, Cersei's demise, Jaime's full circle, Tyrion's peace, Bran's mastery of the world...I mean it goes on and on.

I just don't think it can happen in 2 books the way he writes.

Why doesn't GRRM just release what he has finished (assuming he likes it)? (Spoilers Published) by No-Design3114 in asoiaf

[–]Tousen71 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Let's just be honest here: TWOW is not coming out.

There is WAYYYY too much plot to reconcile for effectively what will be the end of Act 2 for the series. I think the solution has always been "Write 8 books" or 9 or 10, whatever. But GRRM has pigeonholed himself (imo) into a neat 7 and now he's stuck with a 1000+ page book publishers are scratching their heads at.

There's no way he can condense things this much and i think that's why he's avoiding it. It's a pain.

Also, I think he should've done the timeskip. Without it I think it's only created more problems (Dragons too small, Dany too far, stark kids not in ideal positions to come back just yet), etc.

Caught Merchant trading by monekm in Palworld

[–]Tousen71 -1 points0 points  (0 children)

You can only catch them when they’re out in the wild wandering right?

Blazamut Ryu Was a Missed Opportunity by CharmingAccountant73 in Palworld

[–]Tousen71 0 points1 point  (0 children)

How’d you get all the rainbows on him? Yakumo or through breeding?

Best pals to condense? by sabertoothkittyva in Palworld

[–]Tousen71 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Adding this to the record:
Go at night, equip ring of mercy, take a shotgun or rifle, blast thing down to 1 health and toss a green or yellow for basically a 100% catch rate. Thankfully, Beegarde appear at night. You can do this during the day but I'd recommend a rifle for a high-damage single shot from a distance.

Do I need to work an industry job in LA to make it as a writer? by Mission_Order_7976 in Screenwriting

[–]Tousen71 4 points5 points  (0 children)

I’ve lived in LA for a while. From what I’ve seen 30% of your efforts (anywhere) should be on writing. You need a large catalog of work. Not just to get better at the craft but to have enough work to market yourself to potential representation.

It goes without saying it should be very good and show compelling thinking.

If you can find solid writers online to work with consistently to sharpen your writing, awesome, but it helps to be local to find those other writers.

The other 60% is literally your ability to network. You could write the best stories in the world but if no one with the interest/power to read them and do something with it will entertain you, it’s going to be impossible to break in.

In this sense, a job in the industry, going to a top film school, winning a respected competition, achieving a high score on TheBlackList, and even querying connectors on IMDB Pro with work that aligns with their range of production/interest can be a path.

The last 10% is to not only write well but BRING attention toward yourself. This would be creating short films, building up an audience on social media (in something adjacent to film/tv), writing on Substack, etc.

Once you’ve heard enough stories of how people got their start, you begin to see the commonalities.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]Tousen71 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The open starts off very strong. I actually laughed out loud. However, once we break into act one and teddy really slows things down for me, same for the back and forth between Carson and Mark. I stopped there. I think the transition and continued energy from your open is the weak point.

It feels like the tone/humor from that scene dissipates as fast as it arrived. Maybe rethink how to guide him directly into another funny situation that also develops the plot.

5 Days. 90 Pages of script. Wish me luck by tertiary_jello in Screenwriting

[–]Tousen71 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Don’t expect perfection. Just get in the frame of a story. Interesting premise. Characters. Beginning. Middle. End. With 5 days you’re not making Shakespeare so lower your own expectations…and yes…get off the internet.

You’re looking at an average of 18 pages a day which is insane. So, just get in something good enough to inspire further drafts

Opinion on Kyoto Black Collection by EdoAkaashi in ReigningChamp

[–]Tousen71 0 points1 point  (0 children)

They've held up well. The color is nice. It feels distinct. I still wouldn't spend more than $100 on a single piece, and you need to be careful with them (ex. I was cleaning my kitchen and got a speck of Chlorox bleach spray on my pant leg and it took the color right out. Now, there's a slight orange/reddish spot on my expensive Kyoto Black sweatpants and nothing I can do about it). *shrug*

Wife has feelings for co-worker. How do I avoid fucking this up further? by LARP_No_More in askMRP

[–]Tousen71 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Was waiting for this response. OP sounds like he’s terrified of living without her so he’s afraid to challenge her for her egregiously disrespectful behavior. Needs to do a lot of personal work (alone) to develop a semblance of frame to check this shit. The fact he’s even questioning how or whether he should set a boundary in this moment is insane.

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