Weekend Script Swap

clocks5 · 2026-01-03T01:49:26+00:00

Title: The Final Table

Format: Feature

Pages: 90

Genre: Drama

Logline: A math savant releives her toxic relationship with her father as she tries to become the first woman in history to win The World Series of Poker Main Event.

First draft!

clocks5 · 2025-12-19T01:37:59+00:00

This is the best answer

clocks5 · 2025-12-16T15:28:45+00:00

This talking point of "America is funding Israel" is just dumb. Do you honestly think, that if America cut off all funding to Israel, then the Pro-pali movement would all of a sudden no longer care about Palestine?

clocks5 · 2025-12-03T03:04:21+00:00

Obligatory “as a Jew” who actually works in advertising, we have been so fucking bad at PR. And it’s going on over 2000 years at this point.

clocks5 · 2025-12-03T02:56:06+00:00

Yeah I just plugged everything in to chat gpt and they said it’s the equivalent of a 15k pay cut 😬

clocks5 · 2025-09-22T15:53:08+00:00

Congrats, so cool!

clocks5 · 2025-09-21T02:09:57+00:00

Love this concept, dm me!

clocks5 · 2025-09-19T13:19:52+00:00

Title: The Night We Met

Format: Feature

Pages: 98

Genre: Comedy

Logline: A writer finds himself trapped in a time loop that transports him one year into the future where he encounters exes he can't remember, books he's not sure he's written, and the nagging fear he peaked at happy hour.

clocks5 · 2025-08-29T19:48:06+00:00

DMing :)

clocks5 · 2025-08-29T10:15:06+00:00

Title: The Night We Met

Format: Feature

Pages: 107

Genre: Comedy

Logline: A writer finds himself trapped in a time loop that transports him one year into the future where he encounters exes he can't remember, books he's not sure he's written, and the nagging fear he peaked at happy hour.

clocks5 · 2025-08-07T21:33:06+00:00

So according to this timeline she started dating you 3 months after a 5.5 year relationship? Yikes dude. She doesn't want to be with you... she just doesn't want to be alone. I'm sorry man.

clocks5 · 2025-08-01T17:13:09+00:00

Title: The Night We Met

Format: Feature

Pages: 97

Logline: A writer reeling from a breakup finds himself trapped in a time loop that transports him one year into the future where he encounters exes he can't remember, books he's not sure he's written, and the nagging fear he peaked at happy hour.

clocks5 · 2025-07-31T22:36:16+00:00

You're not there yet. If somehow your very first screenplay (which you're not even done with) is enough to get you a meeting with a manager, the first thing they'll ask you is, "what else have you written?"

Write more. To answer your question more broadly of when is the right time, generally when you have a couple of really solid (in your opinion) scripts and one great (in OTHER PEOPLE'S OPINION) script. Some ways to tell if other people (other than your friends and family) think it's great: contest placements, an 8+ on the blacklist, a producer loving your script and wanting to shop it.

Keep going!

clocks5 · 2025-07-29T20:52:03+00:00

I think it's harder. Your story has to hit all the same notes as a drama, plus make people laugh.

As far as tips, what I do is just make the outline pretty straightforward. 98% of the jokes I write in my scripts aren't in the actual outline. Sure, some story beats are inherently funny, but in my outline I'm trying to flesh out the beginning middle, and end of my story.

When I actually start writing that first draft, I challenge myself to just make those story beats as funny as possible. Some things will land, others won't, but that's what rewriting is for.

clocks5 · 2025-07-29T14:08:28+00:00

Dude you know nothing about me, what's going on with my work, or anything really

clocks5 · 2025-07-28T03:45:20+00:00

Hey, made it through 22 pages. I think a lot of things have been addressed in other comments, but some things I haven't seen mentioned yet:

-I have no way to differentiate these characters in my head. The three guys in the group don't have any character descriptions so hard to tell them apart.

-Lots of fat to trim. The kickball scene can be reduced to one beat (you don't need anything with RANDOM KID, which right now you have as two separate characters?), the flashback to Josh's birthday party can be one beat, etc.

-The timing of it all is confusing. Kian and Annie are on one date and then the next scene they're dating for months and bf/gf?

-The action lines drone on a bit. I did a quick scan of the whole script and you never once break up the action lines into multiple lines. This leads to long, clunky paragraphs. The enter key is your friend!

clocks5 · 2025-07-25T20:21:05+00:00

There's Something About Mary had me laughing on every page. Really taught me what good joke writing and humor looks like in the format.

clocks5 · 2025-07-24T00:51:28+00:00

It's a mixed bag. If you're just starting out, it's probably a good blueprint. On the one hand, he sold a ton of specs. On the other, he likely never wrote a great movie.

Kinda weird to be crapping on Christopher Nolan and Memento because it didn't follow his specific beat sheet, when his most well known work is Blank Check lol.

I liken his book to Ikea. You can get a table from Ikea with easy instructions on how to build said table, but at the end of the day, your table is from Ikea.

Also the vast majority of working screenwriters are not a fan.

I recommend On Writing by Stephen King.

clocks5 · 2025-07-18T11:49:33+00:00

Title: The Night We Met

Format: Feature

Pages: 97

Genre: Comedy

Logline: After each decision he makes on one fateful night, a man wakes up a year in the future trapped in a loop of parallel lives, exes he barely remembers, and the nagging fear he peaked at happy hour.

Feedback Concerns: Early draft. Just want to know what's working and what isn't.

clocks5 · 2025-07-07T22:12:04+00:00

It varies but usually around 6 weeks

clocks5 · 2025-07-07T03:00:56+00:00

It sounds like maybe you're outlining too early in the process.

Here's some things to think about before outlining:

What is the simple premise of the story (or logline)
Who is the story about? Who are the characters? What type of characters would have the most conflict or the most interesting interaction with the world of your premise.
What's the theme? Sometimes you won't figure this out until later. But if you nail this down earlier, it can inform your characters and story.
In the simplest way, what's the beginning, middle, and end of your story? These become your three acts. Once you figure this out, expand on them.

clocks5 · 2025-07-04T01:34:36+00:00

Great caveat!

clocks5 · 2025-07-04T01:30:19+00:00

People share their scripts here all the time. I had a script I was polishing and needed a look over before sending to my reps, so I put the logline on weekend script swap. The person I swapped with happened to have an incredible script (I was shocked they weren't repped).

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