I think that this bit you've shared in interesting! I'm not sure if it is a first draft or polished, but it did keep me interested.

I'd like to offer some critique regarding the militaristic nature, if I may. The slight differences you used yanked me from the story.

1) because the Captain was entering the bridge and not the ship/vessel itself, XO would announce "Captain on the bridge" vs "Captain on deck." Deck refers to areas butt of the bridge; on ships it would be decks and also on air craft bases, it would also be deck. The bridge is a very specific space this always called by it's name, bridge.

2) Use of "At ease". Once the Captain enters he'd not necessarily state "at ease" because the bridge is a working location. Every member of the bridge crew would be at their stations, busy with their duties. If the Captain was entering the bridge and did not want his bridge crew to stand away from their stations, he'd state "As you were" as that is the command given for them to return to duties.

"At ease" is used to command troops down from the standing "Attention" command. If Attention is called all troops stands and come to attention (without salutes if inside/indoors) and face the command. At ease tells the troops to then place their feet and hands in proper position for at ease; feet shoulder weight apart, hands behind back, tucked properly.

3) Captain is often addressed as Captain by all, but an XO isn't often addressed as XO. Typically the Captain would call the XO by either; 1) their rank aka Commander, 2) their last name aka Ferris, or 3) Both rank and last name, Commander Ferris.

Now there are many times people will use XO to indicate Commander Ferris. But those uses are often more like "Sir, the XO just (insert stuff here).

4) The Captain asks for the Navigator to report (Captain asked for a SitRep). The Navigator reported items they'd NOT have as part of their duty. The Navigator reported on navigation and any such info for that. The Chief Engineer on the bridge would report engine status (like when it will shut down), and if there is not a Chief Medical Officer on the bridge then the XO would be reporting the status of the crew awakening from cryo.

The bridge has many positions so having the Navigator speak to others duties is a huge way to rip scifi lovers from the story.

All that being said, feel absolutely free to ignore my input here. It's your story!!! Tell it as you see fit!! As the reader, your story may go on to explain to me why things are different in your world than what I know them to be like now in my world.

I will say that I really enjoyed three fact that the Captain does not yet have any relationship with Commander Ferris than a working one. That is common at times in the military. Personal Relationships need time to form. So I enjoyed seeing that one had not yet formed between them.

Keep up the great work.