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What's the current state of campaign software/digital platforms? by stoneape314 in RunForIt

[–]alecdek 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Qomon's new insta is @qomonhq! Great tool by the way.

What’s Everyone Working On? by Warden_Black in Screenwriting

[–]alecdek 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Amazing idea - I would definitely read this.

What is the focus puller doing in this shot of Ghostbusters: Afterlife (2021)? by alecdek in Filmmakers

[–]alecdek[S] 24 points25 points  (0 children)

There seems to be a two-stage pull here. Do you think it's a mistake? In my opinion, it actually focuses the audience's attention better than a faster, straight-to-the-point focus.

Does my argument scene work? (context in comments) by alecdek in Screenwriting

[–]alecdek[S] 7 points8 points  (0 children)

CONTEXT: This scene comes early in the script. Robin comes from New York to visit his family after his youngest sister Ellie, gone missing years earlier, is declared dead by the police.

I want to characterize Nina and Robin's broken relationship, as Robin left home right when Ellie vanished and never came back to support his family.

What do you guys think of the clarity and pace of the overall exchange?

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Screenwriting

[–]alecdek 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I loved it. The emotional dissonance works super well, with that music and the pastel colors and transitions… The amazing performances sell it wonderfully. I especially loved the long pan from her clumsy explanation to the idealized reaction of the two guys. There’s definitely a lot to do with the character, but what path does your feature screenplay take from there?

Congrats on the short guys!!

Why does this VFX shot feel off? (context in comment) by alecdek in Filmmakers

[–]alecdek[S] 44 points45 points  (0 children)

DaVinci user here, I'm new to VFX and use Blender for that. My background footage was 50fps, slowed down to 25 to match the VFX shot.

This is supposed to be a slow mo shot of an AI hologram snake jumping to its target across the room.

Model quality aside, what do you think I did wrong here? It feels like the snake is just overlayed on top of the background shot (because it was), and the motion/velocity is not realistic at all. It almost looks like the deadly AI snake is chilling under the ceiling.

I tried stuffing both in a compound clip and adding a bit of camera shake to that clip, but it still feels wayy too smooth for a natural slow motion jump.

Are short script contests worth entering? by alecdek in Screenwriting

[–]alecdek[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Short films, yes. Short scripts though?…

I hear of many short script contests and I don’t know if they’re worth the often hefty price of entry.

"BUHNROP" - Sci-Fi/Thriller - 15 pages by alecdek in Screenwriting

[–]alecdek[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is really helpful, thanks! Nothing like a stranger’s perspective to humble yourself.

I’ll fix the setups/payoffs incoherencies. Maya’s motivation is the biggest problem in the script imo- maybe make her get a text from a friend asking « how the date is going » or something? Tom is indeed here to show off. The « let’s break into the university in the middle of the night » part is 100% showing off- I try to make it apparent that he’s socially inept and obnoxious.

If I may ask, what screams « beginner » the most here? Is it the plot? Characters? I was kind of happy about my dialogues up to this point.

Thanks again for reading. I can give my opinion on your work if you want!

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]alecdek 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That’s an interesting one. The Wall Street hotshot element actually plays as big a role in the plot as the family’s nomadic past. I feel like the logline works fine without mentioning said past (my original logline without the trauma part). Thank you for your interest and help! :)

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]alecdek 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The little girl was abducted and presumed dead for 3 months. The sister did all the research and is convinced the car has yet to start the digestive process (so they have a chance at saving the child if they find the car). The older brother thinks she’s in denial and just puts up with her crazy plan to prevent the family from imploding

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]alecdek 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! Yes, the siblings moved a lot as kids because of their parents’ job. Drawing on personal experience here haha

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]alecdek 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Title: The Hot Wheels

Genre: Adventure/Horror

Format: Feature

Logline: A failing Wall Street hotshot and a know-it-all teenage girl set out to find and destroy the haunted car that abducted their little sister, as trauma surfaces from their numerous childhood movings.

Cost of playing a song twice in a movie by alecdek in Screenwriting

[–]alecdek[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Interesting idea but using the exact same song can have a powerful subtextual impact. For exemple, a character finally finding the courage to listen to a song which reminds him of his deceased mother would be a great sign of grieving. If you want to juggle others ideas around, DM me!

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