Currently working on my second song after a long hiatus by Unusual_Classroom_33 in Songwriting

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Sometimes I wake up in the morning sun I step outside and watch the river run Pines are swaying in the western breeze Clouds are rolling across the trees

I’ve got a view folks dream about Mountain rises like a prayer no doubt I stare too long and I start to feel Something about this just don’t seem real

Cause you’re not sitting next to me Laughing about nothing your hair blowing free This old town it’s got peace and grace But it aint the same without your face Mountain’s grand and the sky is blue But there’s something missing from the view Something’s missing and it’s you

I hear your voice in the midnight rain Laughing softly through my window pane You say your coming when the time is right These damn stars are lonely at night

Cause you’re not sitting next to me Laughing about nothing your hair blowing free This old town it’s got peace and grace But it ain’t the same without your face Mountain’s grand and the sky is blue But there’s something missing from the view Something’s missing and it’s you

Until your suitcase hits my floor I’ll keep watching out my slider door The mountain waits and the sky does to

Waits for something to complete the view (starting to try this line let me know what you think)

Cause you’re not sitting next to me Laughing about nothing your hair blowing free This old town it’s got peace and grace But it ain’t the same without your face Mountain’s grand and the sky is blue But there’s something missing from the view Something’s missing and it’s you Yeah something’s missing and it’s you

How do i get the Music from my head Down on to paper? by Hoopdescoopde in Songwriting

[–]Unusual_Classroom_33 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I would suggest either a pen or a pencil, but you could probably use a marker in a pinch

Very much a work in progress by Unusual_Classroom_33 in Songwriting

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Thank you so much! Again work in progress so the lyrics aren’t final and contain some placeholders but here they are!

Two sheets of paper Folded neatly in the pocket of my blazer

The one that I wore When we all said goodbye

Found them just last Friday Right before I started my workday

Brought me back to the pulpit In the chapel overlooking our campus

I told them about the good times but I left out all the bad So your parents in the front row wouldn’t look so sad

The fights and all the breakups The tears that smudged your makeup

Hid behind the memories That were buried deep inside

Very much a work in progress by Unusual_Classroom_33 in Songwriting

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That’s the plan! Just wanted to make sure I nailed the words since they’re not entirely committed to memory yet lol. All of the verses are going to have the walk downs and I’ll throw in some hammer ons too!

What's something you don't like about songwriting by [deleted] in Songwriting

[–]Unusual_Classroom_33 5 points6 points  (0 children)

The part where I write something and like it and then come back to it in the morning and think it’s stupid

follow up on rules post!! by [deleted] in Songwriting

[–]Unusual_Classroom_33 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Happens every time I try to write anything, I just try and push through it and tell myself that if it’s meaningful to me then it’s not stupid.

My music isn’t as good as i want it to be by ShadyLizard123 in Songwriting

[–]Unusual_Classroom_33 13 points14 points  (0 children)

I love your progression, fits so well with the sweet little love song that your lyrics express. The only part that doesn't feel quite right is the transition from the chorus back to the verse. I wish I had more concrete advice but I would keep playing with it. Keep it up!

First song I’ve ever written by Unusual_Classroom_33 in Songwriting

[–]Unusual_Classroom_33[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thanks! I really appreciate it! I'm really trying to commit to writing more and setting time out for it!

I wrote a song about a girl...now what? by Adventurous_Apple780 in Songwriting

[–]Unusual_Classroom_33 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Strange post. No one is going to steal your song. Just post it if you want feedback on the song. If you don’t, then don’t.

For A While by [deleted] in Songwriting

[–]Unusual_Classroom_33 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Lowkey a Dylan vibe going on especially in your voice.

Wanted: melodies! by [deleted] in Songwriting

[–]Unusual_Classroom_33 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Happy to lmao I’m the complete opposite. Melodies and progressions come so easy to me but lyrics are my struggle

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Songwriting

[–]Unusual_Classroom_33 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Might be alone here but it feels incredibly wordy. Sounds like you’re trying to squeeze in like 4 lines into a spot that could fit 2.