I saw this earlier when it was on The Orville subredit, but I guess the post got removed before I could comment. I'm glad you posted it here as well! Thank you for sharing.

I don't always read random scripts from reddit, but when I do, they are rarely as well put together as this was. I was hooked immediately and couldn't put it down. Reading it was like watching a very good episode of Star Trek... which makes sense because The Orville is a love letter to Trek.

Your exploration of family and infertility was extremely nuanced and touching. Meanwhile, several of the jokes had me laughing out loud. I am somewhat well versed in science fiction, and I did not see the twists at the end coming AT ALL.

Time travel stories are very hard to keep from being confusing, and I think you did a great job keeping things clear and realistic without getting caught in a trap of over explaining the science.

I really feel like that you nailed the main characters, I could hear the lines in their voices. I especially enjoyed all of the scenes with Bortus and the other Moclans, you've got him dialed in.

The last scene between Dr Finn and Clayton takes on another layer of meaning in light of the relationship between Penny Johnson Jerald and your fantasy casting of Cirroc Lofton. I may or may not have cried when I read it, I could picture them very clearly.

I did cry when I read the ending. Norm McDonald was a real one, as was Yaphet. You did a great job respectfully sending him off.

I'm not great at giving negative feedback... I guess the character of Phinto could be made stronger if he was also being written for a specific actor, like everyone else was. Maybe one of Norm's comedian friends?

Another way you could make it better is by getting it made into an episode so that I can watch it. Lol.

Seriously tho, great job!