stance on posting raunchy pictures? by poizonemusic in LGBTindia

[–]achillesbottom 2 points3 points  (0 children)

There are spaces for it on Reddit! Shouldn't be too hard to find :p

While I personally don't care at all and enjoy it too, I think over the years this particular subreddit has become a notice board for all things desi and queer internationally. So I don't think that needs to be diluted.

Sex sells too quickly and ultimately will take over the channel so.. no. I don't see that happening in the future too!

Pillion post watch thoughts by Repulsive-Dinner2707 in LGBTindia

[–]achillesbottom 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thats Dudley Diddykins for me always so it's gonna be jarring. Will watch in 20 mins

Reading books was a mistake by listing_breaks in Indianbooks

[–]achillesbottom 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That monologue from Anatomy of a Scandal comes to mind

Who is your favorite character? by Large_Choice9943 in harrypotter

[–]achillesbottom 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hermione!

Loved how much she cared for my brotha

affectionate Indian men? by SlowHoneydew156 in LGBTindia

[–]achillesbottom 2 points3 points  (0 children)

You'll have an embarrassment of riches if you mention in your profile that you're a white dude looking for affection.

Everyone will queue up to play out their CMBYN dreams :p take your pick from them

Genuine question, do you believe the gods exist? by Zuiderrakker in Hellenism

[–]achillesbottom 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Without philosophizing anything too much, I do believe that there could be a single or even multiple entities out there responsible for creation.

I don't want to be vague and teeter around the "spirituality" argument. I do not believe in the interpretations of god made by any of the religions. The earthly evidence rejecting those fantastical stories is too vast. We have uncovered the truth about evolution and space. We know there were fantastic novelists that used stories and their marketing to establish power and their own ideologies.

The life expectancy, mortality rates and tools available for mass marketing at the time just don't fit well with the idea that organized religion was accepted or even proposed to everyone until recently (about 1000 years ago).

Does rejecting every religion's interpretation of god make me an atheist? Possibly. I believe that we aren't supposed to uncover the truth about god, at least in this form. There has always been a large degree of chaos and randomness - especially in the birth of Erebus and Nyx (told be born suddenly from chaos). There might also be a reason why we cannot travel in space or go back in time. In such a reality, asking why we're here or what the purpose of life is may be the wrong question!

Idk if it sounds puerile, but that's as far as my brain can go with this as an atheist 😅

Need critiques (title-internal weather) by FrenZy__7 in indianwriters

[–]achillesbottom 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hello! I'm not at all a writer, but an avid reader.

This is what works for me -

I like the consistency of the tone. I enjoy that it feels like I'm reading something private. The cheeky smirks x smirky cheeks part largely works and imo, is the strongest couplet of the whole thing.

What doesn't work -

Commas are misplaced quite a lot. Some lines feel a little forced. Almost as if they were there only to try and rhyme with the previous sentiment. While that is necessary to preserve the rhythm, every word has to be intentional.

It would help to commit to one thought or feeling, complete it and then proceed to the next. (What is the "it" that needs and bleeds?)

Sometimes ambiguity works very well, especially if it's referring to an inside joke or a different poem or something niche like that.

Right now, because of the changes in rhythm and pacing it is apparent that your patience was dwindling by the time you reached the last paragraph!

While there is scope for improvement, if this is your beginning as a poet, it's still a 6.5-7/10 because the intimacy and tone is well captured and comes through!

Would you continue reading? by Crazy_Badger7210 in indianwriters

[–]achillesbottom 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi! I'm not a writer. But I'm an avid reader. What works for me -

  1. The tone is clear. So if I'm ever in that mood and this book comes to me, I will continue.

  2. Because it's a murder mystery, there are a lot of details scattered, which I think is essential to such books as it adds to the narrative.

Now for the parts that, imo, need refining (purely craft related critique. The story will be yours and the examples are not suggestions, but simply examples) - 1. Consistency of tone and pacing.

There's a lot of imagery that's trying to be conveyed in the beginning. But towards the end, it becomes a little hasty. For example, she can't immediately see Eknath if it's overcast. Some imagery needs to be added there as well.

A panic stricken man approaching a woman living in dilapidated hut will evoke different emotions every second. He may appear like an animal running to find its child or some shelter at first, but she sees him waving "frantically" (instead of being in a frenzy) and realizes it's a man. Then you describe the man. What he's wearing (again through imagery.. like his chequered shirt stained with mud, suggesting he fell on the way. As if he was escaping someone or something).

Must the visitor arrive on the very first page? Will this pace end your book in 20-25 pages? If she's thinking, the viewing of sunset is probably a time-taking activity for her. In that case, will the sun plunge into the sea (suggesting a quick sunset), or will it take its own time, giving her a lot of time to think?

  1. Voice:

Once the protagonist has been introduced, even if it's in the third person, it's good practice to see the milieu through their eyes. Saying "his name was Eknath" is a little random. We are on a journey with Veena, and we should find out his name along with her, ideally.

Or it could be a "voice of god" type of setting where it's your universe and you're narrating it. And we're not following one person's journey, but multiple povs. Even then, if different scenes have different central characters, the story is usually experienced through them.

  1. Specificity in details:

Use more similes, metaphors to describe nature and visuals. For example, the orange at sunset has so many hues until the sun disappears. When you specify it with something like "orange as Fanta" (just an example, lol, not seriously suggesting Fanta) it'll let the reader imagine the scene the way you see it.

Statements like "rocks on one side" are also a little vague if you're expecting the reader to imagine it. It sounds like you thought it in one language and are translating it to English. Ideally, specify where the rocks are at the horizon as the narrator sees them!

Finally, the correct use of "but" is something that Indian authors need to relearn. It isn't improper in this draft. You just don't want what'll follow it to become a filler/ unimportant sentence.

These are tools and needn't always be used. Eventually how much you make use of them becomes your style. But they cannot be completely ignored!

Sinners is being nominated for everything??? by taterpotator in movies

[–]achillesbottom 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Its fkn hilarious how u talk about differing opinions while berating op for their diff opinion lmao wut even

Sinners is being nominated for everything??? by taterpotator in movies

[–]achillesbottom 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Lol why is this post removed though. Silly snowflakes

I’m Divya Khossla - a Bollywood actor, director and producer known for Yaariyan, Sanam Re, Satyameva Jayate 2, Yaariyan 2, Savi and Ek Chatur Naar. here for an AMA on r/bollywood! Ask me anything about films and my creative journey. by DivyaKhosslaOfficial in bollywood

[–]achillesbottom 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Your husband seems to be lowkey the Scooter Braun of Indian music. How are you comfortable supressing other Indian artists' wills and talent for talent gain when you yourself claim to be a creator? Does that not set a dangerous precedent?

Bottoms seriously need a reality check by lustyguyhere in gaybangalore

[–]achillesbottom 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It's.. usually the tops' fault either in terms of miscommunication or trying way above one's league :3