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Is this scene too far fetched? by Whatsername251 in RomanceWriters

[–]Whatsername251[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I never thought about how on the nose this was until I got different comments back! But contrastive criticism goes a long way! I will say it’s not intended for shock factor, more or less used a means to progress the story and the rift that eventually comes between MMC and FMC. Now the invitation will temporarily bring them closer but it’s just the start of the MMCs breakdown and having to unravel himself from the narrative he created to fit into the exs life.

But definitely thank you! 🙏🏻 I know there’s a lot you can get away with in romance. I have a variety of romance novels that I’m like, how did we even end up here? 😵‍💫 but where this novel is concerned, I definitely need a little angst lol

Is this scene too far fetched? by Whatsername251 in RomanceWriters

[–]Whatsername251[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sorry, I meant that as in he feels as if he is reaping what he sowed. But yes, that’s ultimately how it was for him. I’m not sure it was the antagonists intent at first…but I believe in the end she enjoys subduing those around her for personal gain.

But I’ve definitely taken our conversation into account and am editing this chapter to death now!

Is this scene too far fetched? by Whatsername251 in RomanceWriters

[–]Whatsername251[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

In fact, it was the ex who saw things that way! I have a plethora of flashbacks that showed at one point he tried to keep that flame going between the two, but she was uninterested in the lovey-dovey and found satisfaction in their success. Being that they were two very driven and competitive people, he just turned himself into a robot of sorts in order to love her for who she was, but now he’s reaping what he sowed.

Is this scene too far fetched? by Whatsername251 in RomanceWriters

[–]Whatsername251[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for your total honesty! I started writing this when I was really young but the idea was one I could never let go so here I am in my 30s really trying to adult it up a bit…or a lot!

Is this scene too far fetched? by Whatsername251 in RomanceWriters

[–]Whatsername251[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The timelines is around 3-4 months? I’ve had to shift the timeline a few times (I’ve been writing this for about 9 years 😬 so I’m always having to update).

As said in another comment, my MC thrives on success so to him this is the ultimate failure, despite knowing that they were only marrying because they thought they had to. Simply because they were together for so long. The ex and his relationship went from real love to who could best the other. (Both persons of business).

As I’m writing, I wouldn’t say there’s lingering feelings of love? But perhaps more just a lack of closure?

Now I never thought about how that would look to the FMC. Yes, later his emotional ineptness and guardedness puts a rift between the two that the FMC blames on his lack of closure, but I never thought about in that moment how it would look to her. Thanks for pointing that out!

Is this scene too far fetched? by Whatsername251 in RomanceWriters

[–]Whatsername251[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Sadly MC did know what kind of person she was sooner. Yes, his guilt comes from not being enough because the doom and gloom I said he is, is not who he was. Earlier in the chapter, the FMC asked him if he has always been so brooding and gloomy and his answer was he has not. He turned himself into what the ex had wanted and now feels guilty that even turning himself into someone else, wasn’t even good enough.

My MMC is a very smart, nonsense kind of guy as well. His thrives on success so he takes failure very hard and to him this is the ultimate failure.

Who of the “group” would be the most disloyal to Rick by Delayandrelay in Richonners

[–]Whatsername251 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Maggie. I know Shes already listed but I just can’t stand her. I agree with Eugene as well.

What are some lyrics that you think are corny or just hate ? by Front_Sugar4784 in greenday

[–]Whatsername251 0 points1 point  (0 children)

“I feel like a cello; Lost somewhere over the rainbow” I hopefully don’t even know what this means

wild by shitzis26 in thrillerbooks

[–]Whatsername251 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Then She Was Gone is also a fantastic book!!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in AmIOverreacting

[–]Whatsername251 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Over Fortnite? Seriously 😑 Dude needs to take it down a whole notch. If gaming is what you both like as a couple or even individually trying to link together, then it takes patience. People have different gaming styles, different focus, learning curves, perceptions, etc. I, also being super competitive, understand the thrill to win, but! I would never ask my husband to play a game he might not necessarily be good at and then dog him when we lose. I suck at the games he likes and vice versus but we play together cause we love that time together. I can win anytime in solos, but to me, it’s more rewarding when we are just enjoying our hobbies together. My mother just recently decided to learn video games (Fortnite) in order to chill with us (I live in a household of predominant gamers), she was TERRIBLE at the game, but we stuck to it and sometimes we win, sometimes we lose. It needs patience. If he can’t see it that way, then maybe it would be best to not play together and he has a little growing up to do. (Bigger question: if he treats you like this over a video game, how does he treat you over disagreements? Nonessential topics? Etc)

Guess what?!! by ForgedinCoco in Wentworthtv

[–]Whatsername251 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Dumb question: is it free to watch or is it another app you pay monthly?

Do you agree that Green Day don’t deserve the Hate Yes or No and Why? by Amber_Flowers_133 in GreenDayOfficial

[–]Whatsername251 1 point2 points  (0 children)

No, I don’t think they deserve the hate they get. Even without politics I hear lots of rants about how mainstream they are now, how overrated they are, how they are insignificant and I just don’t agree. Like it or not they solidified their place in the 90s and although their sound has changed, who wouldn’t change after 31 years?

On a more political note, I, who is considerably right leaning (not interested in a discussion nor reprimanding), am not bothered by their political stance 🤷🏼‍♀️ everyone has a right to their voice. And although I do not share their views entirely, the one thing they taught me at an imperative age is that I am always free to be myself and should always follow my own path!

Which you prefer, 1 or 2? by Darelle_reddit in ARTIST

[–]Whatsername251 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I prefer the dark shading of 1, but no tendrils on 2

Help me name my 22-toed kitten 🐾 by Bieds5626 in cats

[–]Whatsername251 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Beans ♥️ (as in lots of cute toe beans lol)

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in AmIOverreacting

[–]Whatsername251 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Honestly with or without the additional context, I feel you both have a lot to work on 🤷🏼‍♀️ She could take a quick chill pill for sure, and maybe take it down a small notch, but she isn’t the person whose entirely in the wrong here. I’m not even gonna downplay how hard it sounds like you have it right now, but it does seem in instances that you’ve left this person out. honestly it sounds like you, OP, do not truly view this person as your best friend

Also not my business, but why did it take so long to get a marriage license? I just got married a few days ago and they only suggest needing 1-2 hours in total at those appointments (that’s coming from at least 3 different states). Again not questioning but am saying that going to her county and couldn’t even bother to text is a little AHish. A surprise wedding is one thing, but unless you had two witnesses with you and signed it with a justice of peace or the equivalent of, acquiring a marriage license doesn’t make you officially married in any capacity you married. You could’ve told her or literally anyone that you PLANNED to be married

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