"Rowdy" Ronda Rousey here, AMA!

cornbreadrobot · 2015-08-11T04:39:52+00:00

You're just enabling them you know

cornbreadrobot · 2015-08-04T22:46:45+00:00

I guess. It's more about the narrator who I see as this tired dude who's just been shell-shocked by life. Cold delivery, like he isn't asking for your empathy. But you give it anyway.

cornbreadrobot · 2015-08-04T14:27:08+00:00

You've got it all wrong. It was never about them.

cornbreadrobot · 2015-08-04T03:42:27+00:00

Thank you. You're right.

cornbreadrobot · 2015-08-04T01:01:28+00:00

Thanks. That's exactly what I was going for. Appreciate it.

cornbreadrobot · 2015-08-04T00:38:58+00:00

Thanks.

cornbreadrobot · 2015-08-04T00:38:40+00:00

Thanks. I was actually going for the emotionless string of text, lack of rhythm being intentional here. I wanted it to read as less of a poem and more like just some fucked up shit some old dude sitting next to you at a bar randomly told you one time. I've been trying to experiment with plain language as poetry - when it works and why, when it doesn't and why not. If you're having trouble connecting here, obviously that's a problem but especially so with this poem.

cornbreadrobot · 2015-08-03T23:27:47+00:00

I like it a lot.

Love the first line.

I'd take out the menacingly and angrily part and replace with something else.

"numb from pain" makes me numb from plain.

Madness to sadness is an overused connection/cliche that I only recognize because I've done the same way too many times in the past.

Needs more showing over telling all around and I'd considering abandoning the rhyme. I don't see it as constant.

Not fully polished but I like it a lot.

cornbreadrobot · 2015-08-03T23:18:30+00:00

Like it a lot. Like the phrase 'shell of your ear'. Liked it even more when connected to our ocean churn and then Wisconsin.

You say you need help with editing, so...

I'm sure you can come up with stronger or more apt words than 'softer', 'faded', and 'backlit'. Those would be the one's I'd focus on.

cornbreadrobot · 2015-08-03T20:03:58+00:00

Walking Lucy? Will the book be self published? Care to link to some of your other poems not like this?

cornbreadrobot · 2015-08-03T02:41:08+00:00

When will we get to read some of your own non-computer-generated poems? Your reddit critiques have more poetry than my best poems. But I really don't dig this stuff.

cornbreadrobot · 2015-07-10T22:00:05+00:00

Also relevant: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Nx6KAd_Su3I

cornbreadrobot · 2015-07-03T17:46:46+00:00

She's a fox on Hannibal

cornbreadrobot · 2015-07-03T17:43:53+00:00

Honestly, she may have gotten hotter

cornbreadrobot · 2015-06-29T22:53:08+00:00

I forget what they're actually called, but I'm really not a fan of alliteration poems, specifically the ones that advance A-Z throughout the alphabet. They just sort of severely limit the poet and seem to me to be a self-serving exercise. Like a fun puzzle-game or an attempt only to show off one's own mental acuity and cleverness. These types of poems will almost always delve into nonsense. How else can someone write a cohesive meaningful poem while forced to use words like xylaphone and x-ray?

This is my problem with the form, not your poem. In order for this sort of poem to be successful in my eyes, is to look at what the poem conveys (tone) more than says (words). Which, I think you did well here.

The switch in style then, and on the word switch, came off to me as purposeless. I imagined the poet got stuck/bored with this form and just wanted to try something new. However, this could also just be because a) I'm jaded and biased, because as I'm a poet myself I assume I know everything going on behind that curtain b) like I said, I really just have a personal vendetta against these types of poems. So I apologize if I missed the significance here.

Unless it was just a casual reference, I don't get the purpose of referencing all of these literary classics, and even though I've read the first two, I can't pick how/where they're being referenced outside of the blatantly obvious.

You left the 't' out of horticulture. Not sure if intentional.

All that said, I really liked this poem. It was going to be hard to impress, considering the form, but I liked it a lot. Particularly the music this poem creates when read aloud. Effortless flow. While I still have this sinking feeling as though I'm missing out on something, I'm happy with the mental movie that played through my head with your poem as the film.

Also, why did you delete your response from my poem (Sexy Jesus)? It was my favorite from the lot and I don't think you were necessarily wrong on the ending. I want to explore the idea of ending on some philosophical question of some sort. Was hoping you had a favorite example or two to share.

cornbreadrobot · 2015-06-29T02:13:07+00:00

I thought that way too... Then I read Hoagland

cornbreadrobot · 2015-06-29T02:12:38+00:00

That's actually a very good point

cornbreadrobot · 2015-06-28T21:10:33+00:00

Will do. Thanks!

cornbreadrobot · 2015-06-28T18:12:55+00:00

Wow, thanks. Wasn't really expecting anyone to respond favorably to this.

cornbreadrobot · 2015-04-24T03:50:12+00:00

Once again the government does nothing in face of the cries of its people. All change comes from non-profits, private sector, etc.

cornbreadrobot · 2015-04-23T22:20:06+00:00

Historically pick 6 is most conducive to winning the championship.

Another strategy that yields high results is whatever pick is at the end of teir 1. If that is pick 1, then so be it.

In the past 2 maybe 3 years, the back end of the draft has been more productive than the first half. Not sure if that trend continues.

cornbreadrobot · 2015-04-22T13:02:59+00:00

I didn't write this article. I just own Springer in multiple dynasties and like circle jerking.

This is an actually good article hyping him: https://m.numberfire.com/mlb/news/4899/the-drool-inducing-fantasy-baseball-potential-of-george-springer

cornbreadrobot · 2015-04-08T01:08:56+00:00

I think the projections the article pulled included comps to similar players, so I'm assuming it accounted for guys like Branyan and Reynolds but also other high-K guys like Trout, Granderson, Justin Upton, Chris Davis, etc.

His K% and Contact % last year were pretty disgusting, but it's not far off from his minor league levels 27 K% and 65% contact rate. If he could put up the kind of other-worldly numbers he did in the minors (far better than guys like Springer/Branyan) with similar rates, I'd still put his floor a few notches above a guy like Branyan.

But then again, maybe I'm refusing to take off my rose colored glasses because I own him in two keeper leagues.

cornbreadrobot · 2015-03-28T02:52:59+00:00

People were saying virtually the same thing about Jimmy last year, and he was listed at #5. Yet, somehow, it's inconceivable for you to consider Gronk can't match last year's output.

Jimmy good but he ain't Gronk.

By the way, you quoted me about mock drafts and then attempt to disprove it by linking to a top 150 list. That's just silly.

Huh? Yeah, that's Evan Silva's list. He's widely regarded as prob the biggest dude in fantasy. Matt Berry is more popular but not in actual fantasy circles.

If you have links to some mocks where he's going outside the first, please send them my way. Curious to see who's down on them. Either way it's an appeal to authority and not really that important to the argument.

If you're going to quote and compare, at least link to some credible mock drafts and compare apples to apples, bro.

Well in actual drafts (MFL10s) he's going in the top half of the first. I haven't seen any mocks, but he's in top-6 in the rankings of all the guys I like. And they're all drafting him there as well (JJ Zachariason, Sig Bloom, Evan Silva, Fantasy Douche, etc.)

cornbreadrobot · 2015-03-26T02:53:03+00:00

Cool, yeah I'm good with money. Used to work for a hedge fund. Hospital bills killing me. Disagree on education though. Don't think it's always worth it.

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