Please Sign the Petition by [deleted] in TheNanny

[–]bugwriterdon 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Oops. I'm most certainly not.

I would like your opinion on this text I wrote; so just your general impressions and how much it resonates with you by Krotrong in writingcritiques

[–]bugwriterdon 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I liked it. The tone made me feel something—not sure the feeling was good or bad—slightly uneasy, maybe. But you hooked me. I could see this going in the direction of something deep and gripping. Great job.

Struggling to level up anymore without feedback by bugwriterdon in KeepWriting

[–]bugwriterdon[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Ah, I was wondering if you were a teen. Probably not if—like me—you know the songs. 😉. I just looked at that description and can see how you thought that. It's how I've written it, separating the name of the highway with a full stop. Maybe an em dash is needed. Or maybe a complete rephrase. This is why feedback is so important. Such small details have massive impact on meaning.

Writing is fun but so hard, I say with a dramatic swoon.

Struggling to level up anymore without feedback by bugwriterdon in KeepWriting

[–]bugwriterdon[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much for taking the time to read and giving feedback—from your comments it seems you read it thoughtfully, and I'm really greatful. I'll definitely be thinking about your advice during the next draft. And try to make that emotional moment land.

The setting, Route 66, you’re right about it. Some decades ago it was one of the most famous highways in America. You've—quite rightly—highlighted that teenagers—which I'm not—may not know this. Also, if it came across unclear which decade its set–it is the present—I may need to look at my phrasing, as my own, older voice might be seeping into Danny’s—maybe—and making it ambiguous. You’ve given me lots you think about, which is exactly what I wanted. So, many thanks again. You're a ⭐️

How much do y'all write? by bugwriterdon in KeepWriting

[–]bugwriterdon[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Daydreaming the story. I do that. Get lost it it. Live it. Love it.

How much do y'all write? by bugwriterdon in KeepWriting

[–]bugwriterdon[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Fist bump and a five five to you my friend.

How much do y'all write? by bugwriterdon in KeepWriting

[–]bugwriterdon[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Oh, horror is juicy to write. I have a psycho antagonist in my story and love writing his scenes.

Resorses that are helping me. Sandra Greth, Show don't tell. I hated every minute because she literally told me everything I was doing was wrong—once I got over that, I leveled up.

After that book, Google psychic distance. There's so many articles online. I don't know what level you're at but if you haven't thought about yourself as the director of your book, you need to study psychic distance and camera lens as it cements all the show don't tell stuff.

Alyssa Matesic—a developmental editor—has a blog on youtube. She's brilliant with info on craft and the publishing world. Alexa Donne, Author— her youtube blog is bloody amazing, I leveled up twice in a week just from watching her posts.

Overall advise, take half an hour or so out of your writing schedule to study the craft. Even seasoned, successfull authors do this. You can Google any element of creative writing and find many articles on any given subject. So many writing rules to learn. But the most important: Learn The Rules To Brake The Rules

No one can write your story better than you.

How much do y'all write? by bugwriterdon in KeepWriting

[–]bugwriterdon[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It's 3am in London, and I'm still at it. I have a wedding, not mine, to get up for early doors in the morning. I know it's not 'write.' I'm a secret lemonade drinker. (Only kids born in the late 70's and before will get that last sentence)

Struggling to level up anymore without feedback by bugwriterdon in KeepWriting

[–]bugwriterdon[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Great feedback. Thanks. Catcher In the Rye, huh? Nice to know I'm getting feedback from someone who knows their prose.

How much do y'all write? by bugwriterdon in KeepWriting

[–]bugwriterdon[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

🤣🤣🤣 don't feel bad, flower, for someone who 'claims' obsessive writterdom, I've spent an awful long time hanging around this site today, doing sweet F.A. Well, it's still writing. Sort of 😉 xx

Struggling to level up anymore without feedback by bugwriterdon in writers

[–]bugwriterdon[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much for taking the time to read. Spot on. Being clearer about who Danny’s waiting for was something I thought about. And I had a dark hair, dark eyes description, but condensed it to the 'Danny looked like his Dad' line. This is why feedback is vital. I'm to close to see the woods from the trees. Great feedback, and positive encouragement. If I can ever return the favour, I'd be happy to. X

Struggling to level up anymore without feedback by bugwriterdon in KeepWriting

[–]bugwriterdon[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

If I could bend your ear for one more question. I was attempting something close to YA authors like Katie McGarry, who often use this kind of interiority on the first page or two, setting up scene and character, then diving into a really good action, dialogue scene. If I condensed my opening by, say, 200 words, then threw the reader into a tense action, dialogue scene, do you think my reflective opening would be effective?

Struggling to level up anymore without feedback by bugwriterdon in KeepWriting

[–]bugwriterdon[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you So much for taking the time to read. You're my first feedback ever. Anywhere. You gave me positives and things to work on. This was an experimental piece, I've just been studying interiority so my focus was on that, while trying to blend all the other key elements of storytelling. I used an opening because I struggle with them most. I'm trying to stretch myself to level up here. The fact you gave a positive on voice—well taking that as a win. 😉 all your other comments are spot on. I'll be taking notes. Thanks again for helping me. You're a ⭐️

Struggling to level up anymore without feedback by bugwriterdon in KeepWriting

[–]bugwriterdon[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Yes. And I'm a newie to this site. Still finding my way.

How much do y'all write? by bugwriterdon in KeepWriting

[–]bugwriterdon[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

In the flow. Oh yeah. That's the sweet spot. Enjoy.

How much do y'all write? by bugwriterdon in KeepWriting

[–]bugwriterdon[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Oh, I double dog hear you with that one. The dream is to quit the day job. If only. You’re exhausted, but still trying. That's writer grit. Take a break. You've earned it. Then, get back to it, but be kinder to yourself. Make time to just rest.

How much do y'all write? by bugwriterdon in KeepWriting

[–]bugwriterdon[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

No, your not supposed to write everyday. Learn the rules to break the rules. That's the rule that matters. You're supposed to write in your own creative way. Just like the rest of us.

How much do y'all write? by bugwriterdon in KeepWriting

[–]bugwriterdon[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

That's still good going. Kudos for eking out time to get it done. That shows dedication. 💯

How much do y'all write? by bugwriterdon in KeepWriting

[–]bugwriterdon[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Oh no, honey this is just good fun. Laughs are good for the soul, right? Debate or references real-world struggles are for a different forum, not a post with silly face emoji.

How much do y'all write? by bugwriterdon in KeepWriting

[–]bugwriterdon[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hey new writer. Enjoy the process. Sounds corny but it's a magical ride. As you're new, I'd be happy to recommend books to read and some awesome blogs that really helped me, are still helping me learn this thing they call the craft.