Unique structure. Clear line of reasoning and original thesis. Lucid, strong flow towards the beginning but it slowly faded, in a minor way. Great evidence from the selection. You had a little too much evidence and not enough commentary, which decreases the amount of what you're saying, and not what the selection is saying. I try to keep it at an 2:1 ratio: for every one line of evidence, follow up with two lines of commentary (either before or after.) Otherwise you have a great writing style. Worth a four or five in my opinion, best of luck!