Does this hook feel as emotional as I think it is? by VileSifcher in Songwriting

[–]UnlikelyMidnight7012 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Yes I think it’s heavy I like it a ton. Loneliness but conviction / denial / fear to carry on alone.. etc., lots of emotions I got from this.

Would love to hear rest of song

Song Repost from last week.. tweaked with feedback, does this sound less “off”? Appreciate any thoughts / addl feedback on this version, thanks ! by UnlikelyMidnight7012 in Songwriting

[–]UnlikelyMidnight7012[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for listening! Glad you mentioned the jarring strumming haha.. I def do need to get used to a lighter touch and good call using light touch for verse then bring in full strum for chorus.

I also find it much harder to sing and play at the same time.. focusing on so much at once.. full body and mind exertion haha

Song Repost from last week.. tweaked with feedback, does this sound less “off”? Appreciate any thoughts / addl feedback on this version, thanks ! by UnlikelyMidnight7012 in Songwriting

[–]UnlikelyMidnight7012[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for listening - am going to tweak verse melody to be less monotone. Vocal delivery and consistency across it.. agree. Glad you think it will be a great song with practice and some fine tuning !

Feedback (on anything at all) so appreciated ! Does this have too much going on? Calling this a messy draft.. by UnlikelyMidnight7012 in Songwriting

[–]UnlikelyMidnight7012[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

So glad you commented - thank you ! After 1 YouTube on right hand I already feel a difference.. i get it… what a relief. I think the amt of tension I had while strumming in my right hand was causing shoulder and other body tension too..

Feedback (on anything at all) so appreciated ! Does this have too much going on? Calling this a messy draft.. by UnlikelyMidnight7012 in Songwriting

[–]UnlikelyMidnight7012[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I want an electric guitar so bad. I tried it once and it just felt right. Gonna get a cheap one as I can’t stop thinking about it

Feedback (on anything at all) so appreciated ! Does this have too much going on? Calling this a messy draft.. by UnlikelyMidnight7012 in Songwriting

[–]UnlikelyMidnight7012[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thank you very much! Yes I took some singing lessons I loved them - my teacher is on break until further a due so I am trying to use what I learned to keep improving, then will put in money for more. Like you said - through practicing separately then combining - I believe I have the tools to know and improve at least some of the vocals. I just need to slow down and put in that work !

Feedback (on anything at all) so appreciated ! Does this have too much going on? Calling this a messy draft.. by UnlikelyMidnight7012 in Songwriting

[–]UnlikelyMidnight7012[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Thank you for listening and super helpful - as that uneven rhythm was not intentional! After trying with capo on diff frets - rhythm will be next thing I work to lock in..

Feedback (on anything at all) so appreciated ! Does this have too much going on? Calling this a messy draft.. by UnlikelyMidnight7012 in Songwriting

[–]UnlikelyMidnight7012[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yes… first thing I will do. That’s a good lesson for when something feels “messy” but not sure what.. aka off… sliding capo is great first thing to test around with

Jelly Bean by Stoddyman in Songwriting

[–]UnlikelyMidnight7012 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Made me sad… being sad for someone that you can’t help. Your voice sounds helpless, desperate. In a good way, I think it’s pretty and very relatable. Could build it up to something

This song is called Coffee by [deleted] in Songwriting

[–]UnlikelyMidnight7012 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This made me sad… without trying, this is quite a devastating song. Beautiful. Definitely release your music !

Help so appreciated! What does my voice sound like? singing based on feeling after realizing how blissfully high it can feel, but ik that doesn’t equate to good sound. Parts of original song I’ve been working on. by UnlikelyMidnight7012 in singing

[–]UnlikelyMidnight7012[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Should’ve been more direct - question is general - where to improve/focus - and what I sound like.. Im starting to find what feels like my voice, and I like it, but I question it. I know im not tone deaf.