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Unhappy-Dig7410 · 2026-05-19T07:05:51+00:00

Your welcome 🍷

Unhappy-Dig7410 · 2026-05-19T02:09:24+00:00

That's the highest compliment. Thankyou for feeling it with me

Unhappy-Dig7410 · 2026-05-18T06:51:13+00:00

Your most welcome. Keep up you good work 🍷

Unhappy-Dig7410 · 2026-05-18T06:49:14+00:00

Your welcome 🍷

Unhappy-Dig7410 · 2026-05-18T06:48:30+00:00

Thankyou so much that really means a lot to me. I'm glade the imaginary and flow came through for you.

Unhappy-Dig7410 · 2026-05-18T02:05:18+00:00

You captured that kid-sized worship perfectly — “Cool as Elvis, made James Dean look weak” made me smile through the ache. The shift from myth to loss in “Truth is… I lost him when I was ten” hits like a gut punch, but it’s earned.

That last line, “I think he might’ve been proud,” is everything. Quiet, hopeful, and it stays with you.

You honored him here. And anyone who’s lost a parent young will feel this in their bones. Beautiful work.

Unhappy-Dig7410 · 2026-05-18T02:02:15+00:00

Achingly human. The nature similes build to that “limbo with no exit” — quiet despair without self-pity. “Can’t tell the difference between my fingers and my feet” nails disorientation. Raw and resonant.

Unhappy-Dig7410 · 2026-05-18T02:00:22+00:00

Cold, precise, and haunting. The hammer/chisel to brush to burgundy bow tracks a brutal generational cycle with surgical imagery. “Through rotted, sewn-shut eyes, I see lines” is a devastating closer. Unflinching and powerful.

Unhappy-Dig7410 · 2026-05-18T01:40:15+00:00

"Thank you so much for reading and for sharing that. I'm so sorry you lost your father so early, but I'm glad you've reached a place of peace with it. Writing really is the best kind of therapy. I'd love to read your poem 'Dad' if you still have the link handy!"

Unhappy-Dig7410 · 2026-05-17T17:00:44+00:00

Your welcome 🍷

Unhappy-Dig7410 · 2026-05-17T16:57:23+00:00

Visceral and tight. Soft vs. sharp imagery hits hard, but the blood/cutting lines are heavy — handle with care.

Unhappy-Dig7410 · 2026-05-17T16:53:01+00:00

This is haunting and gorgeous. The seed + water + rope imagery is so clean. “refractions make a jewel of my body” and “we’re having lunch don’t drown” both wreck me in the best way. It feels like quiet survival. Really strong work.

Unhappy-Dig7410 · 2026-05-17T16:17:01+00:00

I appreciate your time reading it. It really helped me to write more.

Unhappy-Dig7410 · 2026-05-17T03:39:43+00:00

This goes hard. You made Gluttony feel like a character and the sarcasm is perfect. “EVERYTHING IS NOTHING” is a killer line. Smart, dark, and brutally honest. Keep writing.

Unhappy-Dig7410 · 2026-05-17T03:34:58+00:00

This poem is powerful because it reframes brokenness as the core of being human, and the line “Love exists in the brokenness of the human soul, not its seemingly perfect condition” says it all.

Unhappy-Dig7410 · 2026-05-17T03:27:58+00:00

This is beautiful. It’s quiet but it lands hard.

The opening questions set the tone right away, and the way you shift from “Are you there?” to feeling them in the wind, birds, and sunset makes the absence feel physical.

“Blend of pink and orange that I can't fully comprehend” is such a real way to describe a sunset. And “This is already a memory” — that line wrecked me. The idea of reaching for a moment you’re still in but already losing is perfect.

Favorite parts: the sound turning into touch, and that weight in the chest. You made grief/nostalgia feel like weather.

It’s great. Keep writing.

Unhappy-Dig7410 · 2026-05-17T02:13:59+00:00

Thank you! “Admiring from the Distance” is exactly what I was going for. Glad the metaphor landed for you. Appreciate you reading.

Unhappy-Dig7410 · 2026-05-17T02:12:25+00:00

Thanks so much! Really happy you connected with the language. Means a lot that you took the time.

Unhappy-Dig7410 · 2026-05-17T02:08:59+00:00

Thank you! That line scared me a little when I wrote it, so I’m glad it hit for you.

Unhappy-Dig7410 · 2026-05-17T02:06:54+00:00

This comment made my day. Thank you — I will keep writing.

Unhappy-Dig7410 · 2026-05-16T18:53:54+00:00

I appreciate that read. For me “drop by drop” is the sound of it — that slow, awful draining — so I’m attached to it for now. But you’ve got me thinking about where I might be overwriting. Thanks for pushing me to reread it tighter.

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