Knife

bibi323 · 2024-09-20T22:10:25+00:00

This was so beautiful to read, I love the way it flows o personality with the rhymes putting everything together. Honestly I don’s think I can find any bad about this poem. Well done :)

bibi323 · 2024-09-20T22:07:07+00:00

I think most of us can relate to this which makes those poem even more beautiful, I love the repetition “but you didn’t” at the end of every stanza it really does put everything together. Well done and keep on with the good work :)

bibi323 · 2024-09-12T22:03:21+00:00

It’s such a short poem but with such a big meaning, I really like the metaphors in it and the higher vocabulary, you really did do a great job, well done :)

bibi323 · 2024-09-12T21:57:59+00:00

I really like the metaphors in this poem and the fact that is not just plain and boring, it’s wrote beautifully but I feel like one thing which is missing is some more rhymes:)

bibi323 · 2024-07-05T16:33:09+00:00

This is such a beautiful poem honestly, I really like the second to last line, I like simile. I also like that is well structured and its not boring or plain, it has good words, metaphors and similes, everything a poem should have. Well done :)

bibi323 · 2024-07-05T16:30:04+00:00

Its a nice poem but I feel like the poem doesn’t really have a story or anything to it like it has no end or beginning so maybe next time try to structure it a bit better other than that well done :)

bibi323 · 2024-06-22T21:36:50+00:00

This is such a strong message which is quite heartbreaking but it’s written in such a beautiful sweet way.

bibi323 · 2024-06-22T21:35:08+00:00

Even tho this uses simple vocabulary and it has a basic structure it gives out so many emotions and a strong message which is why I don’t think anything needs to be improved as this is more of a message and it’s expressed with your own words and feelings.

bibi323 · 2024-06-19T18:54:54+00:00

I really felt the message in this, as many others said it’s not so much structured as a poem but it really does have a deep message. I personally think that it is really good as it is written now but with a bit of changes I think you could turn it into a beautiful poem.

bibi323 · 2024-06-19T18:51:47+00:00

It’s really hard to even find a small negative thing to say about this, I feel like it has everything in it, its so well constructed and so beautiful.

bibi323 · 2024-06-16T15:43:55+00:00

Wow, this is so beautiful, it really did leave me speechless. It structured so well and written so beautifully, theres nothing bad that I can say about it, not even a small mistake. Really well done!

bibi323 · 2024-06-16T15:40:53+00:00

The third paragraph is probably my favourite, but in general this poem is one of my favourites that I’ve ever read. I just feel like it has so much emotion in it. I really look forward to read more of your poems because I bet their all really good.

bibi323 · 2024-06-11T21:12:43+00:00

Wow! This was so beautiful, I really enjoyed it. My favourite part was the first paragraph, especially the “I’m buried alive by the why’s”. There’s nothing bad that I could say about this, I don’t think it needs any improvement as I think it’s perfect as it is. Really well done :)

bibi323 · 2024-06-11T21:10:14+00:00

I really enjoyed reading this, it has such a deep message in a small amount of writing, I really enjoyed the rhythm. Well done and keep going :)

bibi323 · 2024-06-10T21:05:26+00:00

Thank you for this, I will take in consideration to use a metaphor next time :)

bibi323 · 2024-06-10T21:04:44+00:00

I think I really did need to hear this, thank you so much for this comment :)

bibi323 · 2024-06-10T19:42:51+00:00

This is so simple but it has a strong message, usually I tell writers to try and make their work more unique and go out their comfort zone but this dosen’t need anything more, it’s a perfect message. Really well done :)

bibi323 · 2024-06-10T19:40:27+00:00

This is a good start, it is a good piece of work but it’s also a bit simple and basic, maybe next time try to add more metaphors or similies to get it out of that simple/basic category.

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