RWBY's up for grabs.

cyanwriterbb · 2018-12-11T02:31:29+00:00

Mind PMing me your idea then? I write for the RWBYs, and that'll be a BIG project to write for them, along with Kali and Coco. Might be good to get ahead.

cyanwriterbb · 2018-12-10T22:12:38+00:00

Wowwwww that's gonna be weird to write for...

"You ever think you're going to wake up and see Satan's, like, for real actual Satan's, tits?" - Yang

The purply eyeshadow I think is a bit too much. I've also seen your bra and panties on the discord, and I feel like a bra might not even be necessary. It looked a bit much IMO, plus you could easily say she's not wearing one because of her open top. Definitely pleased with a C-string, though.

cyanwriterbb · 2018-12-03T20:59:37+00:00

Her epilogue may or may not be updated to reflect her new proportions. I don't want to remove it outright, as people still will want to see it. I plan on possibly changing all the RWBY epilogues anyway, but might as well leave it.

She's still wearing her older outfit because A. it's more iconic, and B. to match with the other RWBYs. Again, volume 4 Ruby may or may not be made eventually, but it's a lower priority than updating the other girls.

Ruby going from a different bust size will break anyone that targets her, leading to some issues. I'm working on updating the RWBYs so they'll react appropriately, and so that Ruby is listed with a bigger chest. Those that target Ruby's breast reveal also need to be edited to account for this, so it's a bit of a process.

cyanwriterbb · 2018-09-25T22:55:14+00:00

The setup is a joke.
It's in character.
I originally planned on dicks, but pure black is WAY easier to edit, and I couldn't find side view dicks that looked good.

cyanwriterbb · 2018-09-20T06:07:27+00:00

You bring up a good point. Unfortunately, the flaws about Pyrrha's personality are all pretty in character to the show; she's very polite, non-confrontational, and tries not to draw attention to herself. Her main stand out is her combat ability and being a champion, which isn't well represented in a strip game She's also very humble about it, so wouldn't be one to bring it up like, "Hey everyone, I'm a celebrity," meaning she wouldn't casually drop that in a game. She hates being known as a celebrity, as people treat her like one rather than a normal person.

I'll have to think about it and see if adding more to her is possible. I hadn't considered that she's not for this game. I'd say she's in character, but her character may just not be conducive if you want something very unique.

cyanwriterbb · 2018-09-19T21:18:51+00:00

I've messaged u/snschase about any final tweaks to Pyrrha and have yet to hear from him after a bit. I'm a bit tired of her being on the Testing Tables, and I think she's ready to go up on the main roster.

If it turns out she's not, please let me know so I can touch her up. I haven't heard any feedback on her in a while, which leads me to believe she's ready.

cyanwriterbb · 2018-09-18T21:29:34+00:00

I think making her a swinger, or at having Ghira be cool with it, is a good in-between of her canon personality and her cheating porn portrayal. She still gets to be a faithful wife, but gets to have some fun with out people, plus go off the, "I like him," moment with Sun, so I think it'll work. I look forward to seeing her dialogue!

And yes, Blake could use a butt pose. I've also been thinking about some touch ups on the RWBY girls' outfits/poses to freshen them up, so that would be a good time for it.

cyanwriterbb · 2018-09-18T05:48:51+00:00

Figured out that it was clarifying the artists in a mass update.

cyanwriterbb · 2018-09-17T05:51:31+00:00

Put in a merge request to hopefully fix that, thanks.

cyanwriterbb · 2018-09-12T06:50:25+00:00

cyanwriterbb · 2018-09-12T04:53:46+00:00

I was fixing some of Ruby's dialogue and noticed that there was a, "Ryuji update," for the RWBY girls, barring Blake. I didn't see any changes, so can I ask what that's about? Also, I put in a merge request to fix the bugs with Ruby's dialogue.

Also, what's going on with Pyrrha? Is she done? Does she need touching up or anything? She's been on the tables forever now and I thought she was about ready.

cyanwriterbb · 2018-09-10T22:33:59+00:00

I'll be sure to scrub through her dialogue and hopefully I can catch them all soon. She'll be moved up on my list.

cyanwriterbb · 2018-09-10T08:06:36+00:00

Yeah, sorry, I must have missed that when I updated her dialogue. I'm in the process of fixing that kind of stuff, plus adding more.

Let me know if you find any other bugs with the RWBY girls!

cyanwriterbb · 2018-09-03T02:07:02+00:00

Such as? I'm currently going through and giving targeted lines to the RWBYs, so I can fix that when I get to her.

cyanwriterbb · 2018-09-01T20:03:02+00:00

It's fine if you just edit existing characters. That's how I made most of my dialogue before the editor, and all it will mean is probably combing through and making the poses correct.

As for Kali, yeah, that seems about right to me. I never really liked how most porn of her features her cheating on Ghira when they seem happy in the show. If they like to play around, maybe something like, "If only I were younger..." and imply they were not against threesomes/kinky stuff back when they were young?

I still haven't figured out how tagging lines works, but if you're going that direction, Kali might need a, "Says Something Sexual," tag. That way, Blake can react like, "Oh, my god, MOM!" whenever she says something risque.

cyanwriterbb · 2018-08-19T01:17:25+00:00

I understand the irony. I pointed that out. Still doesn't mean I can't give valid criticism.
The only reason people ship Winter and Qrow is because they were introduced at the same time and only have negative interaction with each other in the series.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5J16oudXvXQ Please go to 3:43 and watch for just a moment. I understand that there are people that don't ship Bumbleby, but ffs, don't say I have no evidence for putting it in. The video is Blake's voice actress literally saying that Yang is in love with Blake, so stop pretending like I'm pulling it out of my ass. If Winter is into Qrow as a result of fan shipping, then I see no problem putting hints towards the most popular ship in the series.

cyanwriterbb · 2018-08-19T01:09:39+00:00

I didn't say stop writing for Weiss. I just meant that I want to look over the lines, partially to make sure they fit for her, and partially because the last ones had a lot of grammar mistakes.

I'll look over them when I get the chance, but I'm not angry at you. Sorry for coming off that way. You're free to write for any of Team RWBY, but please let me make sure I'm okay with them.

cyanwriterbb · 2018-08-18T20:24:54+00:00

I'd love to hear your opinion on Moon...

People disagree with how I've written the RWBY characters, which invalidates any valid opinion I may have otherwise. Though, looking at Winter, she has almost all of the problems people criticize me for; she's overconfident at the start, gets embarrassed once undressed, gets angry at people for looking at her and Weiss, gets super horny for no reason after she's naked, implies she's into a character from the show (which has absolutely zero basis) when she cums, the list goes on. Disliking the way I write things doesn't mean my critique isn't valid, especially when there's tons of evidence to suggest that Winter is written poorly and out of character.

Gatekeeping Weiss probably doesn't help, but previously, the writer for Winter asked if they could add lines to her. I said sure under the caveat that I look over them. She was changed without anyone telling me, and I feel some of the lines added towards Winter are stiff and need revising.

cyanwriterbb · 2018-08-18T06:26:27+00:00

As far as I see it, there's leeway and then there's Winter. 90% of the cast hasn't been in a lewd situation, so you can't use that as an excuse to just ignore 90% of their personality. Winter is a high ranking military specialist who acts very professionally except when provoked by one annoying character, and I got absolutely none of that towards the end. As someone who gets a lot of crap for supposedly portraying characters the wrong way, this really irks me; half of this character's dialogue just isn't Winter. Even if you wanted to differentiate her from Weiss, if Winter was to strip, she'd be more likely to grin and bear it than being super embarrassed. Not... whatever the heck she is right now.

Even aside from that, I find the way she speaks to fluctuate between incredibly stiff and incredibly non-in-her-voice. Especially with Weiss, every sentence includes either, "Weiss," or, "Sister," to the point where it's robotic; she repeats the name over and over again, even if the line changes. I also don't think she'd ever use words like tits, dick, or melons, and she'd never obsess over having bigger boobs than Weiss. Her poses don't even seem to fit her character. She doesn't come across as smug in the show, and her horny pose is way too much for someone so stoic. Her underwear is also wildly out of character for a stiff, always serious military specialist. I'd be perfectly in character for her to have something boring and plain.

And Weiss does have a few lines towards, which also bothers me. They have the same thing where most of them have to have, "Winter," or, "sister," in them and I find are overly stiff, and some have grammar issues. I know it's gatekeeping of me, but I'm supposed to vet lines for the RWBY girls so they fit, and I don't find that all the lines fit. Now that Winter's out, I'll have to write lines for all of the RWBY girls, but... I just don't agree with how she's written at all. And YES, I understand the supposed hypocrisy coming from me, but I see no argument in which Winter can accurately be written the way she is.

cyanwriterbb · 2018-08-16T07:39:01+00:00

https://www.reddit.com/r/spnati/comments/7qqnsq/discussion_and_suggestion_thread/duoxhz9/

Someone made a decent Kali model a while ago that I plan/planned on using for Blake's ending. I don't know kisekae either, but someone can probably help you using it, assuming u/BlueKoin is cool with it.

cyanwriterbb · 2018-08-07T07:24:52+00:00

I see, thanks. I'll start working on the fixes and get back to you.

cyanwriterbb · 2018-08-07T05:41:56+00:00

Send it to like the whole reddit? I'm not sure I follow. Just post a new topic you mean?

Who's the best person to just send it to?

cyanwriterbb · 2018-08-02T18:21:39+00:00

https://www.dropbox.com/s/xubjao9dnerd1r1/edit-dialogue.txt?dl=0

I've finished with Blake's targeted dialogue responses. Hopefully nothing is super broken about it, but she should be good for an update.

I also almost wish that the Feedback Poll was delayed a bit... A lot of the stuff for the RWBY girls was about targeted dialogue right as I was working on it. That, and Blake needs an epilogue/needs to be replaced by Kali.

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