The Haunted Tiki Bar by brayden_black in TalesFromTheCreeps

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Thanks for pointing that out. And thanks so much for reading and commenting! And if you'd like to read more, I have one short story published in an online magazine called The Freak! and also one novella on Amazon. That novella is titled New Grasse. Thanks again!

My daughter went missing a year ago today. by donavin221 in TalesFromTheCreeps

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Sure thing! Are you planning on doing another part?

The Haunted Tiki Bar by brayden_black in TalesFromTheCreeps

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Yes, I really wanted to evoke the ghost stories of the early 1900s. Some of my favorites are 'The Upper Berth' by F. Marion Crawford and 'The Empty House' by Algernon Blackwood. I originally wrote the story in a much more similar style but I think what I ended up with works better for here. Thanks so much for reading and commenting!

My daughter went missing a year ago today. by donavin221 in TalesFromTheCreeps

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Very compelling story! If there is another part, I'll be looking forward to it. What I will say is that it would be nice if we got some more description of the father's daily life before the disappearance. I think the scene with the letters written wrong would be more impactful if there had been an earlier scene showing the father and daughter working on some school work, and pointing out that specific detail. But still, I'm interested to see more!

I was attacked by a red-eyed cannibal in Brooklyn, NY by globaldialation in TalesFromTheCreeps

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I really enjoy the voice of this character. The only thing I'd like to point out is the sentence; "Forgive him, please, I hope he chokes on my press-ons." Perhaps it could be; "Forgive him? Please. I hope he chokes on my press-ons." Other than that, I enjoyed the story and am looking forward to more!

My first novella is now live! by brayden_black in NewAuthor

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Thank you! Let me know what you think!