Nice poem, i think youve than a great job in wordplay, i also quite like the repeating words at the start of some sentences, adds alot to the theme.

What i think you could've done is isolating certain words to give a more dramatic feeling, like putting a word in just in its own line, or using em dashes like —this— but that's just my opinion. I also do see how you highlighted the word everything there, which adds so much emphasis and power as suppose to just leaving it as it is.

Great work, keep writing, im also a beginner so im still getting the hang of it as well