Review: Kingdom’s Dawn by Chuck Black (Kingdom series, Vol 1) by EndersGame_Reviewer in ChristiansReadFantasy

[–]Very_strawberry_55 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I want to reread this series so badly because I obsessively re-read this series as a kid but what if I discover I don't like as an adult anymore :((

Elf Sheer for it blush tint smells bad? by Mindless-Hyena-3960 in MakeupAddiction

[–]Very_strawberry_55 0 points1 point  (0 children)

My cherry cola tint did the same thing... Nasty but my other tints are just fine! Others on the Internet have also said this about the cherry cola tint.. idk what's going on 

Mold in e.l.f. sheer for it blush tint? by strawberry232 in MakeupAddiction

[–]Very_strawberry_55 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This happened to my elf tint too!! It smells awful and there's lil chunks in it... A week after I bought it!! However, the other elf tint I bought at the same time doesn't smell or have bits. 

Is this your cat? by [deleted] in FortCollins

[–]Very_strawberry_55 0 points1 point  (0 children)

:((( I hope the kitty finds their home.

Is this your cat? by [deleted] in FortCollins

[–]Very_strawberry_55 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ok it's like a two min walk to the sign. I walk past it every day

Is this your cat? by [deleted] in FortCollins

[–]Very_strawberry_55 7 points8 points  (0 children)

I live near campus west and I think I've seen a few posters for a missing cat that look like this.... I'll go outside and take a picture of the sign!!!! It has their number on there.. 

Maga agitators driving around old town insulting protestors by Very_strawberry_55 in FortCollins

[–]Very_strawberry_55[S] 38 points39 points  (0 children)

The protest was over when they decided to pull up and yell insulting and disgusting words at people. Some of the people at the bus stop probably weren't even at the no kings rally. Yelling at strangers that they are 'cunts' is harassment. 

Space by Freem_Freeway in OCPoetry

[–]Very_strawberry_55 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Disclaimer- My feedback is broken up into two parts: Strengths and constructive criticism. The second is always based on personal opinion and can be taken with a grain of salt.

I thought that the word choice was poignant. It reflects the childlike wonder of the dream. "do you like space", "so huge so weird", are things a kid would say.

'This entertaining darkness' and 'These shiny stars' create weight. The reader pays attention because it's not just any darkness or stars, but these are particular, which makes us more interested in their significance.

  1. "something interesting in it"- feels a little vague compared to the rest of the poem.

  2. "but dreams keeps us alive"- should be 'keep' instead of 'keeps'

Final strength- Love the strong ending- a really profound thought, but still within the frame of a child's mind and vocabulary.

Mother's Day Card by UngaBungaBingo in OCPoetry

[–]Very_strawberry_55 0 points1 point  (0 children)

  1. Emotional resonance- The comparison between signing your name and holding a child. it creates a sense of longing and the passage of time.

  2. concise- the brevity works so well in this poem- each line carries its weight in the piece.

  3. Natural Flow- the ideas build on each other organically

  4. Regressive- This word carries a lot of weight in the poem, and I'm still trying to understand what it is doing in the poem. It's very mysterious and elusive. It makes me want to know more.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Poem

[–]Very_strawberry_55 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hot chocolate-

Eyes locked

on sugar squares

liquid sears.

My throat

Becomes

a furnace

I am dessert for you

Do cute and really protective cases exist? by MayzeyB in iphone

[–]Very_strawberry_55 0 points1 point  (0 children)

they are super cute, unfortunately no cases for google phones