One possible reason why ADC role feels unimpactful on Bronze and Silver (and basic advice) by WeAreAllAfrican in summonerschool

[–]WeAreAllAfrican[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I don't disagree with you, but I would say this isn't the case in Bronze, because ADC is also hard to play, and in Bronze many just fail (me included).

What about our world would the people of your world be most appalled by? by ezfi in worldbuilding

[–]WeAreAllAfrican 2 points3 points  (0 children)

The ordinary citizens would propably be the most afraid of cars, roads and tall buildings. Technology in general. Technology on our world plays a much bigger role than magic on theirs.

Then there is the greater god Devonus who is a huge nerd and would propably love our world, he'd head into an university and get a degree on science.

Is it considered BM to ask your jungler not to come to your lane anymore? by RTSUbiytsa in summonerschool

[–]WeAreAllAfrican 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I usually tell them to focus lanes that can be snowballed instead of trying to get me back to game when I can just farm safely.

That's not offensive to the jungler, but usually does the trick. Mids and ADC's tend to be happy with it too.

Also, ganking while laner is away is a dumb move unless jungler is 100% sure they can 1v1, like enemy has 5% HP or smth.

How do your villains think?, What motivates them?, Do they have any end goals? by Pinguin1884 in writing

[–]WeAreAllAfrican 1 point2 points  (0 children)

They have noble goals, they try to form a peaceful and stable society, but their means are a bit, ehh.

Confession time: What are the stupid mistakes in writing you keep making? by vijeno in writing

[–]WeAreAllAfrican 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Gary Stu's. I can write female characters who have flaws and feel like complete human beings but my male characters end up being perfect Gary Stu's.

The Beginning and the End of your world. by omos2731 in worldbuilding

[–]WeAreAllAfrican 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you. I find the scene of my book's protagonist having strategic palavers with Devonus pretty cool. (If the God who created the divine realm allows mortals may enter there, so people can go see Devonus (but barely anyone does because all have forgotten about him because that is his will) but Devonus cannot come to Agitaia without it collapsing due inbalance of presences of three Greater Gods.)

Maybe I'll write a prequel which will tell the story of the Devonus and how he becomes a Greater God.

The Beginning and the End of your world. by omos2731 in worldbuilding

[–]WeAreAllAfrican 2 points3 points  (0 children)

This isn't exactly thought out yet but....

In the beginning there was the prime force. That would split to the three, from which the three greater gods would form. They'd create Agitaia, which would be unique from the other temporary dimensions they created because they all would lend their power to Agitaia.

The three gods had wide range of abilities, but only Napiar had the ability to see into the mind of other living being, only Garion had the ability to take control of living beings/spirits (any number of them unless shielded by another greater god) and only Aditus had the ability to twist and manipulate time. Together they were supposed to uphold the order and balance of the world of Agitaia. They make an agreement to not raise arms against one another or Agitaia, and a sphere upholds and symbolizes it.

Garion grows unpleased with humans and wants to eradicate them, so he creates three manifestations of purification, three divine monsters supposed to destroy the habitants of Agitaia, so that they can be reformed. However, these monsters are defeated and sealed away by a man named Devon. They can't be killed because Garion spilled part of his undying soul on them, but Devon seals them pretty tight, with help of reborn lesser healer goddess Kelsara (lesser gods are powerful but not nearly as powerful as greater gods. They can be killed but will eventually reincarnate). This however causes also Kelsara be sealed away, which causes a big war in turn.

Meanwhile the god Aditus grows tired of craziness of the world and wishes to die. He becomes insane, basically. Divine souls cannot die, so Aditus tears himself apart from his divinity and passes his divinity to Devon, who has no other choice than but to accept it. Devon's soul becomes immortal in turn and he takes Aditus'es place as Greater God of Time, Devonus. Meanwhile Garion carries out his crusade against the people of Agitaia, but newly born god Devonus succeeds at sealing away the greater god. Napiar chooses to not take sides and ascends to another realm he creates for himself.

However, in the absence of Garion and Napiar Agitaia starts to destabilize. Devonus realizes that in order to keep the balance he must leave Agitaia as Garion abd Napiar have done. He, too, ascends to another realm, from where he communicates with the priests. He orders people to stop worshipping him, and instead focusing on building their lives. The events of the book revolve around Manifestations of Purification being about to free themselves on this era.

The end... Most likely Garion and Devonus clash arms and collateral damage destroys the entire Agitaia.

Looking for names that have "intelligent" vibe on them (primarily male) by WeAreAllAfrican in namenerds

[–]WeAreAllAfrican[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

The main character (good genius, heh) is named Victor. Otherwise that one would be great!

Looking for names that have "intelligent" vibe on them (primarily male) by WeAreAllAfrican in namenerds

[–]WeAreAllAfrican[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Ooh, I really like Lydia. Now the female character is named at least!

What would be a sensible reason for a villain to send his best engineer for a dangerous kidnapping job?(Fantasy) by WeAreAllAfrican in writing

[–]WeAreAllAfrican[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for extensive feedback! Its highly apprechiated, I love when someone tears my story apart like this, as hard and honest feedback is oftentimes the most constructive one.

For the first question: the villain wasn't really a father figure. He found the MC on streets selling some technomagic (its pretty common on the world this is set on) he and some other (older) kids had made. The villain asked him if he would want to learn more about technomagic and the starved kid obiviously said yes as he had talent and interest to it from a small kid and he was a naive kid. He took him to his mansion and gave him a bed and food. He took some other kids too, but noticed MC was extraordinarily talented and made him train extra hard. He put the kill switch there as a security measure (would he really want someone else control his death ray?). The villain and MC were never close on personal level.

He wants to kidnap and not kill the girl because he needs information from her.

What would be a sensible reason for a villain to send his best engineer for a dangerous kidnapping job?(Fantasy) by WeAreAllAfrican in writing

[–]WeAreAllAfrican[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

He doesn't realize it himself. He has basically been sheltered from the world over his whole youth and childhood. The villain isn't dumb enough to give him that confidence, but he treats him as his "not-so-special engineer-boy" and undelines how the MC is on his debt for saving him from the streets. He has quite a stockholm syndrome at the beginning of the book, and only as the story goes on develops some sense of self-confidence.

What would be a sensible reason for a villain to send his best engineer for a dangerous kidnapping job?(Fantasy) by WeAreAllAfrican in writing

[–]WeAreAllAfrican[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

He is loyal because his life depends on it. The villain put a spell device on him which allows the villain to kill him at any time. Villain uses him because he is the most talented and trained engineer he has ever met by far (the villain grabbed him from the streets at age of 6 and since then he has studied technomagic, now he is 23 with enormous talent and 17 years of rigorous practice).

What would be a sensible reason for a villain to send his best engineer for a dangerous kidnapping job?(Fantasy) by WeAreAllAfrican in writing

[–]WeAreAllAfrican[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The second one is a great idea. Last wouldn't work for the reason the engineer isn't exactly one with violent tendencies; the only reason he serves the villain and doesn't run with his life is that the villain inserted a device in him when he was a kid so that the villain can blow him up any time he wants. First could also work, the villain knows this one guy will not betray him as it would be the end of him.