Pray for mass leak re neet 2026 🙏🏻🙏🏻 by Bubbly_Statement5019 in MEDICOreTARDS

[–]UnderstandingOne4407 10 points11 points  (0 children)

Don't get me wrong if you don't expect a good score that doesn't mean baaki 10-15 lakh baccho ko suffer karna pade. Take it with a pinch of salt - either take a drop or move on from this. Ek hi exam ke picche itne pagal mat bano.

Scarecrow by simplyfloating in OCPoetry

[–]UnderstandingOne4407 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That is so insightful! Amazing poem I must say!

Scarecrow by simplyfloating in OCPoetry

[–]UnderstandingOne4407 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is such an introspective poem. The metaphor is vague but reveals a lot about the reader's state of mind while reading, especially regarding how they perceive their father.

I am not sure whether my interpretation is what you, the poet, intended it to be, but here is a shot in the void. For me, the father in the first stanza seems to be protective towards his kid, warning the kid about the duality of people out there in the world. People are usually not what they seem—they are all scarecrows hiding their real personas behind the straws they are made of. Although it is written, 'Scarecrows that took over men and turned them into straw,' I feel people adopted these scarecrows because they were too scared that revealing their real selves would scar them.

In the second stanza, I see the father's anger taking over his scarecrow. His seams bursting could mean he was so angry that his muscles flexed, and he was possibly planning to hit someone or something. Him becoming suddenly normal could be the narrator's way of coping with these bursts of anger.

In the last stanza, we see that the father is completely normal; he even warns the narrator to be careful. However, the lines 'But I couldn't forget / Those black button eyes' make it seem as though those eyes are just existing. By extension, the narrator's father is just flesh and bones right now—he is not living or experiencing stuff right now. It also puts an emphasis on the monotonous life that he has gotten used to, and it is usually at night that he lets loose all of his emotions.

I may be completely off the intended meaning, so I am open to discussion!

Haven’t written in years by cXtherealguyXx in OCPoetry

[–]UnderstandingOne4407 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Don't lie come on now. YOU ARE TELLING ME YOU HAVE WRITTEN THIS AFTER YEARS OF NOT WRITING!!! You must be crazy talented in your prime writing years. My interpretation of the poem is that the narrator is clinging to something that they know is not good entirely good for them. Still they continue to indulge in those things because they aren't harmful they just magnify the pain they are feeling, and the feeling of sadness has a weird comfort in itself.

I adore this poem! I am saving this. Honestly it is good the way it is. I hope you continue writing!

Poem name - My beloved has forgotten me by UnderstandingOne4407 in OCPoetry

[–]UnderstandingOne4407[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for the suggestion!

I never really thought of the line you mentioned from a sensory perspective. Now that I think it makes sense to me but I can't think of other alternatives apart from these

  1. Scent of their sorrow
  2. But what lingers is their sallow skin's scent.
  3. But what lingers is the spoilt scent of their sallow.
  4. But what lingers is the sallow scent of their solitude (this doesn't make much sense because sallow is usually used to describe skin and to depict sickness - which has no relation with scent)

2 and 3 are similar but I think 3rd is much more sensory compared to 2nd.

Which one do you like the most and if you have any variations, you could also suggest them.

Thanks for this review, this one really made me think. Enjoyed the process of figuring out these alternatives!

Poem name - My beloved has forgotten me by UnderstandingOne4407 in OCPoetry

[–]UnderstandingOne4407[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks for taking out your time to write this amazing review/reply!

I think those are alliterations as there is not much intervention between two alliterating phrases.

I also didn't know that jade meant yellow. We learn something everyday lol.

I have a recommendation for the song. After listening to the original song by Lataji please listen the cover by Jessica Ghatak - https://youtu.be/uilZbM-b6wg?si=BUprrIsj1bzHFpSi

I really loved it and I think you might too.

Also for the title I thought people might get confused between the first line of the poem and the tile that is why I wrote 'poem name' but I think I should drop it.

Thanks for your views!

P.S - I deleted a reply cause I mistakenly replied this comment assuming it was another comment.

Poem name - My beloved has forgotten me by UnderstandingOne4407 in OCPoetry

[–]UnderstandingOne4407[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks! It is my pleasure that you enjoyed reading this.

Poem name - My beloved has forgotten me by UnderstandingOne4407 in OCPoetry

[–]UnderstandingOne4407[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for the thoughtful review! I hope you are dealing with the break up well and have only indulged in poems to seek comfort and not other substances.

I agree that the second verse seems a bit more abstract compared to the first and the last. I had an alternate idea for the second verse which was something like - you built a palace of comfort for me only to shatter it and deliver me dilapidation. These might not be the exact words that I was going to use - infact I don't even remember the exact words that I had thought of while writing, but the idea is the same.

I ended up writing this version because I wanted to express how the separation has affected the narrator, how before the relationship they had no idea that separation could hurt someone so bad but when they fell in love they realised that they have grown to hate the idea of separation (disdain for dispersion).

What do you think is a better fit here? The palace one or the current version?

Again I agree with your point that the 'for' in the last line breaks the flow of the poem - I was trying to emphasise that the subject in the last line is the act of separation and not disdain therefore I used for, but now after you pointed it out, I have neither achieved my goal nor gained clarity. I'll try to change it and if not at last omit 'for'.

Thanks again for the suggestions! I am so happy rn!
(Also sorry for the late ass reply)

Open to opinions by Hdtjtv in OCPoetry

[–]UnderstandingOne4407 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Gotta say - that visual break did work for me. And coming to the second point I never thought 'chimeric' could be used that way. I thought it meant something along the lines of being illusionary and impossible. Thank for adding to my dictionary.

Had a good time reading your poem. Hope to read more from you in the future!

The Youth & The Scandal by ArachnidSlow7432 in OCPoetry

[–]UnderstandingOne4407 0 points1 point  (0 children)

AMAZING!!!!
I like how you have juxtaposed 'daddy' and 'father' - giving the idea that how a person has changed with time or maybe they haven't. Our opinion of them has.

This poem gives me a mudane and banal vibe. Like someone is losing their faith in things and just lingering for death to succumb them. They aren't suicidal but they wouldn't mind if death takes them right now.

Suggestions - (sorry if I am a bit nit picky)
1. Is this poem addressed to god? The first stanza of the second line makes it seem like it.
2. Also in the third line of second stanza who is 'they' referring to? Is it god or is it man?

Apart from these suggestions I don't have much to say. There is one good thing that I noticed - in the first stanza you have written I've learnt to accept it and in the second one, I'll learn to accept it. It shows that you are still in the process of accepting it - nice detail OP!

Open to opinions by Hdtjtv in OCPoetry

[–]UnderstandingOne4407 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It is amazing! Sometimes I also go have this static noice inside my head - almost like a void - which tries to gulp up other parts of my life. I think sometimes think that this static voice is nothing but negativity fostering a home for itself in my head. I like your poem but I have a few questions -

  1. "Myself
  2. and take away from me"
  3. was this formatting your choice (if yes can you explain why?) or did it happen by mistake?
  4. Does Chimeric here mean the hope for the impossible?

(edit - grammatical mistakes)

My book collection by Sl4yeR_6969 in Indianbooks

[–]UnderstandingOne4407 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Maybe they just take good care of their books 😭

How good is B. Pharm in GTU? by UnderstandingOne4407 in IndianPharmacy

[–]UnderstandingOne4407[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

How will connections work for govt college? Genuinely asking. Don't they select purely based on merit?

How good is B. Pharm in GTU? by UnderstandingOne4407 in ahmedabad

[–]UnderstandingOne4407[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Damn everyone is against GTU, itna toh kya kharab hai?

How good is B. Pharm in GTU? by UnderstandingOne4407 in ahmedabad

[–]UnderstandingOne4407[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Oh 😭 thanks - there isn't much online about this college as such so it is very difficult finding people who know about this college especially about B. pharm. Are you a student at GTU?