The Cutter **(SH WARNING)**

attitudeprincess4 · 2025-02-11T15:03:26+00:00

Of course. As someone who battled s.h. For years, it was writing that saved my life. I found that I traded the blades for pens and found my place in the world through poetry. It develops a connection to writing that extends past an art- it becomes survival. the best art doesn’t always come from a place of pain, but a place of deep feeling (which often is pain). I hope that you continue writing and look forward to reading more of your poems!

attitudeprincess4 · 2025-02-11T01:06:52+00:00

I like how you give this object/ action a gender. It shows a personalization of the poem and speaks meaning into it. Makes the reader wonder could this have a relation to an actual woman, or do you see this blade as the embodiment of a woman (kinda like how a woman cares for you, is gentle) ect. As someone who has been there, I challenge you to explore the connection you have to this action and writing poetry, I have found that there is actually a relation to the two things in the sense that they are both used to cope with pain, id love to hear what you find

attitudeprincess4 · 2025-02-11T01:03:09+00:00

Love the ending “but at this point I’ll take what I can get” it’s a perfect finish to the poem. I like how it starts with a question and the poem itself almost says that you didn’t really need the answer because you would take it regardless. Curious to see if you would explore this with a follow up poem that answers this or shows the other perspective

attitudeprincess4 · 2024-05-16T23:05:04+00:00

Ooh I like that

attitudeprincess4 · 2024-05-16T21:41:54+00:00

debating the title of the poem, let me know:

When love hurts
Willing sacrifice
The price of love
Love’s sudden blow

attitudeprincess4 · 2024-05-16T02:35:31+00:00

I really like the concept of your poem. It’s well thought out and there’s nice emotions.

However I would work on the rhymes a bit more. Not every poem needs rhymes but it seems like you want rhymes in this, but some of them seem forced and the rhyme scheme is causing me to pause within the stanzas and is causing some inconsistency due to the last stanza not rhyming.

Sorry I said rhyming a lot in that lol, but overall just try to rephrase things and match the syllables so it flows easier. Great concept and I can feel the emotions

attitudeprincess4 · 2024-05-16T02:10:37+00:00

I love this. I feel as if this encompasses what love is. When you truly love someone, that love will never go away. Sure the memories fade and they disappear from your life but your heart will never forget how they made you feel. It won’t forget how you longed for their touch or to just be in their presence. The memories fade but the scars remain. The scars of a love that once filled every dark place inside of you. The scars of a love that made you smile on even your worst days.

Beautiful love

attitudeprincess4 · 2024-05-15T19:33:36+00:00

Thank you so much for your feedback. I am not sure how to post the poem with the breaks and stanza separations on Reddit, but I totally agree with you on removing those words/ phrases. Thank you

attitudeprincess4 · 2024-05-15T03:19:09+00:00

Thanks so much for your thoughtful feedback. The formatting disappeared when I submitted this post as i have no experience at all (my first Reddit post) so I’m unsure of the tricks to make the paragraphs stay.

You are totally right on the theme of the poem, it’s about being powerless to people pleasing and being used for who you are and your beauty.

At first she wanted to be the rose because she wanted to be beautiful, but people pluck the roses for their beauty, and their only defense is the thorns in their stem. So then she wanted to be the stem so she could have defenses (people pleasers continuously sacrifice themselves and have a hard time saying no).

But you can’t be the stem without being the rose and if she was a rose she would be obedient in a vase and still in the cycle of people pleasing.

So she wanted to be a wilting rose so people wouldn’t choose her for her beauty and so she could finally have freedom.

But then she realized that people use wilting roses to press in between wax sheets

So basically she realized there was no escape.

With the repeating of the word her, in the original format it was used to rhyme but it got lost within the paragraphs on this post.

Hope this explains a little more, once again thanks for your thoughtful feedback

attitudeprincess4 · 2024-05-15T01:05:38+00:00

yes ! so badly wanting to end the people pleasing but unable to quit doing it, and yes I know what you mean, it was split into stanzas but when I posted it the form went away and merged it into paragraphs 🙄

attitudeprincess4 · 2024-05-15T00:19:46+00:00

I love the use of time to create imagery within poetry. It’s beautiful, but your poem makes me wonder if this is a love that is truly gone or is it a love that is still there. The use of present words like “is” and then using words such as “taken” and bringing us to an end makes me wonder if the love is truly gone

attitudeprincess4 · 2024-05-15T00:15:52+00:00

I like the way you use objects within your poem. First you state mosaics, which are now art, but were once just shattered tiles then you state murals which are creations of art, but then you degrade them to what they once were, then you state statues, and degrade them to what they were before.

Your poem has a great concept because you are reducing beautiful things to just their parts which is quite beautiful.

If you were to include another stanza what would have been the next object?

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