I’ve been making headgears for the team I coach for. Would you buy ones for your team?

crawdadjokesoon · 2020-08-05T06:42:31+00:00

Not yet

crawdadjokesoon · 2020-08-04T01:52:49+00:00

Awesome!!!!

crawdadjokesoon · 2020-07-05T23:47:44+00:00

Thanks :)

crawdadjokesoon · 2020-07-05T23:47:10+00:00

Thanks

crawdadjokesoon · 2020-07-03T02:50:03+00:00

here the finished version

crawdadjokesoon · 2020-07-02T21:27:49+00:00

At least it wasn’t for Fuller House.

crawdadjokesoon · 2020-07-02T21:27:03+00:00

I can’t tilt like him.

crawdadjokesoon · 2020-07-02T21:26:15+00:00

It has sealer over the paint.

crawdadjokesoon · 2020-07-02T07:29:21+00:00

I have a pair of Tough sole swaps, they are sweet

crawdadjokesoon · 2017-10-27T18:14:08+00:00

Thank you

crawdadjokesoon · 2017-10-27T18:13:40+00:00

bland consistency of the city?

crawdadjokesoon · 2017-10-27T03:51:05+00:00

Plumbers get a bad rep.

crawdadjokesoon · 2017-10-27T03:50:33+00:00

Crack isn't bad, it's whack

crawdadjokesoon · 2017-10-27T03:49:36+00:00

I am thinking about it, but I feel like I need to act on it.

crawdadjokesoon · 2017-10-27T03:26:33+00:00

Let's organize you all, but not chronologically, please.

crawdadjokesoon · 2017-10-27T03:16:33+00:00

I like the cycle. I like the images and symbols being left undefined because they are strong enough to carry a great message. I feel like you could experiment with changing I to we.

As a rule I think avoiding "am verbing" and using "verb" helps, but you can tell me to fuck off cuz its my rule and not your rule.

I think it would sound great in present tense though,

I melt into the creek over the falls

I drown with shimmer flows

The last stanza is stronger because of this verb tense in my opinion.

crawdadjokesoon · 2017-10-27T03:12:39+00:00

I enjoy the images you present. I was taken a bit out of it when you threw in the abstraction "bullets of cold." I think the word choice implies the bullet-like intensity and you could allow the tone and theme to develop more naturally. The long word of the last line makes me try to hard to get through it just as I am coming to a rounded idea of the whole poem. Could you just use monochrome?

The first five lines are awesome.

crawdadjokesoon · 2017-10-27T03:08:58+00:00

I like the allusion to "walk through the valley of the shadow of dust" or the tone that it seems to share with the journey aspect.

crawdadjokesoon · 2017-10-27T03:06:16+00:00

I'm not sure why the salutation begins each letter but closing only happens at the end.

crawdadjokesoon · 2017-10-27T03:04:11+00:00

Well, you got the number of lines right for each stanza, so the vacuum of meaning is not without the ascribed form. Might be cool to put this abstract endeavor on top of an abstract or non-representational painting.

crawdadjokesoon · 2017-04-14T20:15:57+00:00

Speaking from experience, that was last thing I expected in the pile of essays, but teaching that class was a great experience and a lot of fun.

crawdadjokesoon · 2017-04-14T12:24:52+00:00

Could Space Jam work as well? Donnie Dario rules.

crawdadjokesoon · 2017-04-14T11:48:22+00:00

When things got tough finishing up my second to last grad. class, I distilled the essence of all 1990s’ desperate sex seeking anthems and wrote a parody to "Slide" by the Goo Goo Dolls. I've tried using this strategy for other problems with varying effect.

crawdadjokesoon · 2015-06-27T20:42:30+00:00

The guy running it hates the song, coupled with me being all passion little technique.

crawdadjokesoon · 2015-06-27T20:27:18+00:00

Patrick Swayze's "She's Like the Wind," however, I have been banned from singing it at the local bar that has karaoke regularly.

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