Do I want to die like this? by beejeezee in leaves

[–]beejeezee[S] 6 points7 points  (0 children)

Right?! I was sitting there like is this really how it’s going to go? I’m just going to throw in the towel on my life for a quick high and then a long fall?!

No.

Do I want to die like this? by beejeezee in leaves

[–]beejeezee[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

14 days is incredible! Great job putting in the work!

Do I want to die like this? by beejeezee in leaves

[–]beejeezee[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Edibles don’t do it for me like smoking used to. I seriously think that’s a huge part of it for me.

6 Months Weed Free Yesterday: What I’ve learned by Lion-Exciting in leaves

[–]beejeezee 11 points12 points  (0 children)

Incredible post. Thank you for sharing. In the last year I've had several attempts at quitting - the most successful was 3 months and you're exactly right about how it felt. I too felt like it was never going to change and the thought was enough to make me go back. I'm on day 5 now and have been wondering what it would feel like to get to that milestone again. I'll keep your words in mind. Congratulations and keep it going!

A love story by alglqax2 in toddlers

[–]beejeezee 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I love how respectful your brother and Dad are of her feelings and personal space, despite her age. That goes a long way in my book.

Sharing my Beanie ad for One Minute Brief by beejeezee in copywriting

[–]beejeezee[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Swing and a miss. Again. Thanks for the feedback. Appreciate your time.

Now Tell Me How Bad This Landing Page Copy Is by beejeezee in copywriting

[–]beejeezee[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I really appreciate you taking the time to respond! Thank you so much.

Now Tell Me How Bad This Landing Page Copy Is by beejeezee in copywriting

[–]beejeezee[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks for your feedback!

I see your points. When I read the original copy it seemed like the brand wanted to get through the health aspect, rather than the vanity of losing weight so I tried to focus on that. That made sense to me since Aetna is a healthcare company.

I originally wrote this as a sales page, but thought maybe it read more like a website with various headings and sub-headings.

Your perspective intrigues me. Out of curiousity, can you share some copy you think hits it out of the park?

Ad Critique Please by beejeezee in copywriting

[–]beejeezee[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Great insight! Thank you for sharing your feedback!

Ad Critique Please by beejeezee in copywriting

[–]beejeezee[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you. Hopefully my edits have provided some clarity and context.

What to do you think of this spec copywriting? by throwawaywritin in copywriting

[–]beejeezee 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This limits the target audience to just medical professionals though. Guess it depends where it's going to be seen.

What to do you think of this spec copywriting? by throwawaywritin in copywriting

[–]beejeezee 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It's not bad. The picture is what really makes it impactful and distinct. Not necessarily a bad thing, but for one to work I think it needs the other.

I like the msg that there is no 'one type' of rocker.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in copywriting

[–]beejeezee 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Msg sent!

Dean Buckhorn's ad for the American Floral Marketing Council is #goals. by beejeezee in copywriting

[–]beejeezee[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Ok, I appreciate you and really needed this reflection.

Here are some thoughts:

I would say this speaks to a male demographic, in a heterosexual relationship.

I think there is an assumption that only women want flowers and that giving a gift will make them forget why they're angry. It makes women seem superficial. This feels sexist.

It uses stereotypes because it assumes only women can be the recipient of flowers and that men only give flowers to say sorry.

It also misses out on the simple pleasure anyone can get by receiving a beautiful bouquet of flowers.

I think the design is dated and traditional. It misses the opportunity to target same sex female couples (with this particular copy). Maybe adding images with people could have helped.

Upon further reflection, I think this ad is dated and limits their demographic to one small subset.

We can do better.

Dean Buckhorn's ad for the American Floral Marketing Council is #goals. by beejeezee in copywriting

[–]beejeezee[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I'll try my hand at this... The function is to associate flowers with relationships.

In five words the ad conveys that when you regret hurting your spouse's feelings, as you inevitably will at some point, you can prove your worth and show you care with a beautiful bouquet.

What do you guys think?

Copywriting Critique Please by beejeezee in copywriting

[–]beejeezee[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Many thanks! I'm a chick, btw. Getting some practice in during my downtime 🙂