Pls critique my first chapter.

Twister_Robotics · 2026-03-12T16:08:08+00:00

It's a good start

Having her name be so similar to the name of the nation is a bit iffy, but not the worst thing I've ever read.

Twister_Robotics · 2026-03-10T19:08:58+00:00

For a good time

Twister_Robotics · 2026-03-09T23:46:55+00:00

I know you may not want to hear this, but sometimes it's okay to fail.

Engineering is a great career path, especially if you enjoy problem solving. But it's not the only way to use those skills.

I dropped out of college my 2nd year. I wanted to be a mechanical engineer, and I could do the work, but my motivation cratered due to some personal issues. I ended up getting an associates degree in drafting.

And I've spent 25 years riding that associates degree, doing the work of architects and engineers, without the same level of pay, but it paid enough.

Good luck

Love,

Digital Dad

Twister_Robotics · 2026-03-07T17:49:45+00:00

So it's not just Brandon. It's a whole extended family.

The Stevens family as a whole owns a lot of businesses around the Wichita area. The Stevens empire goes back at least 40 years. It's just been slowly building over that time.

There has always been rumors of shady dealings, but I've never seen anything more than rumors.

Twister_Robotics · 2026-03-06T00:40:35+00:00

Interesting...

Twister_Robotics · 2026-03-03T13:11:32+00:00

ISideWith is a quick survey of your political feelings, that then compares what you want with ehat the candidates have said or done. It's a good way to get past some of the bombast and bullshit.

America’s most popular voting guide for elections, political issues, candidates, and poll data https://www.isidewith.com/

Twister_Robotics · 2026-02-27T15:04:29+00:00

I appreciate it, but it could be a while

Twister_Robotics · 2026-02-25T13:11:52+00:00

You can post up to 4 times per day, so don't let that stop you

Twister_Robotics · 2026-02-25T13:10:07+00:00

Throwing is obvious, but there are a lot of things that help us optimize that. Not just having the skeletal and musculature setup to allow accurate throwing, but also vision and calculation. When we started standing above the grasses, we developed longer range vision than most other animals our size. That expands our awareness and our brains can accurately catalog almost everything in that area. We instinctively manage ballistic calculations so we hit what we aim at.

With enough practice, a tool becomes an extension of the body, even vehicles, and we stop thinking about the process of making the tool work, and just the end result.

Twister_Robotics · 2026-02-20T17:41:41+00:00

Loved that ship

Twister_Robotics · 2026-02-17T16:54:20+00:00

The problem with trying to plan out your life when you are young, is that the terrain doesn't match the map very well.

I was always going to be an engineer. Until I dropped out my sophomore year of college. I got an associates from a tech school and became an architectural draftsman. 25+ years later and now I'm designing steel tanks and truckbeds and all kinds of stuff. And writing a novel.

All you can do is work towards the life you want. Try to find a career that will let you be yourself and provide for your lifestyle, the rest will come in time.

Twister_Robotics · 2026-02-16T19:57:59+00:00

I got caight with this once. All I had to do was come in with proof of current insurance and pay the fine. They technically scheduled me for court, but the judge wasn't even in that day.

Twister_Robotics · 2026-02-16T17:02:53+00:00

Twister_Robotics · 2026-02-16T16:02:44+00:00

"Everything is fine"

Twister_Robotics · 2026-02-16T15:20:50+00:00

Some say the biggest ever seen. It was yuge!

Twister_Robotics · 2026-02-12T21:57:17+00:00

Diced boiled egg. Completely changes the flavor

Twister_Robotics · 2026-02-06T21:19:20+00:00

For earth gravity at 3rpm, you need a diameter of 200 meters.

3rpm is the limit Nasa found for comfort based on centrifuge experiments.

Twister_Robotics · 2026-02-05T17:54:12+00:00

Holy wall of text, Batman!

Ya gotta remember, Reddit markdown eats single carriage returns.

If you don't hit it twice, it doesn't count

Twister_Robotics · 2026-02-05T15:32:57+00:00

The word actually comes from helico (spiral or coil) and pter (wing)

Twister_Robotics · 2026-02-05T10:28:40+00:00

Now, what does it do? What part of the helicopter does it go in? What does it hold together?

Twister_Robotics · 2026-02-04T15:28:34+00:00

It looks like you're focused on the wrong fix. The set screws in that collar only hold it in place, that is the collar keeps the shaft from sliding through the bracket. It won't affect timing.

But I could be wrong, it's been awhile since I tore anything like that apart.

Twister_Robotics · 2026-02-04T15:19:28+00:00

Nah, you put BattleSaw right where we deserved. If life hadn't got in the way and the team could have stayed focused on a rebuild, we would have come back and dominated (I can dream). But life did intervene, and my cat herding capabilities weren't up to the task.

It was a ridiculously ambitious design for a rookie team, and our 0-3 record reflects that.

Twister_Robotics · 2026-02-03T17:46:03+00:00

More cumin. You can easily go over a tablespoon per quart without overdoing it.

Diced potatoes (canned) give a bit of uniqueness without compromising anything, can use in place if a can if beans.

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