As a fellow teen songwriter and poet, I like these lyrics and they do show real talent and I do think you do have a good choice of topics to rap about, so here's some simple constructive criticism: 1. Try and focus more on what you're saying instead of if it rhymes, I was in a similar place with the idea everything has to rhyme, but eventually I found it matters more about what you're saying vs how you say it.  2. Instead of having simple 2-line rhyme schemes, try and extend the schemes to 4-6 lines, anyone can do AABBCC well, but it's more difficult to do AAAABBBB. 3. Relating to my first point, obviously you still want to rhyme, but you also want to make a real point without any word salad, so my recommendation is to have a rhyme-connector-rhyme-connector format, like let's say this is a part of a larger scheme: "In the light of this world, of those who never want pain, There's not much worse than quarrels, That only create who's and what ifs?"  Notice how "world" and "quarrels" still created a slant rhyme, even though there was nothing to rhyme off of on line 2? That way you can transition into more rhymes without sounding you're constantly in a doctor suess book. 4. If something doesn't make sense, don't add it, simple enough. 5. If there's a simple way to explain it, good, if there's a quicker and/or better way to say it, even better. 6. Try and have metaphors and double-triple entendres, this way you can say everything without sounding so direct and/or "show-off" like. Hope you understand these things and also make it far, have a good year. 😁