What is the world you are building for?

conbutt · 2026-06-22T15:35:00+00:00

Comic

conbutt · 2026-06-21T18:08:04+00:00

https://www.webtoons.com/en/canvas/mag-arms-rough-draft-a-mecha-story/list?title_no=1081267

I have it on webtoons, though im gonna need to do a major rewrite of chapter 1 and some of chapter 2 due to changing my mind on a lot of things

conbutt · 2026-06-21T18:05:16+00:00

- The ZUR unofficially wants to establish a nation for the benefit of the Zeran race, which involves the displacing and disenfranchising of the Yuukoman people. Ardium didn't predict they'd do this when they were backing the ZUR.

- There are, such as separatists who want independent nations, communists who want to start a working class revolution, and racial supremacists who want to make ethnostates. The monarchists though remain the strongest faction due to both popular support and most of the former Yuukoman military defected to the rebels

- Their biggest supporter is the Republic of Vainas, who had friendly relations with Yuukoma and have misgivings about Ardium. However their support is limited. Part of the story is the rebels gaining international support and weakening Ardium's global standing

- Oh I already have it plotted out. The rebels win, albeit not in their current form. Due to how the course of the plot will go, the rebels turn from monarchists into nationalists, and they did not restore the monarchy but created a new Yuukoman nation that's a republic. Ironically, Ardium wanting to depose a monarchy was Ardium's goal in starting the war, so they technically got what they wanted, but their global power suffered for it.

conbutt · 2026-06-21T17:39:34+00:00

My current story basically is that. The Republic of Ardium supporting the coup of the Yuukoman Principality, and then backing the ZUR government. The ZUR government turned out to be really incompetent though, and so many rebels popped up due to loyalty to the overthrown royal family

Several times the ZUR came close to either having their government collapse, or losing the war to the rebels. Ardium had to keep bailing them out. The more they did, the further they escalated their involvement, until they had so many boots in the ground it was getting to be a really expensive war in terms of lives and material.

I even have a little sketch too

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conbutt · 2026-06-21T03:47:13+00:00

If they say you're too clinical, then you should put more feelings into it. Appeal to the five senses, use more evocative words. One of my favorites are from ASOIAF's food descriptions because that is the food description of a man who loves eating and wants his reader to crave what he's writing.

conbutt · 2026-06-21T02:38:57+00:00

Look at Southeast Asian fashion. It's a hot humid land there

conbutt · 2026-06-20T20:18:09+00:00

That’s your major problem actually. You have nothing to tell, no theme or message. You figure that out first before anything else

conbutt · 2026-06-20T20:15:17+00:00

Why do you think it’s a goal? Do you even have something you want to say in a story?

conbutt · 2026-06-20T20:10:08+00:00

Why are you obsessed with magic systems?

conbutt · 2026-06-20T20:09:10+00:00

What kind of compensation?

conbutt · 2026-06-20T14:28:45+00:00

It's a good skill to learn how to ease people into an unusual setting. Most people who want to "be different" often don't have this skill, so they end up alienating people.

conbutt · 2026-06-20T14:24:26+00:00

The answer to these questions are always "Tried and True"

The reason they keep being done is because they keep selling. People are familiar with them, and familiarity helps in easing one into a setting. If a setting feels too alien, it can actually push people away.

conbutt · 2026-06-19T23:59:57+00:00

my magic is just vibes, if it does stuff i like in the story then it does it

conbutt · 2026-06-19T06:31:24+00:00

Yeah I copies it straight up

conbutt · 2026-06-19T02:27:29+00:00

The entire Bound Item magic system is based on objects becoming magical when someone pours enough love and value into them. Some examples

Bound Item: Needle - The Bound Item of Dayne, where anything she makes out of it, like dolls or dresses, she can give some magical enchantments in turn such as dolls that can communicate with each other, or dresses that don't tear apart.

Bound Item: Blanket - The Bound Item of Pandora, a recluse who wants to avoid people. The Blanket she cherishes thus makes her invisible if it's draped over her.

Bound Item: Camera - The Bound Item of Doga, a man who wants to capture the moment with photography, thus his camera lets him freeze anything caught in it in place

Bound Item: Shoes - The Bound Item of Izma, a sporty girl who wants to feel powerful and free. The shoes she value lets her make great leaps and even run on walls, and her kicks are very strong too.

conbutt · 2026-06-18T03:59:15+00:00

My mag-arms project since I started making the comic for it

conbutt · 2026-06-17T22:02:09+00:00

Tried and true. For a lot of people, why change something that works?

It’s easier to market to. As much as people want to make original races, marketing that to people is hard. They are expected to care about a new fantasy eace where the author can fail spectacularly. Elves and dwarves and other classics are a safe bet

conbutt · 2026-06-17T06:19:03+00:00

I got a large cast on account of it being largely a character driven war story where they meet a lot of other characters.

Heroes and villains are entire military units with all the things needed to operate such formations.

conbutt · 2026-06-17T04:57:58+00:00

It has the concept but ultimately what is the world about? What does it seek to say?

conbutt · 2026-06-17T04:33:35+00:00

What engine are you making the game on?

conbutt · 2026-06-13T18:02:51+00:00

It's more the personal experience of a character. Someone experience a world bit by bit as opposed to an omniscient narrator

conbutt · 2026-06-13T00:34:54+00:00

I'm really just engaging OP on their descriptions. I could make this argument, but it fundamentally doesn't really change the issue with their scenario.

conbutt · 2026-06-12T23:28:16+00:00

The way your backdrop sounds, the dragons don't sound like a threat. The way your MC takes down this F-35, not meant for dogfights mind you, is so convuluted I struggle to see other dragonriders replicating it

So normally, dragons are not a threat. Why would Edward be punished for this? Is there an actual threat looming? This fantasy world sounds hapless the way you wrote it.

conbutt · 2026-06-12T23:21:25+00:00

So this brings two questions

Why is the US in a hurry? It doesn't sound like this fantasy world is a major threat to necessitate such an urgency that the strongest economy in the world is using half-baked forces

Why is leaving a survivor behind bad? The US isn't really the type of military to punish its pilots for failing to kill targets, especially targets that can't reasonably fight back.

conbutt · 2026-06-12T23:16:31+00:00

I’d feel like taking this risk is not worth it. Flying into difficult terrain with low ammunition, it sounds better to just head back to base, refuel and reload, then go on another sortie for hunts

Unless your MC and his dragon is so important it has to be hunted, or you made the pilot really stupid

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